Pinkie Pie had a simple plan. Bake a very special dessert for the very special Unicorn she wanted as her very special Somepony. Of course, with Pinkie Pie, nothing is ever simple. Especially not when a mischievous Draconequus loans her a new recipe book, that he SWEARS is safe.
Ponyville's #1 party planner will sure have her work cut out for her.
This is great so far! Can't wait to see what will happen next
If the recipe did harm either then it will be more than just Mrs. Cake on his tail
Wow that's a lot of baking soda and baking powder!! Almost makes the bizarre ingredients seem normal, but at least it'll be fluffy!! Excited to see where this story goes!!
Eee I'll be looking forward for the next part, this is great so far!
And many other instances, discluding the chapter title, which I like.
I’m afraid you have LUS (Lavender Unicorn Syndrome, it’s the MLP fandom version of Burly Detective Syndrome), easily curable, just use "she."
I thìnk you should have just italicised this and have her think most of this and in the end, have her simply say "I wish I had another cookbook! Something that
wasis really unique!" to cue DiscordDiscord seems to actually be afraid of Mrs. Cake, I would be!
I wish we got a bit more of a look at when Pinkie’s feelings for Twilight developed, but so far so good.
No, the fourth wall breaking is one of the biggest traps for bad Pinkie Pie writing, it’s canon-esque, sure, but it turns many people away.
–conveniently appearing as if on cue to finish a very specific task.
LUS alert!
Uhm, she isn’t the least bit confused? Pinkie actually tasted a rainbow and Dash told her they "aren't known for their flavour," I don’t think she'd just pet her add rainbow dust added into a cake.
"Pinks" is a nickname people occasionally use when it comes to Dash referring to Pinkie, why? Just curious but is there a canon instance?
Strange detail towards the end...
Orbs?! Oh God, oh sweet Celestia, oh dear Luna NOT ORBS! Eyes, pupils, why must it be orbs, what is an orb? It’s an eye! Sorry, not a big fan of the trope.
An incompleted word should end with an em dash, "T–... Thanks, Twilight,"
The ending was... strange, is it a hallucination? Imagination? Or was that actually her Grannie Pie?