One generation, to another
You are an inspiration to us all Twilight the memory replayed in her head as she stood before a stained glass window depicting the very same event. “those words hit so much differently now” she whispered to herself.
Twilight’s attention was turned to the sound of the door to her throne room opening. A guard pushed it open just enough to where he can be clearly seen through. “Your majesty, he has arrived.”
Twilight flew back to her throne, making herself comfortable and presentable, anticipating a meeting with one of her most devoted students. “You may send him in.”
The guard pushed the door open, revealing a navy blue stallion with a short, poorly kept mane. The stallion wore a pair of headphones on his ears which he took off and wore on his neck, signaling his undivided attention to the princess. The stallion approached meekly with a sense of nervousness cracking through his expression. “Your majesty,” He said as he bowed politely.
“Tech Beat, I’m glad to see you again, I was so worried that you wouldn’t make it.” Twilight said, “You’ve been keeping to yourself for a while and haven't kept up with your friendship assignment as of late, it’s making me concerned.”
“My apologies princess, I just haven’t been feeling well, mentally.” Tech Beat replied meekly.
“I see. Is something bothering you?”
Tech Beat didn't reply, to nervous to confess, which Twilight noticed was a common habit of his seeing their previous interactions. Instead, Tech Beat turned his head away shamefully as his eyes darted around the throne room, his expression of shame and anxiety nearly impossible to hide.
"Tech Beat, please, I want to help you, and you know I'll do what I can, but I can't do that unless you communicate with me. Please tell me what's going on." Twilight said in a soft-spoken empathetic voice, which was just the thing needed to give Tech Beat enough comfort to finally express his thoughts, although his nervous expression still remained.
“I just haven’t been feeling like myself, and it’s affecting my ability to connect with others. It’s not that I don’t want to make friends, but it’s been so hard, it feels like my head is always in the wrong place and I can’t help but push others away.”
“Perhaps there is a source that has been making you feel this way, perhaps I can help. I am in a position to pull some strings, so anything that’s wrong I’ll do my best to assist.”
“Well I haven’t really pinned down the entire problem as a whole, I do believe that I at least…” Tech Beat stopped, visibly hesitant to pour out his troubles honestly. “Forget it,” he said with a sigh.
“Teach Beat, I understand that it can be hard to open up, but I can’t help you if you don’t tell me what’s wrong.”
Tech Beat considered Twilight’s words; it was hard to deny what she had to say, especially with her elegant and compassionate demeanor that felt motherly to him.
“Okay, but… I just hope you won’t judge me for it.”
“What kind of princess of friendship would I be if I were to do such a thing?”
Tech Beat gave off a gentle smile before it faded back into his weary expression. “Alright" His legs began to tremble, still uncertain of the risks of telling the truth, even if it was the pony that he trusted more than any other. “I’m… I’m… I… feel, like…” He gulped before his emotions burst from his lips. “I’m transgender.”
Twilight’s eyes widened for a few short seconds before she returned to a comforting expression again. She knelt, wrapping her hoof around her student like a compassionate hug, and gently laid her head upon him.
Techbeat wrapped her leg around Twilight, hugging her tightly, still shivering not from anxiety, but from the overwhelming amount of solace and emotion she felt. She sobbed as tears drizzled down her face, no longer feeling the need to hold it in anymore.
Twilight released her comforting grip on Techbeat, drying her tears in a motherly fashion as she gave a warm smile. “I’m proud of you for coming out to me, my faithful student.”
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Loved this!! Trans Rarity is a personal fave HC of mine, and the idea that Twilight would go to her first makes so much sense. Love that you used the Ascension as the transition, it really ties the themes together!! For a first fic it's genuinely wonderful!!
And don't take the thumbs downs too personally. Some "fans" of the show don't take the kindness lessons all that seriously and so act pretty hatefully to any fic with trans stuff. They'll never comment so they can't be moderated off, but that's just cause they're cowards who hide behind anonymity while trying to make others feel bad.
But for real!! Really enjoyed this and hope to see more!!
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Aww, thank you so much for the kind words :)
This was cute. Sad how trans stories got voted down on this site.
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Aww thanks, and yeah that's pretty annoying.
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As a trans woman, I'm always looking for good transfemme stories.
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Well I'm happy I could provide
This was a fun story! It's always good to see more trans representation on the site. While I can't give much in the way of definite critiques, I did notice you using the wrong "you're" from time to time. Overall I did really enjoy this story, and I hope you continue to write more like this in the future!
Giving this a thumbs up for good effort, although I do think they are somewhat minor issues with it. Main thing is grammar mostly, I see "your" used when it should be "you're" sometimes. I was also confused at the mention of Twilight coming out to Pinkie despite Rarity being portrayed as the first one to know about her problem during the conversation with Celestia. This stuff can easily be fixed by just taking some time to reread your story, being careful to pay attention to your timeline of events even if mentioned in passing. I like it though, good stuff
Cute little story, nice work! Sad, though, how heavily down voted trans stories get on here. Hope you continue to write fun works like this!
This is a very cute work. It's kind. It's hopeful. I love it!
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Aww, thanks, and I'll definately try to keep that criticism in mind for my next story.
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Aww, thanks, and thank you for the critique.
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Aww, thank you so much :)
This is a great story.
This is pretty good for a first fic, definitely better than my first fic.
Although I do have some problems with it.
At some points it's hard to get a good picture of the scene in my head, as it is become walls of just dialogue and exposition, with no actions or environmental descriptors at all (maybe this is just a personal taste thing tho) At least for me, it is a little boring.
As for the overall plot, I think the plot goes too smoothly for Twilight. Hate against the LGBTQIA+ movement is mentioned by Celestia once, but we never actually see any of it. No upset parent figure, no shocked public, everyone around her is overall supportive, and caring. For Twilight this is good, but from a plot, and realism I don't think it works. Since there is no friction or conflict it does cheapen the plot, and the alicorn reveals a bit, and unfortunately, her experiencing no friction is not very realistic. At least from my personal experience, I know if I came out as trans tomorrow (not saying that I am), I'd lose half my family overnight, people whom I really care about, and would be devastated to have those relationships soured. And I know a trans friend who has been suffering for years due to them living in an extremely religious household, that is not very happy about her identity.
I guess the way to put it is, it does not feel like she discovers it, rather, it feels like she finds out she is trans if that makes sense. She is able to learn and accept it without much internal resistance, is conveniently introduced to the information by a book, and even has a trans rarity to help her out. The story does not display much internal or external struggle. I guess this story is the ideal scenario for a trans person, where everything goes right and they have all the support they need. But everything going right can be boring at times, and as I pointed out before, unrealistic (As can be displayed by the amount of downvotes on this fic) Unfortunately even in the more accepting communities there still will be many who are unwilling to accept people for who they are.
I am happy that you are writing more trans representation on the website, It's been a hot minute since there has been a trans fic in the box, and for a first fic, this is really good. I liked many of your descriptions, particularly her dissatisfaction with her lower-toned voice, and I liked the ending quite a bit, it connects with how she canonically became an alicorn very well. I was initially put off that this was a fic where instead of a character changing their canon gender, they instead changed to their canon gender, but upon further thought, I think for putting the reader in the shoes of the character doing it the way you did is actually better. We are not used to Twilight being male, and therefore we as the readers are just as jarred seeing a male Twilight, as she would be being identified as the wrong gender.
I think you have a lot of potential as a writer, and I encourage you to write more. I hope this comment does not come off as an attack on the story, or yourself. I intended this to be a critique, not an attack, hopefully, I got that across.
I wish you a good day, and good luck with your future literary ventures
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Thanks for the critique, that really helps. I'll definitely keep these things in mind in my future fanfics.
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you're welcome
This was the first trans fic I ever read and I love it! Keep up the good work!
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Aww, thanks
Contrary to whatever nonsense people spew, transphobia isn't always the reason these kinds of stories get downvoted. I've never seen a single story without at least one downvote, so there's that.
There's also the fact that not everyone likes this kind of story. It doesn't matter if it's been written well or not. If your first idea of why is transphobia... Then there's something wrong with you I feel.
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you say that and yet another story that's actually pretty decent has the same treatment because the main point of the it was scootaloo discovering they're nonbinary. I don't think you realized this place's audience at most is 4channers, thus making certain stories such as this not welcomed.
While it might have a good message about acceptance and such. It still hit the same gneric transgender story checkmarks ever.
You could switch MLP:FiM to any random designed-for-queer fantasy world and nothing will change.
And where're Twilight's parents? They are loving family and should come to meet her.