Slavery. He was born and grew up with, and is something he cannot tolerate. Trapped on a planet where everyone of his kind is a slave will bring the worst of the Lord of the Sith.
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Another great chapter but I think you put it a chapter early as isn’t this after thorax became a sith?
Yeah, these chapters are out of order now.
Now we see the fruits of Vader's training. Beating Rainbow Dash in single combat, and I have a feeling that he was just toying with her. Now Rainbow is captured and most likely to be executed.
Out of order, but a good chapter!
I love how ironic this is coming from the ponies. Oh I hate them soooo much
Sheesh, everyone's out of character these days XD
Good chapter, tho you did mix up the order a little
Calm down people! I noticed too, fixed
There is no way that Vader didn't sense them, the same with Thorax after training
Now, I think that Vader should grab by force the rest in hiding and choke to death useless ones .
Then use the force to get information and kill all of them off
10583766 Execution would be a real waste in the long run. There's so much more potential with hostages or maybe even converting sides. Show rainbow – the true light and not the eternal fake sun.
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Yes, when it can be negotiated, but they can't trade them back to Equestria.
Either use the force to get all the information and execute them later
Or execute them now
They don't have that big army to guarantee their safety and that Equestria won't just rescue them with big force.
Suprise is their advantage for now
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There are some things I thought to Vader in this scene, like, Vader could possibly be one of the most powerful force users alive, (You don't have to be telling me that Revan is stronger, so the term 'alive'), in front of a crowd of hundreds of people, he was not looking for them and magic works much like the force, it comes from the essence of life of each being, and both were suppressing it to increase their stealth, combining with the lack of attention Vader was paying, and you have two invisible pony's.
Another thing, do you think Vader didn't know? He's fucking Darth Vader, if he wanted, he could have literally crushed Rainbow Dash with force with just his mere presence, but he wanted to test his apprentice's abilities and see what the 'Guardians of Harmony's' strength level was, I can say that he was amused at most
Good shit. Even better that you didn’t kill her like many authors would.
“Rebels always have friends coming to rescue them.”
-Thrawn
Using Rainbow to catch the rest of the Elements would be a good move.
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I have other, more entertaining ideas, thank you!
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You have a feeling he was just toying with her? The author clearly wanted there to be no doubt that the whole thing was effortless for Thorax. Every strike, even the one that was amplified by the Sonic Rainboom was clearly stated to have been thwarted absolutely and without any sign of exertion showing in Thorax' stance. Speaking of the Rainboom strike specifically, Vader parting the dust with Force was its own brand of vehicle in this verbal demonstration, the aftermath being what it was.
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I agree with pretty much everything you said and it's kinda what I was thinking. Do you think you could add a little blurb at the beginning of the next chapter showing Vader's point of view, I think it could be funny as hell getting his inner monologue about the stealth group and his apprentices performance. Maybe even how he manipulated everything with his connection to the force...
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Mind tricks?? Are you reading my chapters before they are posted?
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Yep.
You don't really have to be focused on looking for someone with the force to be alerted of something or someone.
Force users have this 6th sense kind of thing
For example, as in comics, when Vader saved Palpatine when he sensed a bomb in his throne room, office.
I don't think that even Palpatine knew that, or at least I can't remember it being mentioned.
Even Emperor's Royal Guard didn't know that too, and 4 of them were almost always there
Another thing is a comparison of skill and control of emotions. Ponies are far from being calm to hide, even when using magic. Their emotions are sensed.
And again skill,
Because ponies are born with something similar to the force they don't have to work hard with it.
This also probably makes it harder for a whole species to become better with it.
Long term advantages are traded for starting advantages in exchange.
They are born with it, but their limit is pretty low.
While people like Palpatine, Vader, Luke,etc....started with pretty much nothing and got skilled with the Force
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Thanks so much dude! It is an honor to recieve high praise like this!
Maravilloso.
Love it
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maybe...
I’m really liking this story, like I said before, it’s pretty simple, but, somehow, at the same time it’s complex and filled with a grace that rivals most of the best writers here, can’t wait for the next chapter!
please please please keep up this fantastic story
You can't spell betrayal without Traya)
That’s alright I would rather read a well written story than a rushed incomplete story. Take your time and keep up the great work.
Rainbowdash:im fast as frick boi
Vader who can reach to speeds comparable to light:yeah fast for a snail
This... Hmm.
I really like the story, but I really hate the writing. It’s a good story, with a great plot, but it needs a bit more refining.
Oh shit yeah huge win now the Elements are useless
I'm confused, so what did Revan do to Vader.
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Gave him insight into the Dark Side.
Meanwhile in another corner of the Galaxy...
Palpatine: What do you mean you cannot find Vader? He is a six foot tall, asthmatic, quadruple amputee burn victim wrapped in black leather! Why do I have a Imperial Navy and Stormtrooper Corp if they cannot find my apprentice.
Elsewhere....
Darth Vader: I feel like someone is talking about me sonewhere...
Don't mind me, just posting a random vid...
Soviet dubbed SW clip
I was hoping Rainbow would be smarter than this. It looks like she would die at the hands of Vader.
The humans better win and rip celestial to shreds
A good rule of thumb for me is to re-read, and really read, your chapters before publishing them. It helps you nab a lot of simple mistakes.
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Thank you, i really am new in the aspect of writting, so create special moments like this one really are not my best, it is easy to create an fighting scene , or an dialogue, but an emotional one is really dificult so comments like yours are really good in Helping me out, i Will do what you told me and try to go back and make it better, sorry if this mistake ruined your experience
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Working on it bud, found the problema and i am solving it, thanks for sticking up in this mess of words that i call story!
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You have not ruined my experience in the slightest. Part of being here and reading freshly written writing is the process of exchanging ideas and the learning of both sides.
In short: You good.
Keep up the good work.
Very nice
When I read the part where Rainbow learns that Thorax 'betrayed' the Ponies, i played the "Anakins Betrayal" Track from Revenge of the Sith, 'cause it kinda fitted right there in my Opinion
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Ah, my catch phrase in life. Earned me the title warcrimminal in my friend group.
Looking at the cover art, I have to say the artist got Darth Vader's appearance wrong. Still looks good though.
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I think it’s a fantasy or mid evil version.
I thought it was Chrysalis that sent those changelings to kill him, I see no way how Celestia would manage to convince changelings to kill him?
(Ah, outstanding! Vader can give a good speech, and proclaiming them 'Sith' was most lovely! In my mind, anyone who embraces the philosophy is 'Sith' regardless of Force Talent.
And I must admit, I'm surprised that Shining Armor was the one not constantly deriding them. I remember he's put down numerous slave revolts before. Rainbow Dash is no surprise though, including being arrogant enough to think she could handle everything herself.)
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i have an idea...
Since thorax is a "puppet", she can use his position as leverage to get Chrysalis on her side as "i can help you deal with that thorn if you do this". With that, she would have an alliance with the changeling queen at the cost of one changeling. (insert "many of you will die, that is a sacrifice i am willing to make" here).
I love the story but there are a few questions I have to ask. I've noticed for awhile that the word "would" is placed in sentences that it doesn't really belong. For instance "and would lower their heads bowing" doesn't seem right "and they lowered their heads bowing" would have seemed more natural. I say this because I've seen it a lot and was wondering if I'm mistaken.
Also Calling Thorax Changeling as if it were his name is just plane wrong. It doesn't sound natural at all given the way its presented imagine if you were reading a story and a sentence was written as such "inches from Human's face that growled like a rabid dog". Its best to just call the person by their name.
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These are my typos and manias with this 'would' business, I already noticed this mania and I'm already correcting it as soon as possible, to call him 'Changeling' as if it were a name was also a mistake, I'm sorry, I I've already corrected
In the words of Cad Bane, "If that's not the Quacta calling the Stifling slimy.
And look what happened to her in the end. She had "choked" on her arrogance and brashness. You're a damn fool, RD.