When Pinkie Pie isn't invited to prepare a party for somepony, she experiences a moment of existential fear. To cope, she invites her friends over for a party. Unfortunately, they're all busy that night, and ask her to reschedule. She does, hoping that will give them time to come give her party the attention it deserves.
Come the day of the party, Pinkie finds that her friends, contrary to her instructions and common party etiquette, have committed faux pas after faux pas, culminating in Rainbow Dash being late! She decides enough is enough, and confronts them all one by one about their manners and behaviour.
Chapters (5)
It was a great story and was set up really well.
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.
Holy shit that ending. One question... were they DEAD? Or simply strung up there like that?
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They were ready to party.
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No, seriously, were they still alive? Because I KNOW you can survive that crap. I'm mentally picturing them SCREAMING with their mouths sewn shut. Ever Play PT? There's a part where a fridge is hanging from the ceiling, and you hear Screaming from inside said fridge. Something about that haunts me to this day, and this ending gives me MAJOR PT vibes.
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Hello?
9062623
The intent was yes, they were still alive. Just severely "modified".
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Thanks.
I have my issues with this. I'm still not sure what happened, or what Pinkie Pie did...
I don't know, I guess I just don't really like it when someone Jeffs Pinkie...
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Pinkie got mad nopony respected her parties. The logical next step was to talk to her friends individually and string them up in your room so you can have tea. Respectful tea.
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With their mouths sewn shut. Because of Jeff Logic.
Sorry, I just don't find this scary. Just confusing.
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I do not understand the Jeff reference.
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Jeff the Killer. That's what every 'insane Pinkie' comes off to me as nowadays. It's not a compliment.
I apologize if I'm being rude in any way.
HAHA
Loved it! I don't usually read creepypasta but this was fantastic
The build up was amazing. Seriously, every chapter built on top of the previous one perfectly.
But the last chapter feels like it was just slapped on. The ending comes too fast to properly set up the feel.
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No, I understand perfectly what you mean. I could have extended the ending much better, but I did not. Thank you for the comment.
This falls into the realm of horror where it is competently done but the basic premise seems to lack...energy? Interest? "Pinkie Pie gets angry, decides to murder or maim her friends without anyone noticing" is a bit too common to be very exciting. While the writing itself was fine, most of the time I found myself not really dragged into it. The ending also felt kinda...random. Well written technically, the premise is just worn out and flat by now.
Twilight always goes with Spike, Applejack values punctuality over cleanliness, Rarity always dresses like that, Fluttershy is too nervous to defect, and Rainbow underestimated the time it would take to get drinks with Soarin.
If you knew them better, you'd be less surprised, Pinkie.
What they lacked wasn't respect...they just have charecter flaws that interfered.
Okay Twilight directly ignored the rules on assumption Spike was old enough, and Rarity was trying to show her appreciation through her care to appearance.
She learned her lesson from last time??
The only parts that kinda don't make sense to me are Rarity's and Rainbow's.Considering they are friends for a long time, it feels strange for Pinkie to get mad at Rarity, since she would know her habbits and the outfits she wears and...you know, the fact that she is a fashionista.
Same with Rainbow:she is the element of loyalty, so I doubt she would miss Pinkie's party due to...drinking. She really sounded like an asshole.At least make it more plausible, for example she could say that she helped Scootaloo with something