All The Places You Go

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All The Places You Go

As Igneous Rock Pie nears the end of his life Pinkie will ensure he gets to fulfill his dreams he never got to fulfill.

Entered into A Thousand Words Contest II. (How did I not know this was a thing!?)

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SparklingTwilight

SparklingTwilight #1 · May 31st, 2023 · · ·

This is certainly strong competition in the drama category (if you decide to enter the thousand words contest). Good work!

Jhoira

Jhoira #2 · May 31st, 2023 · · ·

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What? WHAT!? Why was I not told if this!? Oh, that passing acquaintance is going to get an earful!

Turbotune

Turbotune #3 · Jul 27th, 2023 · · ·

I like it when people show the Pie family in a good dynamic. They're such great and responsible ponies!

Also: The reason you don't know about the contest is because some people don't check the trending groups and stories often, and some other people think the contest's effort is too low to be posted on a site blog

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #4 · Sep 18th, 2023 · · ·

"Though most welcome. I would ask, is it because of the news that the doctor gave me?"

oof! what a hammer to bring down

They even overlooked the rock farm.

that one of the places Igneous has never been is a mountain within sight of the rock farm he’s lived in his entire life really is so him

If he was honest, Igneous Rock Pie would have just as soon sat home with his daughter. But his daughter liked to do things, and thus he did things with her. Even more so now that his time was drawing so close. "It is my pleasure to travel this path with thou."

oof! that is so parenthood

But it was still impressive, and Pinkie was hopping around like crazy.

aww, i can definitely imagine Pinkie bouncing around on those pegasus clouds

Blinking in surprise, Igneous Rock Pie frowned slightly. "What plans do you speak of, my daughter?"
"What... You said every time you finished work." She tilted her head to the side. "Don't you remember, father? You'd look up at the mountain and say it."

augh this is going to all stem from a Pinkie misunderstanding that is just so very her, isn’t it?

He repeated his words he said in front of his daughters, the same he ended every day's work with. "One of these days, I am going to cross that river, climb that mountain, and walk amongst the clouds."

oh this is really good! i can just imagine Igneous having saying this as a habit, to remind himself at the end of every day that his time here with the family he loves is a finite and precious thing. i really do feel the tug at my heartstrings with this one. just excellent work, thank you so much for writing!

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #5 · Sep 18th, 2023 · 1 · ·

Oh, this was heartwarming and heartrending by turns. An outstanding Pinkie, kind, considerate, loving… and still thinking ninety degrees from most ponies. (And really, given the world she lives in and the nature of her father, who can blame her for taking that last line literally?) The specter of death hangs over the whole thing enough to merit the Drama tag, but honestly, you could have also entered this in Slice of Life or even Comedy. (You did do a big setup that pays off with a punchline.) Even so, this was a touching read. Thank you for it.

Falkenlied