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This is a story about a character I call The Court Jester There’s not much more about him heck I don’t remember most of the backstory I was first writing the character. Oh, but, I do remember is that Celestia wary of them.
I do hope you enjoy The Darkest of The Light
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That's good to know, but what actually happens in this story?
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If I was to tell you what was going to happen where would be the fun in reading it, finding out for yourself.
I’ll see you a question just let me think about things into perspective.
please do enjoy my story, it’s a good one, probably one of my better ones at The very least.
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Is that better I change the introductory description.
Pretty good so far
Can't wait for next chapter
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I think the problem is that the description doesn't give any idea of even the basic idea if what the story is about.
There's nothing to hook a reader's interest.
The description shouldn't spoil the events of the story, but it should give some sort of impression of what kind of story it is and make it sound interesting.
Here's the description of the first book in the Dresden Files as an example.
As a professional wizard, Harry Dresden knows firsthand that the “everyday” world is actually full of strange and magical things—and most of them don’t play well with humans. And those that do enjoy playing with humans far too much. He also knows he’s the best at what he does. Technically, he’s the only at what he does. But even though Harry is the only game in town, business—to put it mildly—stinks.
So when the Chicago P.D. bring him in to consult on a double homicide committed with black magic, Harry's seeing dollar signs. But where there's black magic, there's a black mage behind it. And now that mage knows Harry's name...
It doesn't spoil the plot, but it gives a potential reader an idea of what the story is about in broad terms that try to provoke interest and curiosity about what is going to happen.
Your story might be decent or even great, but the description on the face is just so vague and generic that the first impression makes it sound dull or like you didn't put any effort into it.
Can't wait for next chapter 😊
Why so many downvotes, its not that bad. Just a bit slow to take off.
The Monk
“Shhh, it’s ok. The crotches won’t get you.” - BobAlcove
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That's a little better, but we really don't know who the Court Jester is or why he's referred to as "them" when there's only one of him...
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The Court Jester is non-binary