Tail of Clashing Stars and Storms in Hearts and Hooves Day

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In Maretime Bay, the Hearts and Hooves Day tradition is not yet widely accepted among the ponies. However, Sunny Starscout and Zipp Storm both want Hitch to be their Valentine. As the situation unfolded, it became increasingly tense.

Cover Art by PrixyDaRobo

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Flamewarrior02

Flamewarrior02 #1 · February 14th · 4 · ·

And this readers is why shipping is dangerous stuff

Skyblazer9

Skyblazer9 #2 · February 14th · 2 · ·

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Indeed it is.

JD1

JD1 #3 · February 14th · 3 · ·

This takes the meaning of a love triangle to a whole another level. I loved it, and very hilarious.

GrimWolf

GrimWolf #4 · February 14th · 2 · ·

Thank you for writing this story, it was very funny and I enjoy it a lot.

My only observations are:
1) You should kept consistency with Hearts and Hooves Day and avoid the mentioning of Valentine's Day, since it's a "Human" holiday.
2) It was too repetitive reading Sunny's situation with her tail. Some of those part could be cut off or focused on other aspects of her situation.

Hope this advise is useful and thank you for a wonderful story.

MechaSonicFanArtist

MechaSonicFanArtist #5 · February 15th · · ·

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Thank you GrimWolf. If you like to show me by helping me re-editing this story, fixing errors, etc. Just let me know.

MatTheBook

MatTheBook #6 · February 15th · · ·

"Hearts and Hooves Day? Oh, wait! Do you mean the holiday you tried to make everypony celebrate last year?" Sunny paused.

Wait what, you ponies stopped celebrating Hearts and Hooves Day!? You had no holiday of celebrating with your special someponies?

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MechaSonicFanArtist

MechaSonicFanArtist #7 · February 15th · 1 · ·

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MatTheBook

MatTheBook #8 · February 15th · 1 · ·

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Right. Its been a long while.

Tailbiter231

Tailbiter231 #9 · February 26th · · ·

I love the tail scenes (because canonically Sunny doesn't get any, unlike Zipp or Misty) and the twist at the end, but for a moment I was afraid Sunny and Zipp's friendship ended.

MechaSonicFanArtist

MechaSonicFanArtist #10 · February 26th · · ·

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If I learned anything about Sunny, her heart is pure. And no matter what argument or fight may occur between her or her friends, Sunny, and her friends will canonically find a way to make it right... to keep their friendship strong.

Onyx Quill