Author's Note
Author's Note
Hello everypony, Please bear in mind that this is my very first fic, its not going to be the best, some parts will probably unintendedly be left unexplained, and things might not be clear. I'm sorry to those of you who felt a lot of things were unclear to you, or not explained in more depth, but this is all I have at the moment I'll be thinking about writing another fic in the future, Pinkamena's Awakening was in all honesty a "rough draft" if I was any good at writing fics and based on most of the positive comments, I think I'll continue writing in the future and I'll try and learn from the mistakes I've made here.
But what do you guys think? To some/most of you, the ending was meh and ended to quickly I understand but was my story good in general? I'd like to hear your feedback to see if I did a decent job at the very least ^~^.
Also, a sequel is possible in the distant future and I'd like to ask all of you, how would you like me to approach it? Would you like me to turn Pinkamena evil again? Or find a way to completely separate her from Pinkie and try to be a nice person?...
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Is there a possibility for a sequel future?
1638359 It is a possibility, but it could be a while before I make one. Also if i were to make one, how would you like me to approach? Would you like me to make her evil again? Or find some way to become completely separate from Pinkie and try to be a nice person?
1638445 The second option, that's the more interesting route to go i think... but i'm you wanna do other stories first right?
Seperate her so they can both live their lives freely.
I thought your story was good, except for the ending. I would say the ending fight didn't really have that EPIC END BATTLE feeling to it.
I think it was because it ended so quickly.
Also for a sequel I would really like the second option where they split, but what exactly happens then is up to you.
1638779 Sounds like most of you want me to split them so that's what I'll do
but it won't be for some time, I have another story in mind that I feel like writing so it'll take some time before I get started on the sequel 
make Twilight try to separate her with a spell just to have Pinkamena end using Twilight's Body. you know like the story "Of Two Minds" but with a creppy feel
1639272 you mean like she tries to separate them but fails and Pinkamena takes over Twilight instead?
1639440 yep, exactly that. its just a weird idea i got
1641826 Why thank you very much
In time I will start with that other story that we discussed, and I also look forward to yours don't forget! 
Still a better horror story than paranormal activity 4
If you do indeed do a sequel, I honestly think you should find a way to separate Pinkamena from Pinkie and have her try to "Fit in", so to speak xD That'll be interesting to see, I think. :D
1693556 I'm sorry that you in general did not like it, and that's fine
however I do not think that I "messed up" looking at the ratio of likes to dislikes. But hey, we've all got different interests in stories and if you don't like it that's completely fine by me, however I am going to make a sequel. I won't quit the story completely just because one person doesn't like it while others have come to really enjoy it. I appreciate your criticism though and again I apologize you didn't like it 
I loved this, and the sequel is a great idea. May I request one event for the sequel if it happens?
and advice:
I don't think you should use 'at so-n-sos prespective' alone. I think you should have tese dashes right before you type at whose view it is in. Example:
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Twilights prespective
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then continue to type. I dont know, just a suggestion
1705131 Thank you for your suggestion!
I'll take it into consideration since it would probably make the story look neater as well 
Hey do you think you can add an awesome sequel? it would make it so awesome.
1787315 I actually am planning on making a sequel to this after I finish my current story
1893363 I'm quite happy that you like the story
(At least that's how I'm interpreting it 
) Yes I was going for a supernatural Pinkamena, as much as I love Cupcake Pinkamena, I wanted to instill something a bit more y'know? 
1893183 I just scrapped my reply cause I didn't know the author replied to me. So, to be respectful to the author, I think there should have been something in the description about this being a different Pinkamena, since most forms of her are that of the psychopath from Cupcakes. So, next time, do not make such rude replies, and I'm not sure if you read my whole comment, but I put it as respectfully and honest as I could. I try not to seem mean when I review, and I wish to help authors who aren't that skilled or just have a few errors, which is why I used to be an editor/pre-reader. Now if you excuse me, I need to make another reply. *Hanging up a totally fake banana phone found in the dumpster.*
1696113 I apologize for not responding, I was off of FiMFiction for a certain time. Anyways, I guess I didn't notice the likes to dislikes.
Anyways, thank you for not being one of those authors who are rude to negative replies, and with your sequel, I wish you the best. Though, I would recommend you look out for the Mary Sue test. It can help quite a bit. If you make a new story that isn't off of this version of Pinkamena, I would like to see that, and maybe review that as well! 
I really hope you take some of my previous suggestions seriously, differentiation can help keep the reader excited when not looking at the action. Don't go too far with it, though. It is crazy when an author makes the mistake of '"Oh boy, Cadence is back!" Shining Armor squealed.' That can either really be out of character or in the case of maybe Twilight, using it in the wrong situation can make readers...confused. It can be quite funny to imagine, though. Anyways, I wish you luck, and thanks for being a good sport. Once again I apologize for the late reply, and I hope I don't come across as a total douche, cause I do not want to be that guy. I wanna be the one to help authors improve and hopefully surpass the line right into the spotlight!..even though I doubt that will ever happen to me. 
Anyways, see ya! *Hangs up an orange peel found in a chihuahua's stomach.*
Note that I am a member of the World of Illogic, so...yeah. Hope that explains the orange and banana.
1934573 Oh you'll no doubt find plenty of grammatical errors my friend, this was the first story I ever wrote after all and I only expected it to be like a test run, to see if I was any good at writing. Seeing how decently successful it was took me by surprise, as I also sort of rushed this story. I probably could have made this a lot better if I took my time and put out as much detail as possible, but like I said, I didn't expect this to be very successful y'know?
1934698
Terribly sorry, I wasn't too apt in writing and made countless stupid errors, I'd like it if you could comment on plot of the story and how it could have been improved more so than the grammatical errors, as I am already aware of the many I made. But that's just simply my request 
continue to evaluate as you see fit good sir
2133612 Hi There! I'm glad you enjoy it
I am also quite aware of the grammatical errors throughout the story, this was the first story I wrote on fimfiction, and to be perfectly honest with you, I thought it would fail big time 
which is why I didn't put so much effort into grammar, plus this was also a sort of "test drive" to see if people liked my writing style and if I was any good at writing, also a reason why it looks as if the story was rushed in a way, when I could have made it much longer. However if you did like "Pinkamena's Awakening", I will be making a sequel to it once I finish my other story "Tormented Dreams" (which I have been putting off for quite a bit now...) Still, I'm glad you like it and I appreciate it very much! 
2258978 Wow
I'm elated that you like it so much 
It brings joy to the place where my heart should be 
Best story ever!
I love it! You should definately make a sequel. You could make it about how they try to release the now good Pinkamena out of pinkie's body and into on of her own. Possibly using a dead pony?
2643795 There already is a sequel friend, though it may not be what you suggested
maybe you'll enjoy it nonetheless
2644383 I'll probably love whatever you make!
I like to think that everyone here tries extremely hard and writes for their love of MLP and their fans. 
Heh. Now I just need to read the sequel.
3835332 I have been on hiatus for some time, it's nice to come back and see all the positive reactions to my stories
Thank you very much! It means a lot to me that you enjoyed it 
Well it's an amazing story. I mean it's not every story that helps me think up ideas. This was a rare one for me to read. It had great ideas and Pinkamena was so easy to like.
3841688 Well thank ya!
I'm happy that this evokes ideas for you and that you liked my version of Pinkamena 
It was certainly a loveable version of her. But I always wondered if Pinkamena just never had anything good in her life before and if Pinkie was sort of unknowingly being greedy with the positive stuff so this kinda confirmed a theory I already had.
~shudder~
Hmm...this story is not bad. It's a good one. But there's a lot of misspellings and grammatical errors, but you already know that and after reading all of the comments. it's understandable and forgivable, since it was your first story and all.
5728298 Thank you
I've tried to change that in my future stories
5731140
You're welcome and just keep improving in your work. You're doing a good job.
6494916 Haha thanks for that friend