Written for EaW's 6th Writing Contest
The flames of conflict in Kiria may be extinguished, but what happens after the ash has settled?
That was a question that was left for kirins like Skywell to answer. Three years after the Realm's victory in the Kirian Civil War, the young officer-turned-architect is sent on his first major project in the former rebel city of Chrysanthemum. The project is a simple one: reconstruct several smoldering city blocks that could truly represent the new embers of modernity that Kiria is taking. The project is almost prepared for groundbreaking and the bulldozers are revved up.
That is, until a petitioner arrived in Skywell's office.
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This has a very nice ending to it. Skywell had decent intentions, but it is funny how extremely good ideas turn out to be awful in the end. I hope Skywell realized that. There's no question that these things written in this short book has happened before, and never end well. Anyway, it was a really nice submission, better than mine anyway, and I hope you do well in the contest
This is a nice piece, with a simple premise and short and sweet execution. Keep up the good work.
Always nice to see Kirin stories and some world-building surrounding them.
This was an interesting read; the atmosphere, scenery, and glimpses of Kirian culture and general worldbuilding are excellent, and Skywell seems like a good character.
However, I think it would make the story even better if we were shown his new plan (I'm thinking it's less modern architecture from the rest of the world transparented to Kiria, and more a modern take of the local architecture, with a bigger emphasis on the needs of the kirin-on-the street like the foals with their hoofball) more explicitly. Maybe another section where he unveils the altered and improved plans to his superiors in the Reconstruction authority would be good?
Yooo featured box, grats to ye
A good piece of a belated realization. Kiria needs to change, and change comes at a price. But is the price too much to bear again?
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Thanks for the praise! I had considered that at first, but I was concerned that adding it in might slow the pacing of the story, as I wanted most of it to be focused on his conversation in the office, and I wanted to leave it a little ambiguous at the end. I would have done it for a multi-chapter story, though this one specifically is for a writing competition relating to a HOI4 mod, Equestria at War. This was my first time writing about kirins, and for a country that hasn't been added yet no less.
The ending isn't all that clear to me. What is he going to do, just rebuild the original buildings?
another question, this is based on chinese history right?
This was a nice little story. Always neat to see Kirin get some focus, and it had a very endearing message to it.
That's an interesting tale, with good culture and society building.
And that Chinese characters in the title…interesting~
A shame they didn't appear more in the story, they look quite fascinating.
I don't fully understand what happened in this story.