Slavery. He was born and grew up with, and is something he cannot tolerate. Trapped on a planet where everyone of his kind is a slave will bring the worst of the Lord of the Sith.
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Nice he has the darkness on his side wonder what happens next
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indeed
...Did you inbed music on this page?
Kneel before the Dragon of Zakuul!
This is a great role model to follow;)
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Sadly no
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Nevermind, it turned out to be the perfect timing of my phone's notifications going off.
Main Theme for Star Wars done on a music box.
It coincided with Vader's triumph.
Am i the only one who got Loki from Avengers vibes from that?
Maravilloso.
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Hope not, because that bitch is dead. Unless your talking about the player who chooses to become Emperor of Zakuul.
Not surprising considering the fact that Anakin tamed both the Son (Dark Side incarnate) and Daughter (Light Side incarnate).
I'm still wondering when Palpatine is gonna show up. There's no way he didn't sense such disturbance in the Force.
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Or so everyone thinks... ;)
This is the guy who cheated death more than once and I definitely won't put any money that it will stay this way.
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You all are gonna understand why no one from the outside is interfering in the future, The Old Republic players are gonna have a blast!
So Equestria had its own version of personification of darkness?
And it was Nightmare Moon
This is a moment Discord where you run away
Now I will admit that you have featured some very cool cover art for this story over time, but for the love of pie PLEASE STOP CHANGING IT ALL THE TIME. More often than not I recognize a story by the cover art and the constant changing of covers on this one is honestly getting very annoying for me.
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Sowwy ;w;
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Again, you featured some very cool art, just please stick with one. If you want a blog page or featured box of fanart and the like on your front page featuring the various art, that's all well in good, just... stick to one cover.
I know I'm a little late in asking this, but may I please have a translation of the weird text?
If you do add palpatine and he joins Vader well there just can’t be a story anymore not because he’ll ruin the story but they’ll both basically kill everyone that fights them it’s like putting two timberwolves against a group of foals it’s just gunna end badly for the ponies
Palpatine: I sense a disturbance in the Force. One unlike and like that which I have not felt before. I will need a epic speech prepared.....something, something Dark Side. Something, something complete. Yes...just needs a little work.
Tarkin: Who are you talking to Sheev?
Palpatine: No one! I just needed intelligant conversation and you sure arent intelligent!
I am Bread
No you lemon
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The Text is actually in English...admittedly difficult to read, but possible if you treat it like a 3D magic drawing and focus on it a bit.
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Oh, yeah, I see it now. Just had to use my imagination a little bit. Thanks for the help.
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You're welcome 👍
You know, you should probably make it known in the stories description that this story is a sort of YHaY story where humans are enslaved. I came across this story thinking different, and didn't even realize it was like this until halfway into the second chapter. Just an idea as to prevent people from misinterpreting what this story actually is.
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Ah, a fellow with a knack for spotting a lack of good writing. Careful, idiots tend to hate you for that.
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I did, however a LOT of people started to complain that it wasn't a "true" YHaY story because the humans are sentient, so i will let like this. Thank you for the suggestion tho
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You never read the comics of when Vader discovered this? He stopped everything he was doing and went to immediately to confront his master, who after come with some BS excuse he accepted and left, but on the inside, he never trusted his master again and his hatred for him only grew.
And rape? He was a slave, so something like forced intimate relations were seen by him since he was a boy, they are property to be used and not to retaliate, it is something that he won't ever again want to witness, and torture is like some twisted justice to him, see someone suffer from his past actions.
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As I said in the description, Vader was not satisfied with what happened for the simple fact that the troops fought more like a bunch of maniacs than soldiers, and he disciplined the officers for what happened. Aka killed them.
I described that he went ahead, destroyed everything in his path and opened holes for his troops that meant he was not present to control their acts, and on top of that, the troops were completely influenced by Vader's hatred, which gave another bonus of hatred and barbarity to the troops.
And the hypocrisy is not accidental, I am making many of the troops complete monsters to show that the best intentions like freedom can be executed with completely horrifying acts. "The path to hell is filled with good intentions"
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To answer your question of the plot holes, the soldiers are acting like 'maniacs' for the simple fact that they now can do something about the suffering done on them by the ponies, so that's the main reason on why they act like a vengeful mob, but relax, i will go to the better traits on the future.
And these mixed messages that i made are the main flaw of the Sith, excess, he is trying (And struggling a fuck ton) to be a better person and leader, however, his Sith instincts, hate and anger gets the better of him, and make him act irrationally and completely power-hungry.
Just like any other sith.
His Master worked a lot to make him like the monster we see today, and he was damn effective at it. I made this much back and fourth of Vader to create conflict between him and Thorax in the future, and after that some character development
And yes, I am a bad writer and I know it, I write this for fun, so much of the stuff you see wasn't very well thought out at first, it wasn't until I got so much support that I started digging deeper into the story and trying to create something decent. Sorry if you're not satisfied, but if you want a well-written and massively thought out story with amazing grammar, I'm not the guy for the job.
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Okay, sorry if I came off as a sneering jerk. I’m used to writers defending their writing to the death rather than acknowledge criticism, but that doesn’t excuse how Ive been rather nasty in my tone. Sorry about that. I do hope you get better though and your explanation helps a ton with the context.
Also, thank you for being graceful in your response. That shows a lot of maturity and you just gained my respect after responding to my less than helpful comment.
bro u aint a bad writer, I legitimately enjoyed this. It's art, as long as the text is legible, with a decent plot, the story's fine. So far I've been able to read your story, and I've always been a sucker for these "man brings slave revolt, and supercharges it with superpowers" kinda story, and this one pulls it off well imo.
in short
STFU BOUT BEING A BAD WRITER CUZ U AINT
and have a nice day
PS: downvoting ur comment toaster cuz they lyin, u aint bad at writin