Bees are misunderstood creatures.
Unsatisfied with petty pickpocketing and minor larceny, a thief by the name of Silver Night goes after a prized possession of ritzy preservationists from Canterlot. She found a golden flower, promising to yield a high fencing rate, but a colony of bees refuse to let her get away with it.
If you know me, you know what's coming.
This story was not written by me, but my friend TheFlamesofSorrow.
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I'm just going to comment on one thing and leave it at that, but you do have a variety of other grammar issues. You need to stop writing out characters making sounds. It's pretty cringeworthy to read and takes away from your writing in a big way. If you type, for example:
>Protagonist let out a muffled scream
You don't need to expand it to be:
>Protagonist let out a muffled scream
"MMMMMPH!"
If you went back and removed every instance of this error in your story, its quality would go up some.
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Thank you. We'll both remember this in the coming stories and will make changes.