Dear Merged Ponies Arc,

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Best Wishes,
Andoriol

P.S. - Suck a cock!

P.P.S. - I am so insanely glad that you're over. You seemed so super cool when I first got into you but holy crap you were such a bitch to write.

Dear Plot Bunnies,

Why must you be evil and come up with horribly good concepts for stories months after the story is in motion?

Also, why must you make sense and work and require minimal effort to implement? You know I hate revising.

Best Wishes,
Andoriol

More seriously, I've done some (extremely) minor revisions to the previous chapters (We're talking a word or two, and one whole sentence!) to better fit a story idea that I felt better suited this story as a whole. Don't bother re-reading (unless that's your thing), it's not worth your time, as you should be able to pick up on it with this and any future foreshadowing.

I got to say, I'm happy that this chapter came out so early. The separation between Twilight and Emeris was fine and his decision to pick Dash as his first day was sweet. I got to say that seeing Emeris and RD being prudish in comparison to AJ is hillarious. Anyhow, thank you for this amazing chapter.
P.S: Emeris is right. Clueless harem protagonist suck.

“Now to avoid the fumbling for a topic, I shall default to the social call of nerds everywhere. How about that popular sports team?” Spike made a face, snorting and trying not to laugh, but I wasn’t done, “I hear they’re doing so much better than less popular sports team. They’re definitely going to go to the championships for the sport.”

If it were me, I'd go straight to, "Did you see that ludicrous display last night?"

Really happy to see this updating again, and yes i agree, the chase is wonderful

If you haven't tried out kudzuhaiku's The Chase

this story will through you through all sorts of emotional hoops as well

I finished up the chapter listening to this:
[youtube=Www.youtube.com/watch?v=0l__jSgTAmQ]

It made things pretty cool.

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Considering his self image, I imagine Emmy would have a Reality Marble sort of like Anima from FFX 10
[youtube=no8GGXH398c]

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I was particularly happy with the exact moment that Emeris picked Dash, but the rest of the scene was sort of meh to me.

Emeris has a particular loathing for harem protagonists that waffle.

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No no no, it's "Did you see that really impressive play by Popular Sports Team last game? It's probably going to push Star Player into the Record Books." (Made a bit less (or more) funny by how "Star Player" just might be an Equestrian name...)

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I know right?! I found it and binged on it and gaaahhhhh so goooooood

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... okay, now I'm curious, where'd you start the music?

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What, where his inner world shows his image of himself as a terrible monster of unimaginable power? Nah, that could never happen

i have a small question. Are you taking OCs for this story at all? i know you were planning to, but dont know if you are.

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Sure! Though I can't guarantee that I can work them into the story.

The one's I need the most are military, nobility, and I need a villain. I'm not saying more on that last one because spoilers, but I need to build up a realistic villain.

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I haven't heard you say "Autobots, roll out!" in such a long time. Seeing that in my inbox today was amazing.

Glad you're back, man. <3

5006149 well for military, what exactly do you need.

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Glad to be back! I love writing for people.

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WELP.

While this has sort of been foreshadowed, it's still being spoilered here: When Twilight becomes a Princess, Emeris will be made her high guard and be put in charge of her section of the military, helping organize her equivalent to the Lunar and Royal guards. I would slap-dash some personalities together on my own, but I'm not going to say no to someone else's character

There's also another situation where Emeris has to fight in a military maneuver against some military ponies as a way to re-establish himself as a threat in the way Gary could have been.

Really nice job on the update, and for an arc that you came to loathe it sounds like, it was a strong wrapping up to it in the end. You have folks thinking that there might be more interest than just Dash and Applejack here in the future, and the newfound relationship between Emeris and Twilight really has me intrigued. Saw your spoiler there in the comment above mine, and I definitely can say I saw something like that coming. The only thing I'm not sure on yet is if there is a romantic relationship that'll develop for Twilight, or more of a close friendship / potentially familial one with how they were merged, even if it was only for a few days. Was a pretty strong few days of bonding so to speak.

But yeah, impressive job, and while you may think the ending was a little iffy, I think it worked. The reasoning of him picking Dash first, and then the scene with Applejack explaining the whole reasoning, I think it worked well enough for its purpose. So, I am looking forward to the next chapter. I was so glad when I saw your name and story reappear on my feed after so long. This is probably up there in the list of stories that have my interest.

So after suffering another agony, Emeris is tasked with the community service of defending a Ponyville, the inhabitants of which openly despise him.
While Twilight gets to be waited on, and that is what is happening because her friends will always help her. As well as making everyone who helps her have a harder time because of her ineptitude with all non-magic interaction. If she drops something, someone else, probably Spike, has more to clean up because shes not allowed.
Who is the one getting punished her?

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That's right. The extremely proud and self sufficient unicorn who has spent the most of her time helping others is forced to depend on others for every little thing. Inconveniencing them and making more work while she has to watch and can't help.

If you still have trouble seeing the punishment, imagine having to ask someone every day to tie your shoes for you. Or to help you eat.

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I don't have much to add, but I'm happy to be providing!

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Emeris is getting a bit of the short end of a stick. Note though that it's not community service so much as being reassigned. He's only got to get involved in the (likely since it's Ponyville) defense of Ponyville if it's something Twilight would be needed to fix/help with.

It's not really "community service" though since he's going to get paid for being an on-call guard/knight which is kind of what he is (which he is, he just doesn't know that yet).

Twilight though is being punished. Celestia is going to appear next chapter to keep any one person/pony from helping her for very long. The point of it is to make her swallow her pride and ask for help for even the smallest of things. They don't do the work for her, and they don't have to do the work with her really, just enable the action. Celestia is going to clarify this to make sure that it's all punishment for Twilight and not for anyone else.

Also, seriously, no magic for the ELEMENT OF MAGIC. That's harsh.

Yayyy update!

That guy forgives way too easy.

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VERY MUCH SO. It's actually an explicit character flaw of his. It will very much come to bite him in the ass

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it ended right after he left he farm, though I can't remember where I started it exactly.

So normal humans can't function in the cartoon physics of Equestria. So it turns him into a cartoon. A poorly thought out one.

Actually not a bad fic.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

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Should I inbox you a bio for a character you could use?

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While this has sort of been foreshadowed, it's still being spoilered here: When Twilight becomes a Princess, Emeris will be made her high guard and be put in charge of her section of the military, helping organize her equivalent to the Lunar and Royal guards. I would slap-dash some personalities together on my own, but I'm not going to say no to someone else's character

Well... I could help ya with that as well, if you needed some extra stuffs. Mostly because plot bunnies and characters I'll probably never use are constantly railing against the impervious prison that is my mind. (Twitch )

You could ask Tulip about getting a cover for your story.
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Tulip

Sweet sugar! Two updates in so little time, I'm grinning like a child. Thanks, author!

Now then, to read... Can't say I'm unpleased to see Twilight get punished for that. And now it's taking shots at harem anime (not a real fan, especially not with a will-less main character)! And we now why Emeris became a pony on entrance, nice. And double shipping? Interesting, this promises new dynamics around and I'm up for that! New arc is coming too? Now that is just perfect

As for coverart, I have to say it's always surprising when a story without one gets in the feature box. Though, in terms of getting you one, the most I can do is recommand this place. Hopefully, you'll find something suitable for you.

Both unicorns looked over Twilight’s form, covered in drying blood, her mane and tail matted and coated in the fluids and in tangled messes.

Ohoho! Spill on aisle one!

Damnit. No. Bad doctor. No getting in character...

I had actually been intending to re-read this story *again* ounce the current arc was done.

Now I have plans for the weekend.

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Who said Emeris was a normal human?

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Strangely, I find this to be a very high compliment, thank you

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Yep~ Just be prepared for me to ask questions~

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I'm all for it!

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Thank you very much! I'll hit them up

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I've hit that place up, but nothing the last time I checked (a year ago), thank you though! I'll try again in a bit.

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The first time I totally overdid it with the DARLING, I fixed it up some later, but the characterization was always the same, I'm really proud of my characterization of her to be honest

And I'm happy to provide an entertaining story! I hope it continues to be such!

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Just a lil bit disturbin. Just a bit

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It's a reference, deliberately bad grammar is deliberately bad. And the dragon is resistant to the craziness for reasons explained later on.

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5008969 I intended it as such. I am glad that you were able to understand the meaning of my compliment.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

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Gosh darn it Twilight, did you create a magical boyfriend only for it to backfire horribly? You did didn't you? Fake memories and everything to.

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Nope! She actually had nothing to do with him coming here. He's something a bit more unsettling than that

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A human in Equestria protagonist...wait he still is.

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Forgive me if I doubt you, but your comment number has me reaching for the nearest cross.

im happy this became a harem fic.. im a harem fic person
im just wondering in the future twlight would join there herd

It's kind of ironic that a story that began subverting the normal Gary Stu tropes is quickly filling out the form. Come on man, are you doing this on purpose?

Total side note: If you haven't tried out kudzuhaiku's The Chase, YOU SHOULD.

Fuck no. I've read several of kudzu's stories, each of them started out fine and ended with me pissed off.

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You shall find out!

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It's kind of ironic that a story that began subverting the normal Gary Stu tropes is quickly filling out the form. Come on man, are you doing this on purpose?

YES

In complete seriousness, I actually am doing that on purpose. Part of the "point" of this story, beyond just being for fun, is to demonstrate what a Gary Stu really is. Not the powers or abilities or the "specialness", but their effect on the story and on their treatment by/effect on other characters as well as their personality and flaws and whether those flaws are meaningful or not.

Fuck no. I've read several of kudzu's stories, each of them started out fine and ended with me pissed off.

Really? Huh. Surprising, but hey, you tried his writing before! At least it's from experience

I like pirates :DD

(This will come up later)

I admit I would like to see some more of his informed flaws appear, beyond just his unwillingness to consider himself and inability to not forgive everyone immediately.

Antisocial asshole this guy aint.

I am so glad to see life come back to this story. Please keep it coming.

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I like trains.

Wow, this fic is just brilliant, i mean using the Gary Stue as a bad thing? I mean yes it IS a bad thing but most writers that do use that don't see it so.

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Emeris isn't an antisocial asshole, though he considers himself one. The narrator is unintentionally lying to you. He is neither of those things. He's way too forgiving, has low self esteem, has issues, and is shy, among a couple other minor things, but antisocial or an asshole? Nope.

He says he is because that's what he thinks he is, but he's not.

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That changes, and there's a pretty good reason for it actually

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Thank you! And glad to have put a twist on this for you

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Gah! I know the feeling! I'm working on it now

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I like werewolf movies.

5019343 Ah, my apologies dear. I replied to your comment very late at night and in no business to do anything but go to sleep, but alas! I seemed to have mistaken a joke for true ignorance of the reference.

Sorry for the confusion on my part, as your comment was structured like a generic "pointing out something flawed" post that many of the users on this site like to partake in.

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I... um... thanks

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I struggled to figure out how to work that into the summary. I want to make an interesting summary while making it clear that it's about the horrors of being and having been a Gary Stu.

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And yes, the croc was originally a T-Rex. It bugged people so I changed it

Gah!! So. Much. Xenophilia. I've been drowning in it ever since Dash was introduced post GSE. *looks at own group-membership list* Shut up!... Don't judge me!!

Not a perfect person doesn't mean he's not a sue. Things are still going his way and there isn't aren't consequences here...at least for him there isn't.

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Reading this conversation, I was suddenly reminded of this scene from Airplane!

The strangest shit will bring up the most disturbing of memories.

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How the heck'd I miss that...? Fixing.

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Hey, that story was awesome and a huge inspiration for this one.So of course there's a lot of it!

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While I'm confused by how you don't think the intense anger from the citizens of Ponyville and Twilight's general reactions weren't consequences, no, there hasn't been a whole lot of bad consequences yet.

On a certain level that's deliberate. Equestria is just a nice place overall. Also, his cowardly ass has been avoiding the ponies of Ponyville. But I've been setting up a number of falls coming up about three chapters away, but even next chapter some crap is going to go down I'm actually considering whether it's going to be a full on assassination attempt or something lesser. Not to mention there's going to be a fight between him and one of the Mane Six that's not going to end peacefully. Still friends? Sure, but not all hunky-dory.

That said, what would you consider serious consequences so we're on the same page?