The art of teleportation has existed for many years, but you could only safely teleport so far without accidentally ending up kilometers underground. That's why Twilight decided to experiment a little, but in doing so, she ended up reappearing a MUCH longer distance than she intended. She ends up at a human colony on the rim of the galaxy. In a world where morality is almost nonexistent, she will have to grow accustomed to the barbarianism of mankind without law.
An MLP/Rimworld crossover
Contains: Mass Murder, Cannibalism, Slavery and Organ Harvesting among other things.
Chapters (4)
I haven't read this yet, but all I can think is:
Twilight sparkle suffers a major break!
Yes
This crossover idea is awesome! Now to see how execution is.
Not bad! I look forward to seeing the rest!
The interesting part here will be finding out how Twilight adapts to the Rimworld and how it changes her. So far it seem like it has potential, but the first chapter just seems a bit short.
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I guess the reason why the first chapter was kind of short was because I was thinking, "I'm going to write all this crazy shit the happens on the planet." and I was being impatient with getting to the actual colony. Not that that parts over, I should probably slow down a bit, huh? Thanks for the feedback.
its about time someone wrote this...just need someone to write a stellaris fic that based on an aar not sex
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These Three small chapters are good, it just seems as the story would flow better If they were redone slightly and all put into one chapter. It annoying for a reader to quickly read something and keep pressing buttons to go to the next page. As an avid reader myself of fiction and fanfiction, I find longer chapter grip the reader attention more. Your current chapter seems like you get the readers attention and next chapter pressing that button even just for a small fraction of time causes a reader to lose attention meaning you have to regain their attention in the next chapter. Which for me personally lots of small chapters make it feel like I'm reading a children's book. Also, I personally think 3K- 8K words is a really good chapter size. Well that my 5 cents worth done.
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Thanks for the feedback. At some point, I guess I'll just dump them all together. I have journal time stamps, so it shouldn't be too hard.
>"...make it feel like I'm reading a children's book."
>Said on a website dedicated to My Little Pony fanfiction.
twily aint doing so well
All I have to say, is that that disclaimer is really par the course with a crossover involving a game like Rimworld... Although DF has even more fucked up shit, but I digress. I can't wait to read this.
Making me want to start up a new world! Last time, I was done in when all my doctors were shot, and nobody knew how to feed them so they died in their beds, a few steps from fresh food
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You should have assigned everyone to doctoring and forced people to stay awake and stop people from bleeding. It won't be guaranteed to prevent infection, but the chance of more people surviving goes up by a lot as long as you priorities the people with the worst injuries or the ones you want to keep. Having low doctoring doesn't stop them from preventing bleeding, it just takes much longer.
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No; you don't understand– Everybody who was Physically capable of doctoring was lying unconscious in bed from being shot and then rescued. One of them finally did wake up, but he passed out due to malnutrition as he was walking to his comrade's bed to feed him... and so the two of them starved to death, along with my other two doctoring-able people who were also in bed. Then everybody else died of malaria or something.
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That sucks, man.
Looking forward to more.