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Nerdz


Just your average starving artist, beginning writer, YouTuber, and amateur voice actress

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This story is a sequel to My Little Descendants


A series of one-shots and drabbles taking place in the MLD universe. Warning, may get dark. Each such chapter's description will have trigger warnings.


Nightmares: A lifetime of pain doesn't go away quickly. Scars take time to heal. TRIGGER WARNING: mentions of abuse.

A Filly's Crush: When Larva begins acting strange, humming to herself and doodling hearts, Lady is all too excited for her sister to experience her first crush. However, it’s not as simple as she thinks.

Cupcake DIsaster: The first Wicked World short. Nyx begins painting, Lady finds she's bad at baking.

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 6 )

Interesting showing how nightmare normally deals with these nicely done

So, I was lured here by your story promotion. So far, I don’t regret it :pinkiesmile: This has been an interesting Slice of Life read, with a little bit of mystery sprinkled it. The characters were quite enjoyable and despite reading about them for the first time, I still got grasp of who is who quickly. By the way, is Nyx somehow related to Pen Stroke’s pony of the same name?

The only recurring issue I noticed was some badly placed punctuation and capitalization in direct speech. When there is a speaking action present in the dialogue tag (said, replied, asked, commented etc.), the tag starts with lowercase letter. You write that correctly :ajsmug: However, direct speech in such case cannot end with a period. A comma has to be in its place. (Question and exclamation marks, as well as ellipses, are alright there as well.) On the other hand, when the tag contains a non-speaking action (nodded, blushed, sighed etc.), the tag has to start with an uppercase letter and the direct speech cannot end with a comma. Period or other punctuation mark has to be there. Phew... a little bit of a lecture, sorry for that :twilightsheepish:

Anyway, I’m curious what the other little stories will hold!

Short and sweet chapter, nice! Also, the idea of Sweet Apple Acres functioning as orphanage is a great idea, especially given how family-based the Apples are :ajsmug:

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Thanks for the feedback! And yes, Nyx is the same character! I wrote to Pen Stroke to ask permission to use her in my stories.

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You are welcome :twilightsmile: And nice!

This has been an interesting and rather funny chapter. Good job!

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