When I’m with You

Never in her life would Flutteshy have thought that she, the little weak Pegasus, would fall in love with somepony ,especially if that somepony is Discord. But what if he likes her too....

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Rarity’s Question · 20th Mar 2018 · 505 words
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Tuesday tea · 20th Mar 2018 · 498 words
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The Sneaky Butterfly · 21st Mar 2018 · 404 words
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Nightmares.... · 27th Mar 2018 · 935 words
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“ I like you too...” · 14th Apr 2018 · 778 words
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Hopelessromantic

Hopelessromantic #1 · Mar 20th, 2018 · · · Tuesday tea ·

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Thank you!

TerraZeal

TerraZeal #2 · Mar 20th, 2018 · · · Tuesday tea ·

I love Fluttercord of almost any type, but the italicized speaking lines make it weird. I'm used to reading italics as thoughts. Maybe it's different in other places.

Hopelessromantic

Hopelessromantic #3 · Mar 20th, 2018 · · · Tuesday tea ·

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I’m sorry...I have seen it used before so I decided to do it too😅

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Hopelessromantic

Hopelessromantic #5 · Mar 21st, 2018 · · · Tuesday tea ·

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Ok thank you, I will try to fix it....

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BronyKat

BronyKat #7 · Mar 22nd, 2018 · · · The Sneaky Butterfly ·

love it!
btw nice cover art

BronyKat

BronyKat #8 · Mar 28th, 2018 · · · Nightmares.... ·

I feel the comfort through the words, and now I feel all warm and fluffy inside
you made me feel the story...
WITCH THE TRIAL STARTS AT DAWN!
(Seriously though this is awesome and so good keep it up :-)

Hopelessromantic

Hopelessromantic #9 · Mar 28th, 2018 · · · Nightmares.... ·

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omg Thank you so much

Oreka Chaos

Oreka Chaos #10 · Mar 30th, 2018 · · · Rarity’s Question ·

This was a really good start to the story, although you did make some grammar mistakes, it's not that bad. The plot was good and I want to read more, if you like, I pointed out some errors you committed, they are all bellow.

It was their mouthly spa day, rarity and Fluttershy usually went together to relax and talk about their month, but today every pony decided to join. Makeing Fluttershy a little more nervous than usually. It wasn’t like she talked much during the spa day with just rarity, but now she really didn’t want to say anything with so many eyes on her.

Making

”Maybe if we put you on a blind date!” Pinkie cried before canoballing in to the hot tube where Twilight and Applejack sat.

Cannonballing; tub

”Rarity, maybe it’s not the best idea to go messing with someponys romantic life” Rainbow dash stated in the corner next to Rarity, Rainbow didn’t really like the spa very much, so she was refusing to do any of the spa activity’s but she still wanted to be around every pony,so she came anyway.

somepony's; Rainbow Dash; activities; pony, so