After helping the Queen Bee of a hive of giant Everfree Honeybees, Fluttershy indulges herself in some honey. (Specifically an inflation story)
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Gotta love the setup for that last scene. Inflation caused by miscommunication or accidents is simply the best.
Fluttershy’s portrayal in this whole story is amusing. I get the impression that on some level she wants to become huge, but her inhibitions stop her from admitting this or acting on it. Except all these opportunities and accidents are enough to overcome her inhibitions, or at least make her not fight back as hard as she thinks she should.
Also love that ambiguous ending. How long does it take before Fluttershy’s friends come to find her? How big does she get before they arrive? I know what answer I prefer...
That’s a wonderful Fluttershy moment right there. That when the topic of snakes comes up, she thinks of them as friends first and foremost.
Some great similes right there. Imagery like this is what keeps a story from being a bland recitation of events.
I didn’t mind the absence here. I’m not a fan of tubby speak in general; I just tolerate it when other authors include it.
I'd say for a first effort it turned out pretty well all things considered. As for being unhappy with the final product, I think all creative types are like that to an extent.
Great work! It turned out really well, methinks, especially for your first inflation story. The pacing is, in my opinion, really sweet and entirely fitting for the theme of the plot (heh). This is absolutely a good start if you ever want to do another one of these! :D
I really loved this story, you have some great descriptions
This fic is even more amusing now, in light of “A Health of Information”...