Some stories are better off unfinished. Some lives are better off unlived.
Blithy had a perfect life. In her opinion, and until now, anyway. Unknown to her, she was born with a disease with an extremely expensive cure, and her life expectancy is little over ten years. From the start she was meant to have an unfinished story, and it's up to her how she wants to end it. Being mentally disabled, she was constantly laughed at by peers. But she never understood. What if all of a sudden she does? What will she do then?
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Will read later when Wall o' Textyness has been fixed! Bye!
Alright... let's see what we got here.
*Opens document*
HOLY WALL OF TEXTS, BATMARE!
Yea... this is gonna be grueling..
Author dude, protip: Space out your paragraphs. No one loves wall of texts.
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Fixed that so it's easier to read- but please don't point out any typos or mistakes otherwise- this is just a loose spare time thing, so I'm not going to edit it in any way
1397928 Really?.. Feh... fine.
Oh now I'm sad! But it was very good so you get 5 scootaloos.
Hey everybody,
we did a live reading of this story and posted the recording here:
Hope you all enjoy, we certainly did
Love and tolerance,
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... you son of a B.
Have we got our back story? Do we now get it?
oh my everything. That was amazing. And there she goes. Break.
Okay I have got o speak my mind here. now mind that beyond this point is my personal opinon that does NOT reflect the story's quality but rather the problems I had with it
Okay the main character
strike one : wheelchaired. Okay so this is an attempt to get feels then. okay not so bad
strike two : oh shee's mentally handycapped as well frak that bites but i'v hung out with a bunch of people who had mental handycappes they are nice people and live fine lives. But no she has to have a sad life on top of that
Srke three: oh come on, you made her fatally ill okay that might have made me have some feels if not for the points above.
Oh and just for another slap in the face to handycapped people the story makes the parents leave her on the freakin roof to die instead of being by her bedside till the last(which would have been a hell of a lot more touching then this ending) I mean I wasn't feeling any sadness at the end, I was pissed and i mean really pissed at the parents.
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Well, it IS a backstory; so you're meant to hate the parents and understand the character's viewpoint. I agree it would've been more effective if the parents stayed, but because it's a backstory certain things needed to happen(actually I probably should've mentioned this is a backstory somewhere in the fic).
The idea here is that the parents are selfish, in a way. They spared themselves the pain in exchange for their daughter's. Then there was the part where they 'didn't have a choice', so let's evaluate some of the other things they could've done.
Like you said, they could've stayed with her. But the disease makes the last few minutes before death extremely painful for the patient, meaning she'd probably be screaming by the end of it- thus it would've been more heartbreaking for all three of them as the parents witness their daughter die in pain and the daughter screaming for her parents to help but only in death finding out they couldn't have done anything.
Or they could've watched her commit suicide. But Blithy probably won't understand and won't want to die. It's the parents leaving that's important- it makes her sink into this tiny hole of despair, which then is her drive to actually jump(apart from the pain). If the parents were still there, she'd be begging to be cured(which she simply can't be) and the parents would have to either force her to jump or watch her die. On top of that they could either get arrested for murder or for assisting in a suicide.
Or they could've killed her. That would present many problems for them in the future, both psychologically and legally.
And no I'm not trying to offend handicapped/disabled(mentally/physically) people! Really!
3698677 Okay thanks for expalining, I was in mood while i posted my reply so sorry if i was bit...unrealistic about the fic itself
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Well if the mood's cause of the fic then that's good news too
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Was the song in the story the song by the killers? By the way THE FEELS
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Yep same one
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Love that song