• Published 14th Sep 2017
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Tiny Twilight - Crystalbreeze



A small pony, with who you may play.

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So adorable

After a successful day in school I sat on my chair and turned on the computer. I played some new games and saw videos on YouTube. I was in my dark room in front of the shiny machine for hours. Soon I started listening to my favorite musics. I was bored, but I didn't want to shut it down.

It was 19:30 pm, when I decided to finally go to sleep. Before I turned off the computer, I heard little hoofsteps on my desk from my right side. I turned on the lamp to see the tiny figure near my mouse. It was a little purple pony, with two wings and a horn on her head. She was just 1 inch tall. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. She was my little helpful friend, who couldn't talk. As I looked at her little face I was that she is happy to seeing me. I was happy to seeing her too.

I took my index finger closer to her to caress her body. I was so careful, because she was very tiny. Firstly I caressed her chin and her mane. She laughed on a squeaking voice. Secondly I caressed her back. After that she hugged my index finger. She was always adorable, because she acted like a baby dog, who was very curious and playful.

As I slowly took my hand away, she quickly jumped up and held on to my index finger. I knew this part. She wanted to play with me. Okay, I'm in. Let's do it!

Suddenly I took my index finger straight in the air and the little pony allowed it and flew up. She quickly realized the moment and opened her beautiful wings. She started falling down. I tried to catch her, but instead of that she flew under my T-shirt. Under my clothes she flew rapidly and often she stopped and tickled me. She was very good at tickling.

Some seconds later her tiny head appeared under my chin, I could catch her. She was in my right hand. As I opened it I saw her smiling to me. Her face was so adorable. She could hypnotize me too, because I couldn't take long the view of her big puppy dog eyes. This was my only weakness.

Few moments later she slowly flew up again, but this time she wrote down a circle in front of me again and again. Soon she flew faster. I started being giddy. She knew this and suddenly she flew down to my pants' pocket and hopped in it. As I felt, she searched something.

Oh no. She found that little chocolate in my pocket.

I put my hand in the pocket and hold her back and lifted her to the top of the desk. She hugged that chocolate tightly, while she was in the air. After I put her on my desk she untied the paper of the chocolate and started eating it. But she didn't ate the whole chocolate. No. I was surprised, when she gave me a piece of her little diiner. She smiled and held that piece to me with her two hooves.

I nodded and took that piece. I ate it.

I caressed Twilight's mane again, who burped. She smiled and looked at me with her "Sorry!" face. It wasn't possible to be angry at her. I laughed quietly.

After this I became tired. I wanted a long sleep. Twilight wanted it too, because she yawned and tried to not close her eyes. Some seconds later she pointed at my right hand with one of her hooves. I took my right hand close to her. She slowly walked to it and started laying on it. Some moments later I heard her quiet snore.

I turned off the computer and the lamp with one hand and walked to the bed. I slowly lifted the sleeping Twilight to her little bed with my two fingers. Her bed was a big fluffy pillow and her blanket was a tiny shawl. As she felt the surface of her fluffy bed, she quickly recognized it and covered herself up.

Before the sleeping she usually wanted from me to sing her a little song:

Sleep, little pony, sleep.
Everyone is sleeping now.
Puppy, kitty, bunny.
They are sleeping now.

It's time to go to bed.
The town is sleeping too.
The world is sleeping too.
Are you in your bed?

She loved this song. Everytime, when she heard it, she always had a long sleep. And the long sleep is better than the wakefulness.

Five minutes later both of us fell asleep.


In the morning Twilight woke up firstly. As she opened her eyes and looked around, she heard a quiet snore. It came from next to her. It was her giant hyoomin (human) friend, Kyle Sheldon, who was sleeping at that moment. Twilight smiled to his big body and let the "big boy" enjoy his usual sleeping.

Twilight was a very speacial friend, because Kyle didn't understand her language. When he heard her voice, instead of that he heard a squeaking. But of course Twilight understood his voice. In this world she could use magic, but she couldn't translate her squeaking voice into an understandable voice for hyoomins. But she could express her feelings and her emotions.

Some minutes later Twilight wanted to see the time. She flew up to the air and looked at the alarm clock. It was 8:34 am.

"Oh oh! He's late from the school." She said.

She didn't wanna do this but now it was the time when she must wake the "big boy" up. She teleported onto Kyle's face and started thinking of some plans. First plan: she tickled his chin. No result. Second plan: she sat on his forehead. The giant still slept. Final plan: she started jumping on Kyle's forehead, while she said:

"Wake up! Wake up! Wake up! Wake up! Wake up!"

Some seconds later Kyle opened his eyes and saw Twilight's head upside down.

"G-Good morning Twilight."

Twilight smiled and said:

"Good morning too."

Kyle slowly tried to get up from the bed. Twilight teleported herself to his chest. Kyle asked:

"What's up?"

Twilight pointed at the alarm clock with her hooves. As Kyle looked at it, he realized the moment.

"Oh, this is not good. I'm late. Thanks Twilight."

"You're welcome." Twilight squeaked to her big friend, who lifted her to the ground and started putting up his normal clothes.

Twilight used her magic to clean the bed up. After that she fluttered to the bathroom to check Kyle, who was already in his usual clothes.

They together went to the kitchen and had breakfast.

After the breakfast Kyle quickly packed his bag and said goodbye to Twilight. Their farewell was always the same. Twilight flew up in front of Kyle's face and gave a hug to his nose.

Some minutes later Twilight was alone in the big and empty house. She cleaned everything and played games on Kyle's Xbox 360. She had a very good time alone, but she wanted to be with her friend.

Comments ( 42 )

Poor twilight maby she can shrink kyle.

Well, good idea. I think this can make a lot of sense. But my first thought was that the magic isn't as great in Earth as in Equestria.

Nice chapter.
I'm curious where it goes.
For example: Where did she come from and why is she there?

I've got a feeling this story was partly inspired by this cute a video:
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While your writing has no obvious grammar/spelling errors it's quite a "primitive" style.
I recommend you to have a look at the Writing Guide, especially this chapter (show versus tell).

Edit: If you reply to a comment use the reply-button (on the top-right). This way I would get a notification. Additionally it's easier to figure out which answer belongs to which comment.

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I didn't expect that you find that video. And yupp, the idea partly came from it. Sorry for all of the errors in my stories. I try my best to don't make errosrs in the script, but it's a little bit difficult to me, because I'm not american or english. Thanks for writing this comment.

8426418
That video isn't exactly unpopular. For example, it was even in the Top 10 list of the month. (You implied you don't want it to be found, so I removed it.)
But like I said, I didn't found any "errors", so don't be sorry about it. (You shouldn't be sorry either way.)
I was more referring to the sentence-structure and how you explained everything.
For example, look how many sentences started with "I verb...".

Edit: Sure a simple, hopefully constructive comment deserves a Watch? I'm not complaining, but still...

8426357
Maby just for a few hours tops.

You are forgetting commas example:
A few hours later,

This story is soooooooo cute I’am going to read this again next time.

8457300
Thanks. I tried my best to make another cute tiny pony story after "Batie and you".

By the way:
The video I mentioned above got a sequel.
Will this stay an One-Shot or will there be more? (Chapters or seperate stories.)

8485545
Pls more chapters... I love this tiny pony in a humans house.

8519440
Okay. I'll make more.

8519443
But it will be a bit difficult, because this story is about Twilight. Would you like to read another LONG tiny pony story from me, which is similar like this?

8519450
Umm... Reading it now....maybe you can merge them all?

8519463
Yes I can. But then I need to change everything about the story. The title, description, content and some other things. You know it's hard from me to make a story. Creating all the acts in mind and write it down in english language. I need time to have a brainstorm and some days to write one, or two chapters.

8519473
Lots more complicated that I thought

8519501
Aha. But you gave me a very good idea, because I didn't write any long tiny pony stories before. As I finished my last story, then I'll make it.

8519553
And the giant ponies too! :yay: YA-A-A-A-A-AY! :yay:

8519558
Ahhhh giant ponies!!! lol I'm joking I would love to- (reads your other stories) ... ._.

8519562
Thx. I'm the fan of the ponies, who's got size difference. (not because the sex stories....I hate those)

8519568
Let's make fimfiction great again with the e and t rated stories!!!

Comment posted by DAMN HAMSTER deleted Dec 17th, 2017

8519610
Did we read the same "story"?

8622532
The bad grammar, awkward/weird interaction, complete disregard for basic writing conventions (Show Don't Tell being one example), and blatant wish fulfillment constitutes a good read?

8622741
It's all about quality content and plot development

8623045
What quality? This guy was just talking about the stuff he was given and a random, miniature OOC.
The plot (if there's anything that can be called as such) consists of "muh feelings" (if even that).

8623227
Hey, that is my FIRST story... I am still getting a feel on how I write, ok.
And put your criticism on my story in my story's COMMENT section, not on someone else's story

8623233
I was talking about this "story", Copernicus. I didn't even know you had a story, but if what I said also pertains to your writing, well...yeugh.

8622741
Okay.....this was enough. I can't help that the grammar in my stories is bad, and I can't help that I didn't born in america, or england. And thanks to this I can't write stories with perfect grammar. Fortunately so many people ignores the mistakes and focuses on what the fanfic is about. My stories got so much likes and just a few dislikes. So after all of this leave these stories alone and criticize those stories, what are really bad! Not mine, because it took so much time to write these and I also needed to use the translator many times. In the end I could say when I posted them and got the positive comments that it worth it.

8624441
That's a cop out and you know it. My mother's side legally came over from a non-English country (as have so many others) and they never once used any excuses for not knowing the language, choosing to learn and master said language instead.

You're just not invested in writing.

8624492
Think what you think, but enough of these criticisms and leave my stories!

8624501
If I've said anything that isn't true, by all means please correct me.
That's not sarcasm btw.

8624508
Okay, well if my grammar is bad then in the future it will be better. You know I learn english from nursery and now I'm really good at it. I said this so much times, but unfortunately I can't say more.

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