Just interested in Changelings and making alt universe's with events being similar but changed slightly
Chrysalis didn't always be the only Ruling Queen of the changelings during the Lunar banishment
Alternative Universe where Chrysalis had a sister who sympathised with Equestria
This story is on hiatus as I write the rework and working on my other story,this will be updated just at a later point
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Interesting story idea, but spelling and grammar could use work. Spend some more time proof reading and don't rely on spell check; It doesn't catch everything.
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I like the story you wrote so far, and I see some potential in it, but your grammar needs to be improved. Like all of the individual letter I's should be capitalized, some words having misspelled letters or being misspelled and the spacing between words and sentences. Try to do a draft and check for errors to correct before you publish a chapter it can really make a difference in improving a story, you're telling.
I have gone back and redone some chapters in terms of grammer and a couple added sentences here and there