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I'm willing to bet that it will end in 1 of 2 ways:
1. The guys they killed at the supermarket were members of this group, and the group will turn on Cooper as a result
2. The guys they killed belonged to another group, and their comrades will attack this community once they learn where the murderer is
Im loving this so far
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yea, i don't trust that either,
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Yeah, I don't think it's going to be fine and dandy from here on out. Besides, Twilight still needs to get back home somehow.
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Well to your point #2, any group that would have members like that are probably going to be a problem sooner or later anyways.
Главное не спеши с созданием текста/глав.
Мы можем подождать, обучение важнее будет.
Удачи :-)
Didn't seem too jumpy to me. I did notice a few spelling errors though.
That should be "and"
I think that's "overtook"
Either "a loud knock" or "three loud knocks".
I think it is "welded together from multiple pieces of steel".
That looks like that should be a period instead of a comma before the "Here".
That should be "to".
With that, if you need an editor and don't mind the time difference and me being non-native (but still pretty good, if I do say so myself) speaker (I'm from Germany) I'd be happy to lend a hand.
Finally, and I know this sounds cliché as hell, take your time with writing these chapters and focus on school. The story is coming along nicely and it'd be a shame if it or your performance at school would suffer if you try to get a new chapter out every week or so.
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Thank you friend, I appreciate that :)
I dont this is jumpy
Wonder who Adrian and Gabe used to be in life.....also how did they make banners?
Also:
Patrolling
And
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Thanks for correcting those. We might find out more about Gabe and Adrian in the future, but as for the banners, they did have 4 years to make them.
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Good guesses I hope however this group I’ll call them the Blue Falcons due to there banner are legit if Kyle and his partner where with them I doubt Gabe will be happy