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Caine, the ringmaster of The Amazing Digital Circus, Sends our beloved cast into the magical world of Equestria. Will they be able to help the ponies in time?

Insipred by the Indie animation "The Amazing Digital Circus" go check it out!
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Incomplete Published: April 5th Download
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GleamingKyler111
GleamingKyler111 #1 · 3 weeks ago · · · Surprise ·
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"That's it. Guys, I'm going upstairs, I didn't ask for all this s**t."

All the ponies then stopped and stared at Zooble.

"Um, I mean, I'm going upstairs." She said nerviously.

Well, that was awkward.

Myheartisburningforjesus
Myheartisburningforjesus #2 · 3 weeks ago · · · Surprise ·
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11871012
Right, Should probably work on my spelling.

Thanks!

GleamingKyler111
GleamingKyler111 #3 · 3 weeks ago · · · Nightmare Moon(part 1) ·
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Right, should probably work on my spelling.

Thanks!

Your welcome.

Escape from Equestria

Caine, the ringmaster of The Amazing Digital Circus, sends our beloved cast into the magical world of Equestria. Will they be able to help the ponies in time?

The digital circus crew land in Equestria!

GleamingKyler111
GleamingKyler111 #4 · 3 weeks ago · · · Surprise ·
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Here's some of the other errors in this chapter.

After their run in with Rainbow Dash, the group went to check on another task.

"Yes, the décor is coming along nicely. This ought'a be quick. I'll be at the library in no time. Beautiful indeed." Twillight said absentmindedly.

"Not the décor, her!" Spike exclaimed.

"No, no, no, oh! Goodness no." A white unicorn mare said, she had curly indigo hair and tail, and had 3 diamonds as a cutie mark.

"How are my spines? Are they straight?" Spike asked.

"Straight as an arrow." Jax chuckled.

"Good afternoon—" Twliight began, only to be interrupted again.

"Just a moment, please! I'm 'in the zone', as it were." Rarity said distractedly.

"Oh, yes! Sparkle always does the trick, does it not? Why, Rarity, you are a talent. Now, um, how can I help yo—" Rarity squeals in shock. "Oh my stars, darling! Whatever happened to your coiffure?!" Rarity asks, surprised.

"Oh, you mean my mane? Well, it's a long story. I'm just here to check on the decorations, and then I'll be out of your hair!"

You forgot to say who's saying this line, and how they're saying it.

"Out of my hair? What about your hair?!" Rarity gasped.

"Wait! Where are we going?! Help!" Twilight yelped as Rarity pushed the gang into her sewing shop.

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There's a large amount of unnecessary empty space under this.

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