So remember when I was just suddenly in Equestria? Everything had gone to hell and I died from blood loss like half an hour after I got there? Yeah well, I'm alive again and in a different Equestria... and this one doesn't look too much better...
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I loved the chapter! I wonder what universe will come next?
Wow, now that is one messed up but enjoyable chapter to read.
I would call this chapter out as nothing but villainous monologueing, but we really needed to know all the gritty details, and there really isn't any delicate way to convey so much past information, is there?
Seriously, what are the options? Monologues, flashbacks, or actually going back in time to witness it... or drinking a suspiciously colored potion that gives you memories that you didn't personally experience... No, there really isn't a great way to convey this much information, after it happens without the point-of-view character having personally witnessed any of it.
I'm really invested in this particular reality that Sal is working on, so I really appreciate getting all this backstory. But there was also nothing wrong with not fully explaining the previous two realities either, despite some flak you got from a couple of commenters.
Well oh dear everything in Equus III went to absolute hell and we had no idea. It's so bad that I recommend the complete universal destruction of the world and oh and this was supposed to be my grand return to this story for 2019.
The plural of princess is princesses. Apostrophe-s is for possessives, not plurals.
Sounds like Sal is about to get a companion on his inter-universal adventure.
*Plays Doctor Who theme*
I'll probably end up being downvoted to hell... but that's just not the kind of chapter I was hoping for.
I was hoping for at least a bit of action, not just infodump. I started reading your story because of all this running away from creepy monsters, trying to save the world, meeting gritty characters and escaping horrible, painful death. Instead I got a monologue. I know that you put a lot of work into it, and it is admirable how well written it is, but it doesn't really affect the story and I don't really care about those details. It wouldn't matter to me in the slightest if it was Chrystalis who broke that world, or Tirek, or Sombra or even Breezies; neither do I really care how exactly did they go about their diabolic plans. But I do care about main characters. Like Salvatore that's left alone with a monster. I think it would be better if Chrystalis was more laconic with her backstory so we could get back to action sooner.
This was actually a great chapter, I rally like the manner explanation of what actually happened behind the scene to get Twilight trap in the sphere, And I especially like to learn of what happened to Equestria once Discord was free and seeing the changelings and all the creatures being in just in a bad spot as the ponies and how the Changeling secret victory was only a prelude for worst. I wonder what happened to Discord to let things get so ugly? Did his Chaos magic went wild and further warped the landscape uncontrollably because their was no force of order/friendship to counterbalance it? I wonder if he just became a mindless beast at that point? I think Twilight, despite all the hell she went through in this world would prefer to stay in her world and try to save what ever is left of Equestia and fight all the way trough, she is nervous wreck when their is nothing for her to focus on in the immediate moment, otherwise she is laser focused determined leader, and with all the back time that she managed to stand she is the hard bitten, but still determined, I think she could be the hero that Equestria needs and maybe get a new set of HoE. I feel that if she accepts Discord's offer it would be abandoning it like she would be turning her back on the her world just out of spite of what happened to her. I think she would rather die trying to save her world rather like she did in the sphere. I think the only out she could take from this is if there was a way to sake at least what's remains of it in trade with I don't think Discord would do that..
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Sorry the chapter wasn't what you wanted, and in all honesty I'd also like to get back to the action after this chapter, but that wasn't what this particular 'arc' was about. There'll be plenty of opportunity for what you're looking for, but it isn't going to be all action all the time.
I've learned with this story especially that you can't please everyone, and it sucks that I couldn't give you what you wanted this time around, but as I said, there'll be more opportunities further down the line. If that isn't enough, then all I can really do is apologize.
Despite the lack of action, I liked this chapter. It was a nice break from all the craziness, every authors gorta understand every story needs a break. Without one the story moves too quick. I, myself, am at a slower part in my story.
Good job, can't wait for the next chapter!
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Honestly, that comment about action just reminds me of how doom 2016 did it’s Lore. It’s simply within the menu of a glossary. If players wanted to look up and get to see what’s happening from all the fun gore demon killing, they could just pause and look it within the game. But this isn’t a game, and it’s an author’s hard work to give this essential and important part of the story so that readers can understand the stakes for twilight to make when discord tells her his proposal. Whatever the author’s decision is to the story we should support it, but not blindly obviously. That comment was respectful and entitled to his/her opinion. I’m just saying that some commentors don’t appreciate the output the guy is making for his fellow audience. There are far too many great fimficts that simply die due to a couple of events and reasons.
Thanks for the chapter! Can’t wait for what happens next! Wonder if twilight is going to join Salvatore on his quest to PURGE of the horrible different universes. While that would be nice to have Salvatore to not have to do this alone, I still want to see him try to talk and have new relationships with future characters within the later universes by himself.
Honestly, I do like that Salvatore is trying his darnest to save at least one terrible universe. But I guess discord doesn’t want that to happen. It would be interesting to see Salvatore to slowly detach himself from his emotions or just guess so pissed from failing he just says fuck it and go the easy way out. It would be pretty interesting to see that since we often don’t take the high road and just go the easy way out. Most people often become quite lazy and don’t persevere when things comes to shove and becomes difficult to achieve.
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To be fair, you don’t upload all that fast. It wouldn’t bother me as much if you uploaded more, but then, that’s selfish.
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True, but the only reason I don't upload fast is because I'm uploading chapters for all of my stories, not just this one. When it comes to putting out chapter in general I upload fairly often (every few days or so) but people who only read one of my stories have to wait longer so it gives the impression that I rarely update at all.
omg i cant wait to hear what he has to say.
it would be cool if she were to join salvatore.
Salvatore, just detonate the stupid bomb and move to another Equestria.
Brother, get the Ultra Marines on the line, and get every fucking gun they can spare
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Nah, just go straight to exterminatus
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Hmm. I didn't even notice the others, lol.
Aaaaaaa but that ending!!
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Guessing I guessed right
Is it me or is there a small problem with the pronouns at the start of this chapter?
Like, here:
The one talking is Twilight (or at least, that's what I get), so there isn't any reason to put it in first person.
There's this same problem several more times in the chapter and I really don't know whether there's something I'm not getting correctly or if it's just a mistake.
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I actually fixed those during my proofreading, but I guess I brought them back when I tried fix some other mistakes I missed and saved on another of same page I'd opened.
For some reason the more Discord makes his point, the more I suspect he's not telling the whole truth.
Im really really hoping that twilight asks discord to teleport spike with chrysalis. If the worlds going to fade it won't matter anyway and it would be some good old fashioned revenge as well as ironic.
You know I saw this fic read the name and thought “well this will be something interesting” can say was not dissatisfied
(I also thought of another name for the fic being: welcome to grimdomqestria cause it kinda feels like the movie zombieland that is getting a remake soon so yeah woo)
I think this is the most exposition I've ever shoved into one chapter, for any of my stories. I'd rather not have to exposit that much all at once again if I can help it, this chapter was kind of draining.
I still enjoy this story, I think, but it was also quite draining for us readers. Like... I feel like Discord could have cut to the chase earlier.