After Starlight messes up the show enough times, Trixie decides to temporarily cut Starlight out of their magic act. Starlight goes to old methods to hide her emotions.
After Starlight messes up the show enough times, Trixie decides to temporarily cut Starlight out of their magic act. Starlight goes to old methods to hide her emotions.
This story was placed in the 'Please Read my Stories' group, under the 'I want help for my stories' folder. So, here goes.
I couldn't help but notice the slight problem with the italics. Whole phrases are being italicized when only a few words will do. For instance, this:
It would be better like this:
Small typos:
Comma after the word "Hey".
Comma after the word "Oh".
Comma after the word "whisper".
Other than that, interesting story.
Starlight's eyes were fixated..."
These shouldn't be centered.
"Starlight's conflicted emotions..."
"...just as miserable - it was evident..." Also, an opening bracket is missing.
Comma after "Hey".
Period after "asked".
"Starlight, I'm confused..." Period after "avail".
There is a slight problem with the paragraphing here.
"Today" should be in lowercase.