Stardust Balance. Jack Wright.
Two versions of the same individual brought from their worlds into a cartoon reality. The former, transformed into a cartoon form to fit his new environment. The latter, reduced by age back to teenage form. And both are lucky enough to somehow earn the affections of the two greatest girls on that whole planet.
Unfortunately, one of them may not see things that way. For why, on Valentine's Day of all places, was Stardust seemingly giving Twilight the cold shoulder? And what was Jack's sudden behaviour of late acting like a male Pinkie Pie?
Sunset knows that's always something behind Jack's actions, but Twilight is beginning to worry about her own relationship with her boyfriend...
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Not bad was a pretty good read. I have few notes:
Overall a solid story.
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You might want to stay away from Diaries of a Madman, then.
Is Jack Wright really your real name?
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Haha I have read it and did eventually have to stop. I may not have liked the main character but he at least had good reasons for how he acted even if alot of the bad things that happened to him were a result of his own actions.
I agree with everydaygamer
Overall solid story.
I'm still not really much for multiple stardusts which has me wonder now if my lack of interest in multiple stardust might be why there aren't multiple Sunset Shimmers yet. I'm think your the reason why I'm starting to agree with Princess Celestia and Twilight about the others going through the portal.
Having two version of same character together in the story on a regular basis kinda does ruin it a bit.
I think that's my only issue for me is I'm feeling multi version same character fatigue.
Your writing is so awesome though that even MVSCF doesn't stop me from enjoy a good story.
You did great :)
I'm still confused of the fact there's two Stardust in the story. With a solid background there wasn't any sequel story to this right?
But overall great as the AJBS.