“I need to find my own special somepony,” Blueblood thought, “Somepony who also enjoys inflicting rape and torture.”
Enter Trixie.
Noticed one little gramatical mistake along the way “What’s the point in fighting?” Scootaloo thought, miserably, “Sister Spectrum stood against the price and she’s dead. Nothing I do now will bring her back to life.”
Iron dick. This is a comedy right? It just seems like its trying too hard to be gory to be an actual gorefic, it's just a blatant satire. That was the corniest joke Ive ever seen.
I thought it had jumped the shark a little when you made the princesses cannibals. It wasn't even part of an occult ritual. Otherwise great chapter. It stuck with the formula more than the previous chapters, and I sincerely felt terrified of reading along. I laughed out loud when I pieced together what was going on with Pipsqueak. I was even more impressed when Featherweight, who never had any lines, had his tongue cut out. Unfortunately, the latter just seems like a happy coincidence when one takes into account that Truffle Shuffle has never had any lines of dialogue even referencing him, yet his body remains whole (I would never say any of them have gone untouched at this point). Will this be changed by the start of the next chapter? Will his tongue be gone as well? Or will he be the first to die?
Which actually leads to some confusion I have. At first, it seemed like the children were rounded up to be indoctrinated as actual libertines, instead of run-of-the-mill sex slaves. This chapter seemed to imply that this is a cycle the princesses and nobles have gone through before. Furthermore, if future libertines are to ascend to nobles, whose roles include public roles, why impair them so?
So when Fluttershy becomes rape queen, are you going to have a rendition of any of the songs from the Princess Coronation? Or perhaps a version of "So Many Wonders" when she first experiences a tongue in her Flutterbox/shoving her hoof up somepony's ass?
Oh no flutters my poor baby what's going to happen she can't not be flutters I mean there's a reason for her being my favorite character in the series. if you do anything to change her Ill cry so much.
While I can't recall the libertines in the film consuming the parts they removed, it seemed only natural for the princesses to be cannibalistic.
"I was even more impressed when Featherweight, who never had any lines, had his tongue cut out."
“We mustn’t fight amongst each other,” Featherweight said, pleadingly, “If we care not for each other, we’re no better than the selfish libertines.”
Due to the sheer number of characters in this chapter, I wasn't able to give each of them the attention I would've liked. On the few occasions when I have the children speak, though, I try to make sure their dialogue is meaningful.
"At first, it seemed like the children were rounded up to be indoctrinated as actual libertines, instead of run-of-the-mill sex slaves."
They may be taught how to frig, but there's more to being a libertine than masturbatory skills. You don't truly appreciate what you have until it's gone. The only children to become libertines will be those who learn to overcome their despair and embrace the joys of physical pleasure.
"So when Fluttershy becomes rape queen, are you going to have a rendition of any of the songs from the Princess Coronation?"
I liked your naughty Little Mermaid song. We could always go with the Drawn Together angle...
2201989 When I said Truffle and Feather never had any lines, I meant in the show. At first I thought the mutilations were suppose o correspond with the kids' roles in the show, which is why it would make sense for Truffle to have his tongue cut out next, since he's never spoken, or even spoken of. Perhaps his ears then? And how about Scootaloo's wings?
So will BB go through a few mares before making his final choice? I'd like to see the libertine conversion process done on adults, and how it wouldn't mostly take to already developed individuals. You could do all the minor antagonists, like Trixie, Gilda, Lightning Dust, Upper Crust (yes she's married, but why would this fic be afraid of adultery?). They could each have an edgy personality to fit this more twisted world. Gilda could carve up ponies alive before eating them, while LD is an insalliable bisexual who throught a combination of seduction/degradation/sexual assualt keeps other athletes from surpassing her. Yet all but one decry the libertines when they breach a certain taboo ("I won't eat other griffins!"). And of course, we know how picky and easily offended BB is...
I've read dozens of gore fics, rape fics, and generally terrible fics. I survived the worst of 4chan's gore, disease, and pains threads. I thought nothing on the internet could ever phase me. But then I found this. And you have won. Reading this fic is actually painful. It actually hurts my heart to do so. After 17 years of internet usage and seeing vistas of horror that not even Lovecraft could have imagined and not being phased in the least, you have won. And I salute you sir.
I will be honest, I have probably swapped between upvoting and downvoting this story at least 4 times before finally settling on an upvote. The material is disturbing, yet it is too well written to downvote. The main factor is that it is not just mindless torture and rape, there's an actual story here that is quite engaging. This fic is the exact sort of thing that defines what art is, pushing you to your absolute boundaries, forcing you to your absolute limits and making you think hard about the material. This work is both horrifying and brilliant and a wonderful tribute to the Marquis.
God damn dude, when you do scat, you do HARD CORE SCAT, and when you do vore, you do so HARD VORE. I don't know if I should be turned on, disgusted, or impressed.... Maybe angry because I'm not nearly as creative
2225330 I have to agree. Although not one single piece of this work turned me on in any way, I have to laud you for your excellent expose on the libertine movement, and apologize for my prior critique of this as mindless smut. I only read the first chapter, and that was a grave mistake. Truly one of the most beautifully written pieces of disgusting shit I have ever read. In short, BRAVO
“I need to find my own special somepony,” Blueblood thought, “Somepony who also enjoys inflicting rape and torture.”
As soon as this line hit, I thought Fluttershy.
Without saying a word, Celestia popped Featherweight’s semen-stained tongue into her mouth and began to eat it.
The princesses had no intention of killing either of the children at this time; they just wanted a little snack.
Just when I thought this story couldn't get any worse... raping a child whilst eating parts of his body covered in his own semen all at the same time. Jesus. Fucking. Christ. As soon as that first line hit all I could think of was: medias.omgif.net/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/kill-it-with-fire.gif I am so glad you only do simple descriptions.
Sweet mother of mercy, I hope you have something utterly horrific beyond description planned for Bluebloodevery last fucking one of them by the end of this.
And so much alliteration!
And I hope Fallen Prime and his buddies don't pussy out of their riff of this.
Now I need to go and read something else so my head-canon isn't permanently stained.
And then Prince Blueblood was Master Shake.
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Sorry Scootaloo, you're fucked.
A brilliantly disgusting chapter, as always.
Enter Trixie.
Should be 'Prince'
So reading this pretty much goes like this for me:
'Ew...ew...ok...' 'FAPFAPFAPFAPFAPFAPFA-' 'HURRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRK'
;.;
GG author, I actually cringed, a lot.
Absolutely well worth the wait for more libertine action.
Can't wait for more.
I can't stop reading this and I don't know why. What have you done to me mister!?
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Thanks for catching the typo!
EDIT: Fixed!
The next chapter is called "The Bride" and will prominently feature the only member of the mane six who has yet to make an appearance.
What will Fluttershy do when the prince offers her a chance at eternal life?
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And Scootaloo was Meatwad.
Oh God, that was horrible. I should be ashamed of myself. I am, but not nearly to the degree that I should be.
Another chapter, wonderful in it's horridness.
I can only think that there will be a great "contest" in store for some mares in the future.
This is gonna be good!
Oh shit.... Flutters...
Update? Bout time... wierdest boner... and I don't like it!
Oh God its Flutters .... oh nononononononono... not good
Pip Squeak? I wanted so badly for one of them to skull fuck him. I want to come so badly right now, but I'm reading this in a public area.
“I need to find my own special somepony,” Blueblood thought, “Somepony who also enjoys inflicting rape and torture.”
I laughed so hard I thought I was gonna throw up.
If I hadn't accidentally read the last chapter first, I would've avoided this in all possible ways.
But know I must know what led up to that point.
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It's important for a couple to have common interests. Even if they're evil.
OMG YAAAAAAAY I LOVE IT AND I CAN'T WAIT FOR WHAT'S NEXT!!!
Jesus H. fucking tap-dancing Christ on a bike.
In all honesty, do you ever feel weird or dirty after writing this stuff?
Iron dick. This is a comedy right? It just seems like its trying too hard to be gory to be an actual gorefic, it's just a blatant satire. That was the corniest joke Ive ever seen.
Yes. This is definitely satire...
I thought it had jumped the shark a little when you made the princesses cannibals. It wasn't even part of an occult ritual. Otherwise great chapter. It stuck with the formula more than the previous chapters, and I sincerely felt terrified of reading along. I laughed out loud when I pieced together what was going on with Pipsqueak. I was even more impressed when Featherweight, who never had any lines, had his tongue cut out. Unfortunately, the latter just seems like a happy coincidence when one takes into account that Truffle Shuffle has never had any lines of dialogue even referencing him, yet his body remains whole (I would never say any of them have gone untouched at this point). Will this be changed by the start of the next chapter? Will his tongue be gone as well? Or will he be the first to die?
Which actually leads to some confusion I have. At first, it seemed like the children were rounded up to be indoctrinated as actual libertines, instead of run-of-the-mill sex slaves. This chapter seemed to imply that this is a cycle the princesses and nobles have gone through before. Furthermore, if future libertines are to ascend to nobles, whose roles include public roles, why impair them so?
So when Fluttershy becomes rape queen, are you going to have a rendition of any of the songs from the Princess Coronation? Or perhaps a version of "So Many Wonders" when she first experiences a tongue in her Flutterbox/shoving her hoof up somepony's ass?
I had to read a second time just so I could bring myself to orgasm(s)! Hot!
Oh no flutters my poor baby what's going to happen she can't not be flutters I mean there's a reason for her being my favorite character in the series. if you do anything to change her Ill cry so much.
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Actually, this chapter tried to cram in several iconic scenes from the source material, including the leashes...
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...the removal of a person's tongue...
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...and eye gouging. [Warning! NSFW]
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While I can't recall the libertines in the film consuming the parts they removed, it seemed only natural for the princesses to be cannibalistic.
Due to the sheer number of characters in this chapter, I wasn't able to give each of them the attention I would've liked. On the few occasions when I have the children speak, though, I try to make sure their dialogue is meaningful.
They may be taught how to frig, but there's more to being a libertine than masturbatory skills. You don't truly appreciate what you have until it's gone. The only children to become libertines will be those who learn to overcome their despair and embrace the joys of physical pleasure.
I liked your naughty Little Mermaid song. We could always go with the Drawn Together angle...
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When I said Truffle and Feather never had any lines, I meant in the show. At first I thought the mutilations were suppose o correspond with the kids' roles in the show, which is why it would make sense for Truffle to have his tongue cut out next, since he's never spoken, or even spoken of. Perhaps his ears then? And how about Scootaloo's wings?
2202937 Truffle said one line in the newspaper episode, including this:
I've read worse, I honestly don't see why people are such wimps.
oh god... please don't make fluttershy bluebloods mate, PUH-LEASE
This made me laugh. Also turned my stomach - I've had 'anal accidents' before and man, to lick ANY of that up? Serious situation.
Nice job! This was very hot! I especially like the part where silver spoon was being raped in the ass!
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It's tricky when you're handling so many different pairings within the same chapter. I hope the narrative had a decent flow.
Thanks for the feedback!
Wait....call me an idiot, but when did twilight turn up?
Discustingly brilliant chapter
2209052
Twilight stars in chapter two: The Scholar. Shining Armor even makes an appearance.
Thanks for the feedback!
2209120 "Remember what the author said would be in the next chapter."
Oh no...
So will BB go through a few mares before making his final choice? I'd like to see the libertine conversion process done on adults, and how it wouldn't mostly take to already developed individuals. You could do all the minor antagonists, like Trixie, Gilda, Lightning Dust, Upper Crust (yes she's married, but why would this fic be afraid of adultery?). They could each have an edgy personality to fit this more twisted world. Gilda could carve up ponies alive before eating them, while LD is an insalliable bisexual who throught a combination of seduction/degradation/sexual assualt keeps other athletes from surpassing her. Yet all but one decry the libertines when they breach a certain taboo ("I won't eat other griffins!"). And of course, we know how picky and easily offended BB is...
I've read dozens of gore fics, rape fics, and generally terrible fics. I survived the worst of 4chan's gore, disease, and pains threads. I thought nothing on the internet could ever phase me. But then I found this. And you have won. Reading this fic is actually painful. It actually hurts my heart to do so. After 17 years of internet usage and seeing vistas of horror that not even Lovecraft could have imagined and not being phased in the least, you have won. And I salute you sir.
I will be honest, I have probably swapped between upvoting and downvoting this story at least 4 times before finally settling on an upvote. The material is disturbing, yet it is too well written to downvote. The main factor is that it is not just mindless torture and rape, there's an actual story here that is quite engaging. This fic is the exact sort of thing that defines what art is, pushing you to your absolute boundaries, forcing you to your absolute limits and making you think hard about the material. This work is both horrifying and brilliant and a wonderful tribute to the Marquis.
I feel nothing inside anymore.
But you should know that by now. FLuttershy is going to be queen of sleeze, isnt she?
WHY!?!?
This is by far the most repulsive and gut wrenching piece of work I have ever masturbated and successfully orgasmed to.
Congratulations. I think you just destroyed the small part of my soul that wasn't deprived and perverted.
2220011 Heh, I lost that when I was 15.
God damn dude, when you do scat, you do HARD CORE SCAT, and when you do vore, you do so HARD VORE. I don't know if I should be turned on, disgusted, or impressed.... Maybe angry because I'm not nearly as creative
Wow... I was having a great day earlier.
Dafuq this fic... you can beat the four horsemen of apocalypse with this single piece of literature.
2220011 Brought to you by My Little Pony.
2242293 well, the Internet dictates that the more innocent and pure something it, the more satisfying it is to corrupt it.
Always forgetting to ask you: Is there any chance on Trixie debut?
I'm too afraid to click anywhere near a chapter link.
2225330 I have to agree. Although not one single piece of this work turned me on in any way, I have to laud you for your excellent expose on the libertine movement, and apologize for my prior critique of this as mindless smut. I only read the first chapter, and that was a grave mistake. Truly one of the most beautifully written pieces of disgusting shit I have ever read. In short, BRAVO
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Thank you. I hope that the final chapter is able to meet your expectations.
I just got why pips eye was cut out. he wore an eyepatch when he was introduced.
MFW this story:
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First up:
Mistake?
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As soon as this line hit, I thought Fluttershy.
Just when I thought this story couldn't get any worse... raping a child whilst eating parts of his body covered in his own semen all at the same time.
Jesus. Fucking. Christ.
As soon as that first line hit all I could think of was:
medias.omgif.net/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/kill-it-with-fire.gif
I am so glad you only do simple descriptions.
Sweet mother of mercy, I hope you have something utterly horrific beyond description planned for
Bluebloodevery last fucking one of them by the end of this.And so much alliteration!
And I hope Fallen Prime and his buddies don't pussy out of their riff of this.
Now I need to go and read something else so my head-canon isn't permanently stained.
Listening to 'My Salsa' by Eminem and reading this caused me to weep and laugh uncontrollably.