This story is a sequel to A Fabulous Day
Rarity just heard someone confess their love for her. Not only that they also asked her to the Grand Galloping Galla, the most prestigious event of all, as her date. Now the mare would be fine if it was a simple request from a stranger to be their date in a friendly manner. Even if they were a mare so as to not be there on their own. But to actually be the real date of a mare, not a friend at all... The confession alone made the fabulous pony of fashion faint onto the magical couch that appeared so she wouldn't hit the floor.
Now her friends are there to talk with her and see what happened. Will they offer her the right kind of advice or will they simply make matters worse.
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I have to say, I’m not sure what to think of this story. It seems you have some grand, complex plot in your head, but the execution is lacking in some aspects. I’d forgive the grammar slip-ups here and there, but what really bothered me while reading were the descriptions—very ambiguous and “jumpy”, not really giving the reader an idea of what’s going on. Still, I’d like to see you continue this story, possibly with the help of a good editor
9451985
I do plan on continuing the story. I’m sorry for the jumpy ness of it all. It’s my first try at something that isn’t quite adventure or dark. I also thank you for the comment and am glad you enjoy the story. I’m trying to find an editor but those are rare unless you convince a friend to do it for you and well most of the time they either slack off or can’t do it. I’ve run into that on several occasions.
9452003
Alright, I see... well, what’s most important is that you are trying. So, I’m looking forward to what you can come up with!
And yes, finding an editor these days is rather problematic. I’m dabbling in the editing craft myself, however I’m afraid I don’t have the capacity to work properly on another story right now. Still, I think I could give you a few pointers on how to self-edit, if you’d like that.
9452051
Any advice is welcome. I’ve also taken to using Google Docs as the format to write on for spellcheck mainly.
9452058
Alright, should we talk it over in a PM then? Google Docs surely are great and not just for the spellcheck