Through corporate greed and the pillage of the land, companies have marketed magic to the masses. Promising the gifts of Enhanced Magical Prowess in every aspect of your life and even non-natural born gifts through science and magical extraction. Gone are the blue skies and rainbows, long since replaced by brown and shades of grey. Dingy, an earth pony mare, blends perfectly into the landscape around her, largely unnoticed by many and always overlooked.
Being short of hoof with her finances, she submits to clinical trials for extra money to pay rent with Spark Industries. Little did she know that this simple cash grab would turn into such a tangled web of disaster. Leaving behind anypony she ever knew she is sent far into the future, where things were not what she expected at all.
Finding solace in the only voice she has, Dingy struggles to keep her sanity in a world with nopony in it and somehow manage to survive and find her way back home.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u9Dg-g7t2l4
Saw the title and cover, and it instantly reminded me of Mutant Year Zero: Road to Eden
That was quite a ride, I had to power through and read it in one go but the was very thrilling. Now I am intrigued to see how this paradox gets solved.
I was unable to guess the real identity of Rocket. I'm thinking maybe she had something to do with Project Ele or is actually Dingy/Jet. I'm well and truly stumped, but oh so terribly curious as to the answer.
Good story!
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Thanks for the kind words! I'm sorry about the editing, it was rushed and I am fixing it now. I plan for a part 2 soon! I did that thing with Rocket on purpose, I have a plan for her that will be... surprising. But don't go expecting an answer to that question straight away. I'm having too much fun with her character.
Part two will have no word count limit either. I plan for it to be much longer so I can get the details right and really dive into the plot! I'm so happy you enjoyed the story!
I absolutely loved this story! I don't know if you were going with Spark being like Aperture from portal but I love the sciencey things and the normal person thrust in with a bunch of egg-heads lol.
I found Rocket fascinating and can't wait to see them in next parts. Great story mate.
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I'm sorry to say that this was not inspired by that. Unfortunately, I have never heard of that story, but I promise to look into it.
This looks really interesting so far. That ending with Dingy’s data is ominous lol
Ooooh! Your treatment of time travel and alternate universes is really interesting.
Still don't know if Rocket is our current universe Jet or an alternate universe Jet. Though I don't think I could handle it if it was our current Jet. Listening to Rocket, she and Dingy went through some terrible stuff.
And I'm waiting for the "sweetie" payoff!
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No worries! You will get your pay off before too long. I'm just taking a little while off to finish a chapter of one of my longer stories then I will be writing part two.
Good story. Only 23 likes is a crime!
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Well it's still relatively new, I've got high hopes though!
This is amazing. The time travel and everything, the drama, the suspense!
Fantastic story!!
A rare slot in my fave for you.
What about an end, though. Very open and ominous.
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Part two is in the works, I promise lol. I work retail management in a tourist town and this month is the hardest month to find free time. We actually call this month hell month because of the madness that is holiday traffic and what not. That said, I promise that part two is in the works and will be coming out in 2021, hopefully early 2021. These stories take a while for me to write and go through mountains of editing before that can be released properly (even with all of the editing they are not good enough for Eqd lol). I have all the ground work laid and a few chapters done already for part two. If I cant get any major progress done by January 23rd, I will go ahead and make public what all I have so far. Thank you for you kind words! Sometimes comments like yours are the only thing that motivates me to keep writing!
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I know full well what you mean. As an avid writer, I feel the pain of creating a story. Comments are fuel for our soul.
I look forward to the future of your story.
And I know hell month, I was a chef and work in the shipping industry now. Lol
Only as a chef we had hell days.
Friday,Saturday, Sunday, and holidays.
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My heart goes out to you, friend! I'm excited to get back to it, seeing as I do a large chonk of it here at work between customers, I get about 3 words in and I have to help someone. I think at one point I got frustrated and wrote a sentence in this story like... "Ok, Dingy... Don't kill them, they just need their coil changed..." And nearly left it in the story lol.
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The joys of writing on a phone.
Lol
Reminds me of aperture science
Backing back off sounds weird
Oh! It's a freaking pip buck
Does she get to keep the cuff for free?
I wouldn't be surprised if she ended up in the FoE future timeline
4,000 thousand years!? Holy crap!!
That literally sent shivers down my body!!! 😨😨😨😨
Theory time. I'm betting the world went to hell because they were trying to save her
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Kinda? I write a lot of FoE stuff and i wanted an alternate to it. Imagine a fallout world where the semiconductor was discovered.
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I imagine it would be given back in exit processing.
Of course they never planned on bringing her back if she lived
Oh!!! What if the ghost is actually dingy of the future!!?? 😱
She's probably jet or estruss?
My idea of them causing the mess in the future might be right
Then rocker really was jet
Evil company bastards.
Oh!!! It must have been the blats that destroyed the world!!!
So that ponies can say "it's a sexy piece of ass" hahaha!!🤣🤣
The fire didn't kill them permanently is what I bet
This story was freaking great!!!
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I'm happy you liked it! Sorry for not replying to the other comments, but part 2 is in the works and I don't want to give anything away lol
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I'm very happy to hear it
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you know, that's an excellent question. I try to write to the tune of a character's voice when I can, but in this case I would have to say it's hard to nail down. I think she would sound a lot like Zoë E. Bell. Her character is certainly not written from a Kiwi perspective, but as far as sound and how bubbly she can be at times, I would say Zoë would be a ringer for sound.
Edit: as far as pony universe goes: Think a sweeter Trixie. I just love the high pitched squeaks so damn much!
When is the squeal coming out?
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gonna be a hot minute. I like writing these to completion. I tried to force myself to release what I have already, but every time I do I find a plot hole that need filled or a new idea that deepens the plot further. I'm a slave to my own criticism.