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Eyes


See you later. (Your window to the soul)

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A long time ago, Luna found a boy. The boy was lost and alone, covered in snot and tears. The boy, named Issac, followed the blue Alicorn and found a home in a castle full of ponies. A castle of two sisters. Lost but no longer alone. His story starts here, but begins much, much, later.

I really don't want to ruin the story for you too much. So, my apologies for the less than descriptive description. Guess you'll just have to read it to find out. Also, the first three chapters are the prologue. After that the style is more like the narratives we all know and love.

Also, that Alt-U tag is important. Twilight finding about Issac completely changes the "Mare in the Moon" opening, leading her to research into the Elements thus figuring out she'll return.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 23 )

By the first chapter (prolong) you got me hooked
Noice :3

The first chapter, he sounds more like he's 10 than 13. Also, in the last chapter, you have separate speakers speaking in the same paragraph.

Anyway, not a bad start. I'll see where it goes, for now.

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Thanks for pointing that out. Ran it by my editor and he agreed, he also missed it. Fix'd! :raritywink:

Also, he's sheltered or something lmao.

Can we all just take a moment and appreciate the amount of effort put into the cover image?

That being said, this story had my curiosity and now it stole my interest! I hope to see more! :pinkiesmile:

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Thanks. That really means a lot. When people say that they put a lot of blood, sweat, and tears into something they usually mean it metaphorically, but fake blood looked... well, fake as hell. So... That's my actual blood in that.

Nb4Edgy. I just wanted realism.

Random question, earlier its mentioned that Isaac doesn’t age, and he came and 13, is he 1013 years old in the body of a 13 year old? The male equivalent of a loli, whatever that term is

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Yes. I'm calling the police.

being 13 years old seems a little too old to some of the things the character does, i believe 10-11 would be a better age. Just to play safe

Year 484 of the 5th era. Autumn, Moonday the 22nd.

"Moonday"
Was that intentional or a typo? Either way, it works.

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Intentional. Sunday - Celestia. Moonday - Luna.

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The name Isaac is a hebrew name meaning "laughter"

Does this make him a laughing loli?

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Depends on if you find him funny, I suppose.

9490605
Or if he found something funny

Year 484 of the 5th era.

from Book 1.

Year 469 of the 5th era.

from Book 2.

If the entries in Book 2 were written down after the entries in Book 1 then shouldn’t the year count be higher instead of lower?
Like up to 30 years higher?

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Yeah, prolly just an oversight on my part. I just wanted to add a 69, lmao. :twilightsmile:

Will fix when I'm near a compooter. Thank you.

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No problem.
You can still have 69 in there, if you’re adamant about it, just replace 84 in Book 1 with 69, but you’ll have to replace 69 in Book 2 with 99 or any higher number that matches the timeline you had in mind.

I’m just gonna assume you were being silly when you wrote ‘compooter’ instead of ‘computer’.
Also, thanks for the watch, even though I hardly deserve it at all.

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Yus, I was being silly. I can spell computader... Compootler... Compooter... Things. Thanks for reading.

There an update coming around soon? It's getting close to a year since the last update.

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I kinda just stopped, I just wasn't feeling it anymore. Then about four months ago my pc went down and didn't have the time/money to have it looked at. But now, I'm currently laid off and my computer should be out of the shop tomorrow (hopefully). I should have an update soon, all I have is free time now.

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Awesome sauce! Looking forward to whatever comes next :)

Well this is unexpected.

Okay, well, I'm really gonna try to try to update on the regular. But with covid, my coworkers, and schedule. I don't know if I can at the rate you would like. But I'll try.

I'm trying, I'm sorry. I also just lost the person I was closest to, so, fuck.

El concepto en si es bueno, la consistencia de la historia no tanto, también cabe remarcar el hecho de que tenía más sentido en el inicio, de la mitad en adelante empezó a decaer un poco bastante. El concepto tiene potencial, pero el como fue utilizado deja que desear. 10 en intención, 6 en ejecución.

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