Slavery. He was born and grew up with, and is something he cannot tolerate. Trapped on a planet where everyone of his kind is a slave will bring the worst of the Lord of the Sith.
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The revolution has begun, cue in the united rebellion and empire music. Although, it would've been more dark & badass for Vader if he cut the guy's dick off who tried to rape Night Glider and Vader can slice one of her wings off as punishment. Showing everyone the example they witness to never piss him off and to never trigger his past memories.
MOAR
Mmm....Prince Shining Armor and his army vs. Darth Vader and his slowly growing ragtag group of freedom fighters.
Seems like a one sided battle. I mean, Shining Armor doesn't have the same amount of military experience or competency as Darth Vader. Because let's be honest his combat record is less than what you would called impeccable.
If he was under Darth Vader's command he would've find himself having difficulty breathing or his subordinates will notice his head shorter statured if you get my draft.
Great chapter
So Shining does support oppressing humans...
Ooh hot damn man your writing got me pumped for the next chapter keep up the great work
welp Shining would get his ass beaten so hard everyone would disown him just for that
Shinings finna die
So...............anyone wanna place bets on the beating shinning going to get? Im saying 500 bits says he last 1 min against a ticked off vader lol
Gues he gonna say the old line "I slaughtered them like animals"
Something rarely noted, Vader was a warrior. But he wasnt a murderer. He was a honorable warrior in spite of himself. Looking for challenge and finding none. But some things? He wouldnt bear, he wouldnt bear at all.
Imagine this when shining armor meet him and said..
"Open fire"
Can’t wait for more!
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...???
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Oh, he'll make negotiations and agreements all right. Just be prepared when he decides to make changes to the agreements, whenever he chooses to do so later down the road.
About freaking time we get a good Vader story.
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Thank you my dear, my heart booms with joy for knowing people are enjoying
I am loving this story.
Keep up the great work dude! Seriously, you're keep Vader consistent and in line with what he values as a person. Vader is an evil dude sure, but he's got standards.
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Yes! Thank you, he maybe be a heartless killing machine, however, he is a human being, he has feelings, he has lines which he can cross and not, and i am trying to show this to the readers
Im loving this story keep up the good work
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“I have altered the agreement, Pray I don’t alter it further.”
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You’re welcome. There is a video or two by a YouTube channel called “make it dirty” look up the videos: Darth Vader Remembers, Anakin’s Forgets, and Suffering. The music for each video is amazing and very emotional.
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“It was foretold you would be here. Our long awaited meeting has come at last.”
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“No.. I am your father”
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“Search your feelings, you know it to be true.”
Recently acquired.
Also you wrote "Then they" when the slave girl answered him. If that was a sutter, switch the N for a Y, if not, delete Then from the sentence
Accidentally forgot to capitalize the I, and put do between to and her
track. not trade
I would like to point out that a story in legends claimed that Watto was not only a close friend of the family, but that he was a master who never put his hands on Shmi or did anything of the sort. Infact, Watto was shown to not be a complete douche as early as Episode 1 when he gave Anakin a half day as a slave, so the depiction of him as a cruel man is false. Especially for the fact that Watto literally payed them enough money to get their own house.
From Wookiepedia:
So that's a tick off the stories adherence to Star Wars Lore. The lore of FIM is completely raped by this story so I am not going to even pretend that the creator will follow it.
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That does explain why the two were so cordial in Episode 3...
ok why is he taking this so badly? the empire is 2 steps away from being run on slaves yet he seems ready to have a break down after seeing these slaves?
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I’d Honestly Love to see him try
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I don't get this....... he'll happily destroy entire planets, commit utter and complete genocide, allow physical and psychological torture without even so much as blinking, but something like rape is a no-go according to his so-called standards?........ I fail to see the logic in this at all
Plus the fact that as stated by another, the Empire is essentially using slaves themselves anyway, so why is Vader so up in arms about slavery here?
OK didn't expect to make a new comment so quickly but I've read a few more chapters.
I think my problem is the first chapter has to really hook a reader, since they will notice flaws more easily. Once you're invested it's easier to look past issues like occasional grammar and spelling problems.
That said there's still some glaring ones in the last few chapters (2-5). At one point "thunder" is used to reference the visuals (eg you meant lightning!). Also the first human Vader meets calls him a God of Darkness, though Vader acts like he said God of Anger. I'm not even sure what's going on there.
But the main thing I wanted to comment on was the rape of the pony in this chapter. Vader is very much the hero of his own story (well, apart from all the choking he does). I don't think he would leave her to be beaten. And there would have been some interesting ideas that could have been explored.
The key ideas I would have run with here are:
1. Vader would say she is one of them now, as they have forced her to suffer as they have. Thus, he decrees she should be freed from them, as they have been freed from the ponies. Vader orders her to be let go and she flees.
2. Vader would tell them they must be better. To not let anger and fear control them, but to use those emotions to become more powerful as he has. If they capture an oppressor, they must hold some sort of trial for their crimes. Discuss amongst themselves how this pony treated them (perhaps showed mercy or tried to help them, perhaps was exceedingly cruel), decide on a verdict and sentence, and carry it out, in a civilized manner. They must show they are better than their pony oppressors. If they don't, then the ponies were right to treat them as animals, as they are acting like animals.
3. Vader has another reason for letting her go he won't mention, he's pissed at the way they treated her, and is essentially freeing her to punish them.
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According to the comics Vader definitely hates it. IIRC the Emperor doesn't allow him to do anything about it since it's essential for the economy of the worlds that use slaves to work, and they trade with other worlds etc. So there would be a domino effect. Plus in the Outer Rim the Empire could never enforce a slavery ban anyway since they don't have the presence there to do so.
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Great comment! Unfortunately I didn't think about it at the time, and even then I don't think I would change much, the thing is that vader hasn't changed. He knew how she felt about the slaves and he knew she would be more of a massive burden than anything else. And being the pragmatic monster that he is, he simply didn't give a damn whether she would live or die.
Could she provide valuable information? Yes, she could, but for Vader, establishing that he supported the justice (Revenge) of the slaves against their captors was his main goal, it was exceedingly important not to alienate them in believing that he favored the slaver to them.
And in the matter of a fair trial, they are a group of nomads and newly freed slaves, they don't know what a trial is, for them it doesn't exist, as they have never experienced a fair trial or learned about such a thing. Their trial was deciding what was the best fate for one of the owners who made them suffer, and in the heat of the moment you always act abruptly, and they thought it was in their right to exercise revenge, or simply wanted her to feel a little bit of all they went through.
And from the grammatical problems, I'm really trying to fix everything I went wrong, but I'm too focused on real life issues to focus on that and I still have to concentrate on publishing new chapters, so it's hard, I'm trying to find an Editor to help me but it's been very challenging