It's a bit weird to just take Nightmare Moon in prison from the outset, but over that hump is some cute, kinky, and sexy storytelling.

I enjoyed it.

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Well, to be clear, he did offer Nightmare the chance. He didn't force it or himself on her. The guard couldn't exactly release her so that she could deal with her heat alone either.

I hope that I was clear enough that she was in complete control of the situation even when it may have seemed like she wasn't. He never did anything that Nightmare didn't want him or ask him to do. He never included himself in the act, so to speak. It was just about pleasing her.

Other than that, I could have chosen to start from before the beginning of the first chapter to add more detail, but the actual drawing by Rini has Nightmare Moon screaming that she isn't in heat. I am elated that you like the other bits of it. Honestly, I like that you find it cute the most, because I was trying to bring details other than sex to the tale, like the melancholy she feels to be a nightmare.

Thank you for reading and commenting, dear.

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I am glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you for taking the time to tell me. If I may ask, are there any parts that you fancied the most?

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I'm sorry, I should clarify, I mean that our starting place in the story, where Nightmare Moon just happens to be in an extended stay in prison, is what's weird. The interactions with the guard from start to finish are 👍

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Yes, you are right, Bobbles. There is no need to apologize.

I should have explained the situation more adroitly. Nightmare Moon was defeated and imprisoned by Celestia, rather than being banished, so this is long before Twilight and her friends. That is a mistake on my part if it isn't there in any way. For my first commission, I quite like it. I love their interactions too.

You know, I could honestly see myself continuing this or explaining what happened if someone asked for it as a commission. I really enjoyed developing their relationship.

I really like how you depicted Nightmare Moon. She had more personality than most give her. And I have to admit the sex scenes were pretty hot. Its not a lot of them that do anything for me.

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Well, that is no small praise, dear. Thank you very much for elaborating.

I wanted to give her a reason to act in the way that she does with Luster. I think that she would still feel desperately alone even as Nightmare Moon. It is that very thing that is keeping her as this nightmare and seeing him want to be with her despite that is quite perplexing and strangely endearing to her.

As a more provocative topic, I think that Nightmare would be both dominant and submissive in making love, depending on the situation and her mood, so I am glad that you enjoyed those love scenes too.

I loved it it was amazing and it is going into the favorites Andy you earned a follow congrats

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Why, thank you. I am happy that you enjoyed it so.

Excellent job with the details and drawing out the scenes between them, the teasing makes it much more sensual.

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Thank you very much, that means much~! I loved creating their characters throughout these three chapters, both separately and together.

“Oh yes, that feels good,” the Bringer of Forever Night spoke, feelings tingles all along her body before straightening herself once again. “Ahh, now, what mischief shall I partake in first?”

How about getting out of there, and making sure Sunbutt can't find you?
At least until you recovered enough strength to finally beat her?

“Oh, my Celestia.”
She giggled amusedly. “Oh, she has nothing to do with this. Now, stay right there while I make myself comfortable.”

: "Whatever you want to believe, Nightmare Moon." *continues to munch popcorn*
For all we know this had been her plan all along: Find a guard who adores her, ensure he is assigned to her Cell, put a heat spell on both of them and enjoy the show.
Faster (and way more entertaining) than banishing her and waiting a thousand years.

The Trello and Derpibooru links are duds.

Don't forget, those links are case-sensitive.

I really enjoyed this! I don't normally read fics with sex as they usually feel off to me. This was really cute and a nice surprise among many fics that are just gross.

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Isn’t this suppose to have an anthro tag?