So remember when I was just suddenly in Equestria? Everything had gone to hell and I died from blood loss like half an hour after I got there? Yeah well, I'm alive again and in a different Equestria... and this one doesn't look too much better...
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So this is the fix plotholes chapter.
9010909
I don't think it's a plot hole fix so much as it is pointing out that the obvious solution obviously wasn't going to work. This was something I had fully intended on addressing further in, but apparently I was taking too long so here we are.
Finally. I mean, I have kind of been waiting for this, and now I’m getting excited again.
9010917
Well it wasn't that you were taking too long, it was more like there wasn't even an attempt.
There were some details missed.
Sal despite having some alone time in the cell did not digest things or even tried anything.
Instead let's do all that in front a murderous cat person.
It would be safe to say that what the Capitan thinks of Sal reflects what we all think of Sal.
Well that was an epic fail. But then again he has to really think about his situation. He would need months..... But a slave rebelion in the middle of a mine or plantation, make friends, secret plans, give assignments, slowly plant the seeds of revolution in the pits of hell, and finally destroy your house of oppression and move with your new found followers to destroy Abyssinia!
9010931
And that's perfectly fine. I'm aware that Sal probably isn't an appealing character to many, but we all have to start from somewhere, and unfortunately we're starting at the bottom.
Like you said, Salvatore isn't a logical thinker -- not by default anyway, and like I wrote in the story, he isn't mentally quick on his feet either. Those are traits that aren't inherent to Sal and need to be learned, in this case through trial and error.
So it might take some time and I realize how frustrating it can be, but all I ask for is a bit of patience with the poor fool.
I'm actually very interested in Sal's journey. One possibility I'm very intrigued about is the possibility that Sal might end up getting close, if you know what I mean, with one of the Alternate versions of a character, and have to deal with loosing her when he inevitably has to hop universes.
I love this. Can't wait to read more!
Keep on going, I want to see what happens to him, is he eventually going to die or not, hmmm?
So short but so beautiful.
Loved how he just made himself look stupid when trying to tap into Discord's powers
9010917
Honestly? You took far too long. I can suspend my disbelief for the sake of decent storytelling, but it doesn't really explain why he didn't try using his powers before; you could have shown this earlier and, true, this scene would have played out differently, but the overall flow of the story would read a lot less frustrating.
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Ah yes, why didn't the MC think about trying to use chaos magic within five minutes of... being eaten alive and being mentally scarred?
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You're whisked away and told you get some of his Power and you wouldn't think to try and use some of it? Anyone who didn't try that when death was approaching would have to be pretty stupid.