scoot is my fave chatacter from the series so i wanted to create a story so i hope u like it :D
this is my first story so please dont dislike without leaving a reason (please dont be too judgemental)
When everypony finds out that the young pegasi filly is orphaned and homeless, Rainbow Dash decides to take action, inviting Scootaloo into her home and teaching her to fly. but when Scootaloo earns her cutie mark thing go downhill and Rainbow gets hurt, resulting in Scootaloo becoming mentally and physically depressed. Will she learn the truth about Rainbows minor injuries, or will she continue hurting ponies and herself?
Chapters (7)
I haven't read it, but I can tell the description needs work. Firstly, the whole first paragraph is completely unnecessary. It doesn't tell us anything that might draw us into your story. Now, the main part. Instead of writing along the lines of "In my story this happens blah blah", it should be told more like the blurb of a novel.
Nitpicks:
Typo. Honestly, you should have noticed that.
Yeah, no shit. Also, the block caps are unnecessary.
That's it from me. Oh, and by the way, avoid using emoticons in anything but the comments. It looks unprofessional.
Read it, I liked it, then again I like sad stories, Also please press enter every time a different character talks, makes reading sooooooo much easier.
MY GAWD . THIS IS SAD.
no need to be so annoyed by it. its my first story and i still ahvent really got around this website yet so dont judge or discriminate so cruelly.
No offence. Disliked because you have no grammar. You misspell most of your words, and the plot is UTTERLY HORRIBLE. I really don't know how this got past moderation.
1932683 you do know people have feelings right? i said not to be harsh and if you didn't like it, you didn't have to act like it was the end of the world.... thanks to your comment ive lost all motivation for fixing 'scootaloo's last wish' and now i dont really want to publish 'a hunter's heart'.................
Needs a little polish yes, but overall I liked it and it was a good story
Keep up the good work! 
i liked this story. it was good.
and made me teary eyed.
1932683 well you didnt need to be a jerk about it. just because of spelling errors doesnt mean you need to be so rude about it. and the plot was not horrible. the plot was creative. my point being. if you dont know how to speak with constructive critisism then you should manage a way to not be extremely rude.
1948339 I really disliked the story. Yes I was a jerk but I'm a grammar nazi. I will shout at anyone for making mistakes. :P
1934537 Well i'm sorry I was a bit of a critic, and well, a bitch, really. I shout when people make mistakes. I'm sorry. Will you forgive me?
1960458 well i do say everyone is entitled to their opinions.
1960667 no hard feelings, i over-reacted a bit but its not really a ig deal, everyone can have their own opinions, and that was yours, so i accept that!
It was beautiful, and it made me sad. I enjoyed this story, and I gonna Favorite it.
Really good for being written by a 13 year old, props to you. Sad and detailed, I like that.
It seems like I should have his medical license revoked. The fact that she was coughing leads me to believe that it was not a heart attack and the pannels might cause her heart to stop working properly. You aren't even supposed to touch somepony coughing unless they are silent coughs.
heh, ye have talent kid
This was really great! It was a bit rushed in some areas but other than that you did a great job! I'm also a 13 year old writer so I know how you feel. Keep writing, you have a lot of potential!
Tah? Really?!! No western person says tah! I'm so tired of these weak attempts at western accents, it's embarrassing! I won't down vote though, it's pretty good other than that.
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3 sxootaloo with wingsnflying
( ) <-- heaven
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You know in chapter 4. I was expecting Scoot also to hit Rarity and make a run for it.
Well fart on my dick and call me Santa.
Ehhhh, this is ok at best... I like homeless Scootaloo fics but this is just really really badly-written. I get that this was made by a kid (according to the comments), but it's still just not that great. Usually I ignore the occasional typo or dumb section of a story but the whole fic and how the characters reacted to things was just dumb.
interesting story
oof
nooooooooo!
damn...
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damn dude, that was harsh, but a good story, even if Scootaloo died I feel bad for her