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I feel like this chapter could be better, but I'm mostly irritated with not getting to exactly what Twilight's problem is yet. Otherwise, as always, critiques and comments are welcomed and FEED ME
I hope the conflicts are believable and impressive and a satisfying balm for the wait
Time will pass, and Emeris will slowly come further out of his shell, making friends and spending time with ponies. But Twilight shall reach her breaking point and finally do something about the threat within Ponyville! What will happen to our protagonist? What will be the consequences of this action? Find out next time on Kimari Monku no Eikyō!
But I am not an autobot! I rather liked some of the decepticons, the non idiotic jerk ones
AHHHHHHHH! you Utter tease, always cutting it off at the best part. Anyway good chapter, and well portraid characterisation of Twilights dilemma of her conflicing feelings. update soon
Methinks that Twilight is just pissed that "Gary" spurned her attempts to get him to love her.
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Oh, I know! The suspense is killing me!
On an unrelated note: If everything except Twilight's allegedly rational mind is screaming at her to stop being a massive jerk, I predict said aspect of her mind is going to be forcibly shut down by the rest of it very shortly, with entertaining results.
Man. I can't tell you how much I love this fic, you'd be creeped out seven ways to sunday. But it's sunday, so there's really nothing to be worried about. I don't love it that much.
Still, it's definitively one of the better ones I've read here. I probably say that a lot, but there's a ton of good fics on this site. This is on the top of the pile though.
And why do I feel more sorry for Twilight than Emeris? It feels like she's going through some very serious psychological trauma here, and is fighting the fact that she actually likes Emeris.... Oh well, we'll see next time, on Kimari Monku no Eikyō!
I wish I had your brains when it comes to writing... My stories are entertainment, yours are Entertainment coupled with afterthought.
Okay, wow, Twilight had better have some damn good reasons for doing all this.
cant wait for the next chapter.
So, he just got out of the hospital, ran an obstacle course, got into an all-out knock 'em down no-holds-barred brawl with Dash, then suffered complete magical exhaustion at the hooves of a equinicidal librarian? Yeah, Emmy's going to be feeling this in the morning.
I'm more of a maximal kinda guy actually
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You think that Twilight's common sense or emotions will somehow override her intellect? The same Twilight that STILL worries that the Princess will imprison her in the place that she was banished to?
It's probably several things that is eating at Twilight. Gary was somepony that spurned her love, even if it was under the influence that is like failing a test. Also Twilight is also afraid that Princess Celestia trusts Emeris more than her. Maybe to the point of replacing Twilight as a student. Anyway it has been documented on the show that Twilight can be a bit of a jerk.
Rainbow was probably more violent here than what can be shown on the show, but I can see her being able to do all this. Was Silverwing a reference of another story that involved a human? Sounds really familiar.
If you could, maybe you can show a outline of his strength/weaknesses in his magic. Granted he is only one test subject, but it would be interesting to compare what a human would excel in to that of a pony.
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That time her emotional state was primarily paranoid fear, so it was her common sense against the rest of her. This time, she's actively suppressing her emotions, and common sense would indicate that, since Twilight can overpower him by herself, he isn't a threat. So, it's Twilight's trollogic versus the rest of her.
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I rather like the intelligent Decepticons as well! (A well done Megatron always makes me giggle happily), but the Decepticons don't really have something as catchy as "Autobots, roll out!", at least not that I know of. They either use the same term as the autobots or "move out!", so... eh.
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(I actually am irritated with where I had to cut it off, but ~10k words would double my normal chapter size, so... eh. No.)
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Something to note: Twilight just bullied someone who looks overwhelmingly beat to hell, her emotions then aren't necessarily her baseline emotions about 'Gary'. It's harder to feel negative emotions about someone when they're lying on the floor in front of you.
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It's Saturday where I am. What does that mean?
You picked up on that! Good
While I'm flattered by the compliment, I'm not sure I really understand
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If I do this right?
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Well that's just prime.
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Amongst other things, yes.
I was afraid she'd come across overly violent But yes, I am directly lifting aspects from Xenophilia because that story is extremely awesome, especially from a world-building standpoint. This story obviously has a different focus from Xenophilia, and I have a different writing style, but Anonauthor's work was one of three fics that inspired me to start on this one. Though now that it's started, it's got its own spark and life dragging it forward
Certainly! Not sure if I'll be able to address that very well in-story anyways.
Emeris is actually a bad person to use as an example for a human baseline, as he is above average in a lot of ways, and magic is one of them. Thus, this list will attempt to show the human baseline in comparison to the pony (assumed unicorn) baseline, as well as Emeris' standing. He's not a prodigy like Twilight, but had he been born a unicorn he would have been in the running for top of his class.
Since this will assume that the human is brought to Equestria as a human and given access to magic, I will attempt to note when the differences are cultural (usually) and when they're actually physiological (rarely). Humans would, generally, have a greater breadth of magic than most unicorns, but since humans lack a built-in magical foci, they would normally be weaker. In addition to the above and the following, humans would be better at using 'dark' magics on average than ponies would, specifically the same 'hate/anger/rage' magics that Celestia demonstrated to Twilight in the Season 3 opener. This is due to humans being part-time predators, and thus, more aggressive than ponies.
Medicinal:
Humans: As a whole, about the same as ponies. It's a difficult field which requires a certain kind of person. However, within the field, humans would be better at 'surgical' spells compared to ponies 'growth' spells (something few unicorns can do, but most earth ponies do constantly). This is an innate proficiency for the spells and not based on cultural differences.
Emeris: Has little talent for this field of magic.
Alteration:
Humans: As a whole, about the same as ponies.
Emeris: Emeris is actually decently talented at this field of magic, more so than the average unicorn.
Telekinesis:
Humans: Not as good at it as unicorns. Humans wouldn't be able to lift as many objects as a unicorn can manage at a time. This is both a training-from-birth as well as a natural-talent thing more so than a cultural one.
Emeris: Surprisingly talented at this, but it has more to do with his raw power than anything else.
Reality Calcification:
Humans: Ponies would, on average, be better at this field of magic than humans. This is a physiological difference.
Emeris: Is in the top handful of ponies in the field, only Celestia is definitively better than him, he operates in the same league as Luna and Twilight.
Boons:
Humans: Were this a legal/accepted school of magic, humans and ponies would be approximately the same level of skill within it. This is the realm of curses and blessings, and for the betterment of her people, Celestia has erased much of it from history.
Emeris: Rather good at this school of magic, though mostly on a theoretical level. He will rarely put the spells themselves into practice as his extensive time cursed/blessed makes him uncomfortable with the school as a whole.
Charms:
Humans: On average, not as good as ponies at this school of magic (mind-alteration/suggestion spells). This is mostly a cultural thing.
Emeris: Would be very good at this school of magic if it didn't creep him the hell out. The effects he hand on others for so long makes this school of magic outright horrifying to him.
Evocation:
Humans: On average, better at this school of magic than ponies. These are instantaneous effects, energy blasts, and direct projections of magical energy. Elemental magic falls under this school of magic, and most unicorns have difficulty with it (those with active genetics from the other two tribes can use them). This is mostly cultural, but partially physiological.
Emeris: Just fucking sucks at this school. There's no two ways about it. He just sucks at this school of magic.
Clairvoyance:
Humans: Would be better than ponies at the far-seeing and tracking portions of the school, otherwise equal to ponies. This first is cultural, the latter is physical.
Emeris: Better at the intense analysis portion of this school than anything else (for scientific experiments/analysis), and he's rather good at that, but otherwise he's only a bit above what the human norm would be.
Countermagic:
Humans: Approximately equal to ponies
Emeris: A master of this school of magic in application, only an expert in theoretical applications. Given an in-process spell, there are few he cannot unravel, and those few are entirely because of lack of raw power. This is mostly through his dedicated study and attempted application over the past two years, he only had mediocre talent for this school prior to the study.
Reality Warping:
Humans: In the defunct "conjuration" subschool, humans would exceed ponies (creating objects from 'nothing'), but otherwise, about the same as ponies. This is due to the 'tool-use' aspect of human consciousness.
Emeris: Actually very talented at this school of magic, but his experience with his curse makes it horrifying to him. He only uses the conjuration and teleportation aspects of this school of magic.
Illusion:
Humans: While better than ponies at visual magics, ponies are better at creating cohesive wholes out of their illusions, and thus, more effective illusions. This is a cultural one that is built from a physiological one. Humans are more visually reliant than ponies, and thus we focus more on the visual aspects of an illusion.
Emeris: Actively bad at this school of magic. He can do it, but it's not his forte at all.
Outside of the 'accepted' schools of magic, Emeris has a considerable talent, being very good at Blood, Runic, and Negative Emotionally Fueled magic and decently talented in Name and Soul magic. The only form of "black" magic he isn't good at is Necromancy, but he retains skill in this field of magic that he picked up while searching for a way to reverse his curse. That, and in the out of favor "battle-magic" school, Emeris is actually extremely talented.
On a more personal level, Emeris has an immense talent for creating spells on the fly, because he understands magic from a runic standpoint rather than a construct standpoint. He basically thinks of magic as another coding language, and one for the universe rather than computers. It allows him to create an entirely customized spell for a situation within minutes rather than hours, something Twilight is not as good at. However, because his understanding is rooted in the 'magical coding' of spells, he sees them as compressed 'magic code' when he opens his magical senses. It makes it extremely difficult to learn a spell just by seeing it. Depending on the individual human, they may learn magic like this or not, but ponies almost exclusively learn magic from a construct standpoint than a language/runic standpoint.
Emeris' Constructs are a rather powerful magic, one that he is exceptionally good at for a variety of reasons. One is that human thought lends itself to it, as humans are more trained/accustomed to using tools rather than direct applications of magic. The second is that Emeris is particularly good at visualizing objects in their entirety, which is what Constructs require to function. And finally, earth-pony genetics/magics are specifically required for a unicorn to even cast the spell, and Emeris is a perfect Earth Unicorn hybrid, and as such, has a particularly easy time at the magic.
On the terms of magical reserves and raw power, Emeris' is above average in both, though more so than normal due to his Earth-Unicorn hybrid status. Humans do not have inherently larger or smaller magical reserves than ponies, but as humans lack a natural magical foci, they are weaker in applying that magic. A human with a staff, wand or amulet or other magical foci would be a match in power for a unicorn.
I think that covers everything.
1678038 Waspinator: "Waspinator not think this job so important."
Inferno: "Every job from the Royalty is a gift!"
Waspinator [to himself]: "Ant-bot is MAJOR suck-up!"
Do I sense harem?
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It pretty much means that while my stories can be fun to read, they don't stay with you like this does. When I'm done with a chapter or story like this I can end up actually thinking about it afterwards, trying to pick the characters brains and understand the underlying story that isn't directly told.
And man... All that magic mumbo-jumbo makes my brain all confussled. I'd probably be either a sucky unicorn, or a good Earth Pony. I'd love to study and learn about all the theory and stuff, but I'm pretty sure my brain would catch fire.
EDIT: And could you try explaining Reality Calcification? I'm guessing it has to do with rooting your belief in reality hard enough to counteract things like illusions or somesuch, or to counteract magical effects without directly being a counterspell. Or just point me at the chapter that explains it, I probably missed it.
Must. Resist. Urge. To. Slap sense into Twilight!
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The trick is to, as an author, understand the characters underlying motives yourself, and then just not tell your readers. A large part of my difficulties in writing this story arc come from having to dance around the reveal or phrases that might hint too strongly at the reveal. If there's conflict and the characters are all sympathetic but the reader doesn't have all of the information then they'll wonder, they'll ask "Why is X doing that?" and so long as they care about the characters, they'll keep wondering. The key points though are, again, knowing what's going on as an author and not telling people stuff.
Eh, I'm just trying to come up with reasonable explanations for the demonstrated properties of magic in Equestria without contradicting myself. Note though that Emeris is coming at magic from a completely different direction from unicorns and differently from most humans as well.
Now, Reality Calcification is, at its most basic level, taking the laws of reality and making sure they stay that way. Gravity is this and nothing else. Quantum foam is quantum foam and you aren't about to use it to teleport. No, glass is a solid at this temperature. Etc. etc. It's essentially the direct counter to most of what Discord does. Subsets of it deal with reversing other magics like Alteration, but it's mostly a preventative school of magic. Countermagic is about unraveling spells in action and is mostly a school of magic so it gets enough focus to mitigate the negative effects of such a large magic-using percentage of the population (Want It Need It anyone?) and because using it operates fundamentally differently from Reality Calcification.
To put it another way: Countermagic is an active undoing of spells. Reality Calcification is creating Anti-Magic fields and undoing transformations/reality warping.
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Don't worry, I'm working on that
Wow, you put a lot of work into that. It's not just anger that humans are good at, but just having strong passion in general. High highs and low lows.
Will he ever get his human body back? I don't know about him, but that would be something I would sorely miss.
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Eh, I reformatted my personal notes for FiMfiction. I've got a lot of this stuff already thought out. And I believe that ponies have equal lows and highs to humans as sentient creatures, if anything, their 'highs' of positive emotions seem higher, though their fear reaction seems to be greater. They also appear to be considerably higher strung than humans, which appears to be a prey-animal reaction. This does not improve their magics in any discernible way, though a pony that learned how to harness their fears for the purposes of empowering their magic would be very powerful. However, it's much harder to harness fear to empower magic than it is to use anger or aggression.
We'll see
It does bother him, but he's had the past two years to adjust to it, and being a Gary Stu has been higher on the Angst Priority List than losing his human form. This will be a bigger issue as time goes on and he relaxes, but you'll note that he's already noted that he misses having hands among other things.
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Best case scenario for him is being able to switch between human and pony forms.
1680206 roflmao looks like someone had a lot of free time on their hands
I felt that the fight lasted a bit too long.
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Hrm, okay, do you have specific reasons for feeling that way or a just a general sense? Or more specific complaints? More specific complaints make it easier to make things better or more suited to peoples tastes
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I guess its more so my own tastes. I mean i still enjoyed the scene overall, I just felt like it was the scene from "they live".
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4-MVMbm6c0k
Its a nice fight but i don't think it should have been that long. Once again I state that this is my own personal OPINION so maybe its just me...
I like this story. A lot. I'd even go as far as saying its criminally under-rated due to the scope, characterization, and world building going on.
Lets see. What Magicks would I be good with?
Runic Engravings/Alteration/Enchantments as a first, or the skill at creating magic sigils, runes, symbols and the like that apply a permanent effect based on the engraving, changing, enhancing, or removing characteristics in an object, and applying various short to long term spells on an object, preferably while the object is being made. Being able to slice stone with a wooden spoon would be most amusing.
Along with that, in Evocation I'd have an affinity for Fire and Lightning spells. I like explosions. Nuff said.
Conjuration as well, I'd exploit my species natural skill at making tools for that one. I'd say average-high for the rest of Reality Warping.
Come to think of it I'd probably exploit them all to hell and back. Magic is just to much fun not to. As for the foci. . . I'd probably splurge and make as many as
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I could, and take an excess of ten with me at any time. I'd have gloves as my main ones though. Always pays to have spares in a fight.
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Ah, I think I understand better after watching the vid. Good, but it kinda dragged. Not sure if I can really address it though
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Awww! I'm flattered! If you really think it's that good, I'd appreciate it if you spread the word about it
This is actually a really hard question to address, especially since I haven't gone into depth with the laws of magic as I've been able to extrapolate from the show yet (Saving it for after Trixie Vs Twilight)
Runic magic is literally language based, to be seriously good at it you have to have a talent for both language and one of the following: Computer Coding, Physics, or Poetry. Otherwise you just end up as mediocre unless you get creative in your gear stacking.
Boom boom bitches.
Reality Warping is a weird field. In this story, I'm operating under the assumption that Pinkie Pie's actually a moderately powerful Reality Warper, while Discord is essentially Reality Warping incarnate (amongst other things). Between the weirdness those two entities generate, it should give you an idea of what that school of magic encompasses. Conjuration in the sense of creating things from nothing is tangentially related and calling it 'reality warping' is more a naming convention than an actual link between spell mechanics. This goes for a lot of Reality Warping magic though so... yeah. The common theme is the alteration or twisting of the fundamental laws of physics.
The number of foci isn't the factor so much as the delicacy and crafstmanship of the foci you're using. Unicorns and Pegasi both have one Foci, Unicorns have their horn, but Pegasi have their wings as a singular unit. There's no magical purpose to having multiple foci in most situations. While it is possible to tune a foci to a specific kind of magic and marginally increase that spell or kind of magic's efficiency, the most common use for multiple foci is to perform a more complex spell than one can normally hold in ones mind at that moment, this is usually Alteration or Reality Warping magic. However, in such a case you're most likely better served by using Runic magic if at all possible, as it reduces the chances of things going pear-shaped considerably.
Note that Foci and Runic based magics are semi-lost arts in Equestria. Foci because unicorns, the primary users of magic, have a built-in foci. Runic magic is mostly lost because it's just not very useful over what ponies can already naturally do and is difficult to learn for most ponies due to them learning magic from a fundamentally different direction. Ponies learn how to use an extension of themselves, learning from what I am currently dubbing the 'Construct' method, humans on the other hand (tend) to learn magic from the 'Coding' perspective where it's a language. This is because of a fundamental difference in brain structure, humans are better wired for language, and ponies are wired to use magic. Neither system is fundamentally better than the other, just better suited to certain things.
And to expand on the Runic magic thing: Someone who learns runic magic can do a lot of things, but they are slow and normally restricted to things that are only useful on a permanent basis. It takes a very creative mind to use runic magic for anything else. However, all the things that Runic magic is good at are also the things that at least one of the tribes does very well, and such, runic magic is not only difficult to learn, it's generally not worth it. Because even if you are expanding your magical applications, somepony else will still do it better because it's more natural to them and they have dedicated the same amount of time into learning it.
P.S.- You can edit your comments, you didn't need to add a second comment
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Wish I could, but I'm using a Ps3. . . so weird things happen. Like character limits, for example.
Edit:
On a different note, I think I confused your Runic system with that of the Nasuverses. . . sorry for the mix up.
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Ah, didn't know a PS3 could get on FIMfiction, huh... learn something every day...
And I've given very little description of the runic system here, the infodump response is actually the most info I've given on the runic system, as it's one of the less self-explanatory ones of the ones I've given. I plan on going more into detail with the schools of magic and the actual mechanics of magic in this interpretation of the FiM universe, but that info-dump will be in this stories companion piece instead of here.
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Interesting. I look forwards to seeing that then. Along with whatever is fliping Twi the frak out. It'll be interesting when that little tibit of information is unveiled.
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FINALLY. Someone got that reference!
6 chapters and i still cant remember his name............
"somersaulted"
"whose"
"Tartarus"
"he was a cute stallion"
I'd clip
she expected so much intolerance
Unless Twi suddenly became a Stalion.
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Or mabey he's the Princesses's watchdog...
2,000 gundam shaped muffins (1:1 scale) if you get the reference
5352444 er, context clues mate. This is the result of em's psych eval, not Twi's.
For the magic theorem stuff, did you just hold shift and mash the keyboard?
5753664 FUCK, it reminds me of when I took calculus... And physics ...*sigh*
I got the feeling that Emeris is turning into an anime protagonist in exchange of losing his Gary Stu status.
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Black Butler, right?
This reminds me of a number of ponies from the Savage Skies series, including Applejack from the first story in the series. No matter how often Dawn saved Fluttershy, no matter how he was teaching Scootaloo to fly, and ignoring how all of her friends believed that Dawn was not an evil, demonic colt, she believed it and fought him, and it took Celestia becoming enraged and shouting at her whilst exuding an aura of power and pressure for her to realize that she was being what could quite easily be termed a villain.
She thought gary raped her friends
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She thinks the effect is still active too.
And earlier he basically showed he had to be an ahole to her when getting books to keep her from being calm about him during the curse, and he went to the library a lot so extra exposure.
The fact that he's letting her push him around, and isn't willing to walk out on her for his personal dignity kinda makes him fall into the Gary-Stu already. The Gary-Stu is often, and easily abused by women while doing nothing in his own defense. Twilight's unwarranted aggression should have made him stand as firmly for himself as he stood for Twilight before Celestia.
Also, it's frustrating as hell. This part was not fun to read.
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I disagree. He's not letting her push him around "just because" like a Gary Stu would, he's doing it for a clearly defined, logical, in-universe reason while otherwise being a fully fleshed out character with trials and flaws. In this case, what appears to be low self-esteem and a guilty complex.] Making himself a door mat for every third person is his (rather terrible) way of making it up to them.
I know he is letting himself get beat up here but there has to be a limit to this. If he continues he better be maimed by the end of this and it will have all been his fault.
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Humanity is the ultimate masters of spite manipulation. He's doing it subconsciously even. If he actually dies, and it's because of his efforts to rectify "his" wrongdoings, the long term backlash will be absolutely grand. Celestia knew perfectly well that he's already out of the effects, and she won't let him die without her little ponies being punished something fierce. Remember that Celestia is more akin to a parent than a leader.
He doesn't know, but damn Twilight will be absolutely crushed if he dies. A sinister part of me wanted to write a side story on what if he dies from Twilight's antics, or even worse, snapped at the worst timing and hung himself with a suicide note complaining how he can't take it anymore, that his conscience went too far for his body and spirit to handle, and he wanted end.