Slavery. He was born and grew up with, and is something he cannot tolerate. Trapped on a planet where everyone of his kind is a slave will bring the worst of the Lord of the Sith.
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The end of Equestria as they know it.
Vader's New Human Empire almost looks like the Space Marine Chapter of the Imperial Fists.
You made a repeat of the same sentence right here.
Don't you want to make it Bold for Vader?
wow first to comment thats a first good chapter looking forward to sun buts reaction
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Technically, your not the first. Sorry. 😐
when did the Empire of the Hand Get Here
Why do you write present tense scenes as if they are past tense by using would and could all the time? It's kind of disorienting reading it.
For instance..
Sounds better if you write it like this: 'He felt a tap on his shoulder, Arrow turned his head to see who had interrupted him while he changed his clothes. Arrow smiled at the greenish-blue Crystal pony next to him, it was his best friend, Hardwings'
I'm not hating or anything I love this story but the vocab and grammar mistakes can be a bit off putting, do you have an editor?
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Oh sorry you are right! fixed! And yes i actually do have an editor
Blue blood will feel that in the morning 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂
vaders fist
Long live lord Vader!!!
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If one he didn't die from that, or two if he isn't killed by Vader and his army.
Whelp, it's bad news for Blueblood's future ideal kingdom that's going to fall down harder than his own baby balls. Time for a good theme for Lord Vader and his Empire as they crush the former prince's dreams and making an example to all of Equestria's leaders; Vader and his new Empire are rising from the ashes of broken slave chains.
Me: PEACE!!!!! THROUGH!!!! POOOOOWEEEEEEEEERRRR!!!!!!!
And here. We. Go.
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The new flag is fire!
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indeed
He of ashen skin and smoldering hate,
Lord of rage, lord of dark, lord of fire.
A honed weapon before the gate,
Bring forth your blade to light their pyre.
Army of justice, light for the shadow,
March onward to collect the debt.
Vengeance by hammer, sword, and bow,
Too late, alarm from the parapet.
A false righteousness, scum who lies of virtue,
The reaper collects that which he has tilled.
His pain for our pain, long overdue,
Across the snowy earth, blue blood spilled.
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True to that
Weren't the crystal ponies more sympathetic to the humans?
I thing you meant goddess
The former Slave really doesnt like people lording it over him. And now, on Equestria there is no one powerful enough to do so.
Well except Luna and Celestia. I doubt Twilight or Cadance will hold a seconds chance against Vader.
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Not all of them, just like not all of ponies are slavers
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Fixed
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Well? Where are they??!! Considering the fact that Vader and his Army are in a massive vengeance crusade to free every human. And then brutally KILL the Pony Slavers!!!!!!
It wouldn't take a genius for the Ponies that aren't Slavers in the first place, and they Hate the concept of it. And who are actually sympathized the poor Humans. They should start changing their allegiance with Celestia/Luna. And try to get on Vader's Good Side WITHOUT Pissing him off, or getting killed by him.
No wonder the pony nations' armies are in such a sorry state, they're killing off their soldiers before the enemy even comes!
I don't known if you notice, but, you seem to have repeted a lot of phrases in this chapter.
A certain blood god will be feed on that bloody night
Might want to take a look at this paragraph...
I love that emblem. It’s like Vader’s version of the Imperial Fists from Warhammer 40k.
This paragraph is basically repeating itself.
No reason to spoiler that, kinda throws off the immersion.
With the exception of the bit in the middle it is another repeated paragraph.
Enjoying this story and looking forward to more.
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Fixed! Thank you!
So It has begun. The start of the first chapter of War.
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Yeah, but Blueblood's an asshole
Vader’s Fist has arrived.
Ya comienza la acción!
all of the dogs
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And it's going to leave quite the impact on Equestria's face.
The 501st is here, and shall wreak Death on the Slaveowner Species that is: Ponies
(Ooooh, Vader's Fist! Yep, that works!)
I thought Vader would say,
"You're the nephew of a god? WELL I AM A GOD!"
(Meanwhile, In a alternate Universe)
“What....are....You?”
me? What am I.....Hmmm...WhatamI?whatamI?whatamI? WHAT. AM I!? Well, Let’s start with a Dash of insanity, Topped off with with a Pinch of Madness, Two tea spoons of Scientist, 4 Cups of arsonist, 5 grams of pure Hatred for Slavers like you, and for my Latest ingredient: Revolution’s Spearhead. You may be the Nephew of the Goddess who hides behind her pretty mask of self righteousness, But I am the Destroyer of that mask, I am the One who will slay your gods and Goddesses, I will put a end to my former Kind’s Suffering, I am the Apocalypse Given Form.....
I am....Kamen Rider Ruin, For I am the Ruination of The Society My Kind has built under You oppression