• Member Since 12th May, 2012
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Skeletalbrony


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Lyra retells the story of the one true love in her life. From meeting to it inevitable conclusion, Lyra tells of all the ups and downs in the two years she has spent with who she feels to be her true love, a pony named Bonbon.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 7 )

A grammatical glitch here and there, but I like the way it unfolds.

Nice story, and for your first it's very well written! What's your secret?

I would like to see a second chapter if you're going to continue, so please do! :pinkiehappy:

1831660 My secret is that I read way to much fan fiction :rainbowwild: Although I'm surprised I got one favorite, let alone 5. :twilightoops: I'll make sure to write another chapter! :twilightsmile:

I'm just gonna put a comment here so I have proof that when this story gets swamped with readers, I can say I read this before it became mainstream. Good story, fantastic detail with Lyra's emotions, it was nicely done.

Great story. Its got a case of the feels. I like it. Can't wait for more. And sorry to hear about the breakup. Never fun.

You cannot cancel this! It would be a grave injustice to let such a wonderful idea die on the vine. Oh wait, it looks like you are considering another chapter, never mind I will put my panic mode back in its box.

In all seriousness, this a wonderful opening to a story that looks like it has all kinds of potential. You get Lyra's thoughts and emotions across very smoothly and realistically. The only thing that makes me a little uneasy about the story at all, because I'm a big softie, is that it looks like Lyra will lose Bonbon at some point. Even if the story is a little sad in the end, with the wonderful way that you write, I will enjoy the read.

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