Just an idea i'm trying out. Popped into my head one day. Similar concept to Why am I Pinkie Pie?! But I have not read that story. If there are any problems please let me know.
A human somehow is popped into Equestria and has to cope with a new environment as well as culture, how will this young man fare?
On hiatus till I get some stuff in real life sorted out (namely college, exams and work) and other stuff on the net (like working out the next part of the story first then finding a willing editor/proofreader in the group)
Chapters (1)
YAY! Another HiE story for me to read!
*reads it*
Man, your adverb use is bad. Adverbs are only used as a detail, or when they are necessary. At the beginning of the story, you used an adverb two times in a single sentence. The second adverb was okay, but the first one... Absolutely worthless and it's quite redundant. Even if it is redundant, you do not want any level of redundancy in your adverbs.
Next thing, the ...s!
Geez, you overuse them. Commas are much, MUCH better to use, and they look nicer.
There is your constant grammar/spelling/punctuation/capitalization mistakes, please fix them, and you seem to be using an overused premise, (HiE) making this story recieve more negative attention. Besides, there is a story in which a human switches bodies with Pinkie Pie, and this isn't much different.
1260347 Thank you for the insight and yes, I am aware of the human in Pinkie Pie story. I believe there was also a Gordan Freeman in Celestia too.
To get to the point, this is an exercise to practice my writing even if it is an overused concept. I very much appreciate the feedback and I will fix those as soon as my lectures are done.