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Nova Star Sparkle


A guy with a brain that doesn't care about feasibility, but fun. Moreover I render Alicorns way to overpowered. xD

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Applejack has just wrapped up a long day of work and is now looking forward to finally getting home. However, a certain circumstance complicates things for her and spoils her mood at the same time. Fortunately, she has loyal friends who are always there for her when she needs them, and one of them is particularly special in her eyes.


Source to the Image on DeviantArt is the Cover itself (I know there is a watermark on the image, so no need to tell me. Yet so far the artist hasn´t responded if I´m allowed to use the Image. If he/she disagrees I will remove it)


Got nothing further for the description so have a cute pone: :ajsmug: :twilightsmile:

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Comments ( 12 )

That's very nice and sweet :twilightsmile:

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Aww thanks:twilightsmile:
Well that was the intend of it and as said I wrote down what came to my mind as I saw the picture itself.

Another beautiful and lovely story <3

She really is the most kind creature this side of the multiverse
She is INCREDIBLY kind

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The story is as beautiful as her, I had a lot of fun writing it. It´s these things that let me feel better <3

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She truly is <3
Wish we had her here to bring earth back onto it´s tracks. Honestly, I wouldńt be against an alicorn rule, from what I have seen it only gets better.

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True
CMON SUNSET! GIVE US ETS PANDEMIC ON EARTH!

This was a nice, cute story. A simple premise with a decent execution. My only complaint would be the frequent mechanical errors (grammar, spelling, punctuation) and the mild Lavender Unicorn Syndrome, but other than that, it was pretty solid.

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I'm no native english speaker and did my best to have as less mistakes as I could. Point them out if there are critical ones, I would be happy to correct them. (Also I believe that the English and German language do have very distinct ways of punctuation. I have often seen "," before "and" or sentences like that:

"No, I won't do that," Twilight said.

I would set the comma behind the quotation marks as that is how my native language does it. Is either or both of them the right way to do it?)

Yeah I know, lavender pone syndrom is a thing I struggle hard with:rainbowlaugh: Can't help myself though, always using the names does kind of seem wrong to me. (I will fix it here in a second and try to do it less in the future.)

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I understand if English is not your first language, and the story is still pretty well-written in spite of that. If you're having difficulty identifying errors in your work, I'd recommend you find a editor or proofreader to help you. I don't have time to be anyone's editor, unfortunately, but I'll say that the sentence you highlighted is correctly punctuated (for English, at least). There is a section on this in the FimFiction writing guide, which I always recommend people read.

Hello! This fic caught my attention, so I read and reviewed it. I do enjoy the simple atmosphere, which is calming to read. Choosing to have no dialogue at all is interesting, and I think works quite well.

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Hehe thanks! I always like it if others also enjoy reading what I wrote. The story was written on a day I had a hardship and needed something to let me feel better. I wrote AJ the way I would like to be felt for by my friends. Thats probably not noticeable, but nevertheless funny to know.

Also yes, I´m not native English, did my best with the translation tools I use to convert it. My English is not bad but I am far from knowing all the phrases this language uses.

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