While on a job to deliver supplies to a new colony in the Andromeda Galaxy, something goes horribly wrong. David Lawson finds himself the sole surviror of a devestating crash on an unknown world. An unkown world full of colorful talking ponies...
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hmm disagree with becoming not human even to save my life id die a human but well that just me a guess still love the story but being human is more important the living to me any way
Lovely work on this one. You didn't gloss over the obvious moral conundrums in making decisions for someone who can't speak for themselves, and the characters all reacted in ways that made sense and felt good for who they were. Even David's reaction makes sense. Shock and surprise along with a healthy dose of "this is weird, but I get to stay with my friends and loved ones now". I gotta disagree emphatically with Gaming here, anyone who would not choose to give up some part of themselves clearly doesn't understand what love is.
All in all, great work and you had me well and truly concerned for David. Can't wait to see the final chapters, even if I am terribly sad that it's ending.
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Thank you. I've really appreciated your thoughts and support on the story. It's been a long journey, 7 months in the making. Still though, don't worry, while I can't say for sure that there's gonna be a direct sequel to this story, I can promise some one-offs and short stories with David and Midnight's future.
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This story is one of those happy, brilliant pieces that could definitely benefit from a sequel, but doesn't need one to feel complete. In the fanfiction community, that's quite a trick. I've quite fallen in love with these characters though, and I will welcome any additional work in their universe. There's a lot of things I'm excited to see, David learning to fly (after he figures out how to walk), learning to cuddle as a quadruped, whether or not they decide to have foals (since they can now!!!), and then whatever message he decides to leave for any future humans who happen to stumble onto this lovely planet of friendship and magic.
So magic was the cause of his headaches....
Also, a pegasus? Fitting actually, since he was a pilot.
Looking forward to seeing the next chapter!
Excellently done!
Leads to an interesting question, though I can guess at the answer. Is David now genetically compatable with Midnight? As in, could they start a family together?
Will there be sequel ...right? RIGHT?!
I think this fits the scene pretty well.
This has been an excellent story from start to finish! I'm looking forward to the epilogue and the happy celebration moments. Thank you for a wonderful ride!
I had a feeling this would happen in this story a couple of chapters back but I didn't voice my concern over it just to be safe that it wasn't actually happening and in the past 2 chapters lifted my hopes of it not happening.....but it did anyways.
The main human character gets turned into a pony at the end of the story....wow
I want to voice my disappointment on this but since its 3:00 in the morning for me I'm gonna do my best not to sound like an ass or a jerk here so please don't take this as me hating this story.
This story was a great and fun read for me when I first found it and I still think it is a good story without a doubt, but after the foreshadowing of the only human character being permanently changed into a pony earlier in the story just ruined it for me for this story. however i will finish reading it as its still a good story that deserves an ending, i still don't like that fact that this story fell into the cliche of.........Oh a human has made it to Equestria by any random chance and the magic there is killing him/her so we need to turn them into a pony to survive.... the amount of times I have seen this applied to good stories is unbearable. i don't know why but it just confuses me as how the human character takes on being turned into something your not so well, like it's not a big deal. Back onto the last topic, the human turned pony to survive magic cliche. I have been looking for new stories to read but I keep ending up finding these stories which at first I didn't mind them to a certain degree, now see them as just an overused plot of some stories today. as I was hoping before, I had hope David would stay human with a happy ending which we'll (hopefully) get but now its just spoiled by the fact he had to be turned into a pony to save his life.
As I said before I hoped I didn't sound like an idiot or an ass as its late at the time of writing this, but i still do very much enjoy the story, I just wished it had taken a different path from the one it is on now. Maybe in the possible next story you write it would be different but its up to to you since your the writer not me. If you want to make a sequel of this story then by all means go ahead, I just wanted to voice out my opinion of what had happen to this story so far so please do not take this as me being triggered and mad at you
it was nice reading this great story of yours.
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I understand your position I guess. I'll be honest with you, there was never a point during the last 7 months where David's transformation wasnt how I wanted to end this. I see how you think its overdone, but that's how I wanted this story to end. The whole point behind the story was to be an origin story for my two OC's. I'm sorry that you're not happy with the ending, but this is exactly how I wanted it to end. There was never an ending planned where David stayed human. I even put this story in a group specifically dedicated to transformation stories. Now, all that said, I think I might write another story with a human staying human in Equestria, but we'll see. I dont think I'm gonna write something as long as The Discovery for a while.
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Possibly...
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Perhaps...
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I'm glad you've enjoyed it. All the support I've gotten over the last several months has meant everything to me.
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im sensing a trollestia here
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maybe...
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I knew it
Wow when I read that title I thought you were going to have him die literally not figuratively my goddess you scared me there
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When I made the comment, they hadn't made that vote but, you are right, it's changed now.
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I like to keep my readers on their toes
Whoever designed that ship's survival systems and who approve that design deserve a trial. There were at least four breaches of safety code.
Firstly, rerouting and fire suppression in situation where crew is supposed be absent from bridge duty should be automatic with manual overrides. Second;y all emergency hatches must be operated even if power is absent or wiring is shop - mechanically. Engines and reactor should have been switched to safe mode if possible. Layout of ship a little weird, Nostromo from Alien was an example of optimal layout for this use.
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So any weddings for those 2 in the future
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It's a possibility...
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Sound fun. Hey as a bs chapter have him turn into an alicorn or have him back on earth but it was all a dream at the end
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Hehe, maybe one day
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Ok
Well....that killed the story for me.
Edit - If people really want to down vote this comment here is something to really downvote. Would have preferred him dying.
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I think it's a little...odd that the inability to consent when unconscious is being portrayed as a conundrum. Next of kin/ power of medical attorney are a thing and are used more often than you think. I acknowledge that this is a tough situation to find yourself in, but as someone who's been declared another's medical power of attorney, it's not that complicated. You have a frank discussion with the person you're going to represent as to what they want done in certain situations where you would be called upon to act in an official capacity. The hard part is having to live with the power of another's life in your hands and knowing you might have to end that life. IMO, if you're in a relationship with someone, you ought to know (explicitly) what they would want. It's just part of caring about them, because Midnight's right in taking this seriously - though they're both idiots for not talking about shit like this ahead of time - and her concerns are justified. I know my grandmother was LIVID when her wishes were not followed and she woke back up from her first heart attack.
Then, when it comes to the serious issue of identity it gets casually dismissed? This isn't a topic that should be so casually tossed aside. Ignoring the obvious physiological and mental changes that ought to result from having a brand new biology, but are being handwaved because of MAGIC, let's assume that somehow this spell works as stated for a moment... Dissociative disorders are a very real thing. There are some people who wouldn't have as much of a problem adapting to a change like this, and then there are others that rebel at the very idea of it. Looking into a mirror and seeing a stranger sounds like a terrifying concept. There are people who have to live with this sort of thing every day and then there are some who just can't.
I have more to say regarding your comment on love, but rather than wax poetic, please read my thoughts below directed to the author...
9361140 IMHO, I think a great opportunity was lost here. Had David been conscious and able to make the decision for himself, then it could've been a poignant act of love on his part, choosing to give up something dear to himself - a part of his own self image - just to be with the mare he loved. The way it is now? The character has no agency in the decision, it's something that fate has imposed upon him, something he has to deal with. There's no possibility of him having to wrestle with the cost of his decision. No scene with Midnight being woken up from a dead sleep by his ear-piercing scream, as he momentarily forgets that the red stallion in the mirror is him now, Midnight running in to protect him and the two sharing a lover's embrace as he assures her SHE'S worth the price he chose to pay.
This end isn't bad, it isn't good, it just is...and that's a shame.
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Like Ec1ipsis said, a lot of what you're describing is part of a potential sequel. David's thoughts right after the change are simply that he's happy to be alive. Especially considering he's almost died 3 times now. At least for those first few days, all he can really think about is just that he's happy to be alive and with the mare he cared about. I specifically didn't want David to make the choice because I felt that giving the decision to Midnight made it much more intense because she doesn't want to ruin his life and make him hate her for choosing her happiness over his. I've been doing a lot of thinking as to what I can do for a sequel, and having a shorter story centered around his struggle to adapt and her constant guilt over making the choice for him, despite his insistence that it was worth it, is something I'm considering. There's a lot of ideas floating around right now. I'm just not 100% sure how to proceed.
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Well... he could throw himself into work. You know... Let's not go to drinking, shall we? A lot of work. With details, if possible - that might be fun, to see how he influences Equestria. Maybe not by bringing about a technical revolution right off the bat, but... You know. Small steps. Building blocks. Maybe I don't frequent the right groups, but so far I've only found exactly one story that does this well (or at all... I Are Crew Chief by Amadeus, where the protagonist manages to build an actual, honest-to-goodness airplane). I mean, he might now need to prove himself to himself - to prove that he "still has it", he can be good at something despite all of the shit that's hit him. Maybe write a book... ;]
Also, I'm personally coming to terms with the idea of herds, so that's something worth exploring, potentially. He's a pony now, with all that entails. At the very least, Midnight might make a new friend or two, and he could as well... things could sort of come together there.
And the other, wholly separate can of worms for them to explore? Foals. ;]
Also, their relationships with the princesses are something I wouldn't mind seeing develop more. They've been through some harrowing experiences together - and for Twilight, it's her 'formative years' as a princess - she's going to remember these events well into her longevity... I thought the dynamics there were fun to watch (though obviously no more scratchies, awww...), and I wouldn't say 'no' to evolutions in those areas.
Just tossing ideas out there.
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I sort of get it. I still prefer the "happier" ending, but I think I get what you're getting at. But hey, we might get an interesting sequel out of this, possibly - don't lose hope yet. At the very least, you probably enjoyed most of the story... Maybe it's worth exploring it to the end.
I suppose I enjoyed the first few chapters (first 12 or so?) slightly more than the later ones, mainly because of the interactions and potential that was there. The potential is still there, I think. Or, I hope so.
Oh, and for the record? I was expecting brain cancer. His mother dying of cancer already puts him in a risk group... it felt like the logical follow-up, the so-called "bolt from the blue", having been there for months but just now showing severe symptoms. This ending was somewhat related, I suppose...
Phew
Pour.
I'm not a big fan of the pony change, I'm sure it'll grow on me because I really like the story but personally I would have gone with making him some kind of hybrid or something.
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I'm at least thankful you're inclined to give it a chance. A lot of people said that just killed the story for them lol. While it's one of the most controversial decisions I've made in my stories, I do still stand by it in that I think it was the best way to go with the story. I do hope you read the sequels. I think you'll like them potentially even more than this story.
This has to have been the most I've ever been glued to a story, this was a wonderful chapter I loved it. My heart jumped a bit when I read the title but woah that was a hell of a chapter!