Yeah, what Neiro said. Not really sure how Blueblood managed to brainwash the entire kingdom somehow.
Another decent chapter. Reading this and semi-enjoying it makes my brain go "WTF", but my boner go "me gusta". Always did have a little thing for rape/torture. Onward to the next pony!
896515 Thanks for the feedback! Rarity seemed like a natural first choice when dealing with Blueblood. Once it was over, though, I wondered what he would do when confronted with other members of the mane six.
As for the setting, I was going for a Canterlot that was set in a atmosphere similar to France right before the French Revolution. The commoners had yet to unite against their ruthless oppressors.
Having burned a heretic, Blueblood's next challenge will be to rid the kingdom of a gypsy witch. "How do you know she is a witch?" "She Looks like one!"
What the chainsaw-juggling Christ did I just fucking read? No. Just... Dang it, Bobbeh.
Still not as bad as the school area in DS2. And fuck Blueblood with a power drill, then cut off his hooves, slice open his stomach and take a shit in it before sewing it back up and forcing him the chew on rocks.
906712 Since you seem to be the target audience for these types of stories, I must ask you a question. Are there any subjects that turn you off? This second chapter had more gore in it, but generally speaking, extended descriptions of wanton violence doesn't do it for me. This story will not reach Cupcake-levels of gore, for example. Blueblood isn't going to remove anypony's internal organs while they're still alive, or anything. But what specifically in the first two chapters either enticed or repulsed you? I've worked out the basic ideas for future chapters with the rest of the mane six, but are there any ideas you would like to see implemented? I'm very interested in your feedback.
906767 Well, for me the only thing I don't like is how there isn't enough mental/emotional abuse, other than that overall its pretty good, The only things I didn't like were how in the first chapter The father wasn't involved in the main event, He couldv'e been, say, forced to watch, or partake in it, Alsointhe second one Ithink you couldv'e added Spike and Twilight's parents,but otherwise I thik it's perfect the way is. BTW I really like the whole 17th century France theme.
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914854 While this series may be one of the most twisted and depraved things on this site, there are still lines you don't cross. I will not love and tolerate any sexism in this comments section! Apologize at once, my dear brony!
BTW: Blueblood will be punished in the end. The real trick is, can I make him suffer enough, without resorting to drastic levels of gore?
915082 1) I refuse to appologize for my beliefs. Mares, as well as Pegusi and Dirt ponies are vastkly inferior to the pure unicorn race. 2) If you need ways of tourtureing stallions without gore try this
1) Hook testies up to car batteries 2) use those anal pears in the twilight chapter. 3)force him to listen to justin beiber for 36 strait hours.
Good evening Mister Bronystories what have you made for us here?
Fascinating. It appears you're making a definite effort to disturb and disgust and as far as I can see you're succeeding. This fact earns you a thumbs up.
How could I do this? Well the fact that I'd rather run a wad of sand-paper through my special place than attempt to masturbate to this shit aside I think its pretty well written.... For something of this nature that is. I can actually see someone such as Blueblood doing these things in that position of power. Mainly 'cause it most likely happened in the past. Mainly however its because I got a reaction from it. In other words it made me feel. Something ponies are annoyingly good at.
Frankly this disgusts me. I spent the entire time fantasizing Bluebloods horrid demise. My favorite so far is slow removal of the phallus via a timed clamp and cheesewire shrinking in diameter around the member by something like 4 millimetres a minute. No anesthetjc of course. Then of course some form of buggery seeing as he appears to dislike colt-cuddlers, something along the lines of that there anal pear thingamajig. Then the removal of the testes by first removing the scrotum with carefully applied caustic liquids. Drop. By. Drop. Of course he'd pass out so wait for him to wake up every time he does and make sure he doesn't die. Once the scrotum is completely removed mix salt and vinegar then lather the exposed testes in the solution. Once this is done spend a few hours sanding down the organs and applying more vinegar and salt on the wounds. If at any point his cursing and screams become tiresome pluck out all his teeth with burning iron tongs, melt his tongue with caustic powder and stitch his mouth shut with steel wool and a red hot needle (wear gloves). Feel free to rub a lemon half on the stitching. Once the testes and associated organs are nothing but pink paste move on to his limbs. Get a boning knife and get filleting with those stompers but be sure to hook him up to plenty of ivs and transfusion thingies to keep him alive. And have lots of adrenaline handy. Once all the meat's off of his royall legs grab a hammer and chisel and carve the name of all of his victims into the bone. If you run out of room don't worry there'll be more. Pull the bones from the sockets and set them aside. Cauterise the stumps. At any point go ahead a rip his mane and tail out. Be careful with the tail, you don't want to damage the spine. Now its time to go full on CUPCAKES. If you have any sense you've already removed his horn. If not, do it now. Just don't damage the brain. At your own liesure open the ribcage and remove all nonessential organs. I.E. Everything other than the heart and lungs. Feel free to get punny. Once this is done pump him full of everything it takes to keep him alive. If there are any victims whose names you couldn't fit on his legs skin his skull and chisel them there. If you run out of room.... Then well fuck. Finally after a long day sprinkle his chest cavity with salt then feed him to his own dogs. Remember to give the dogs everything that you removed. Sleep soundly knowing you done good.
Oh as a side note I read the other comments and.... Whats that movie?
Also despite being disgusted I did enjoy reading this if only because its been such a long time since I've had that emotional response towards a piece of literature.... ... .... ...... Also maybe because I was partially aroused by some bits and I like conflicting emotions... Inner turmoil is a wonderful form of release.
The movie is a modernized version of the 1785 novel, written by Donatien Alphonse François, Marquis de Sade. If you want to talk about influential authors, the words 'sadism' and 'sadist' are references to de Sade.
After reading your proposed torture for Blueblood, remind me to never get on your bad side.
920787 How DARE YOU PLAN to tourture a pure blooded unicorn such as blue blood! You infeior earth ponies have no right exsisting in equestria and even less a right to plan such horrendouse acts to your betters! Now, please GTFO and leave thew master race in peace!
921397 Neat! I'll have a squizz at that, gotta be hell of a person to have that named after you..... Still.... I take it since its 120 days in Sodom its based off of what went on in the long dead city of the Sodomites? ... Also... Um... I have no idea how I came up with that... I didn't think I had it in me... I guess... I guess Blueblood just brings out the worst in ponies... Excuse me while I sit in the corner...
922028 Oh boy here we go. Hearths Warming 101: Earth Ponies are essential for the provision of food. Pegasi provide weather control that make the Earth Ponies' lives easier. Unicorns control the sun and- Oh wait... No they don't! The Alicorns control the sun and the moon!
Earth Ponies= Essential to survival. Pegasi= Beneficial to survival. Unicorns= Obsolete via Alicorn.
You may place your shapely and obsolete lips upon my essential dirt pony posterier and kiss it repeatedly.
I'm just saying that someone better be getting relised from there stone prison,and some pony better be getting stuck in a little devise named "The Changeling's Womb". A form of torcher in which said price over a coarse of 3 weeks has his sol magically ripped apart. (like Hellraiser).
922984 Main carachter of MLP A UNICORN! Growing food isn't unique to dirt ponies, anyone can do it and magic can do it more efficently Weather can be controlled with magic Unicorns origonally controlled the sun and moon, and then your Whore queen celestia barges in, takes it over and start spread her pompus bullshit about peace, equallity, and love. now go roll in some mud like the living filth you are dirt pony and leave the master race alone.
924846 Actually unicorn magic can't grow plants. Unicorns can control the weather but only pegasi can manufacture it. Main character is a unicorn mare (I recall you lumping in all mares with us hornless pony folk) whose friends are non-unicorns bar one (two if Shining counts among her other friends). All unicorn males who have had any lengthy duration on screen have shown themselves to be air-headed, pompous, inferior and decidedly annoying. However Flim & Flam get points for being sexy. And Fancypants gets a bit of a bumper cause I only half watched Sweet & Elite.
Once again I am impressed and with good reason... I again congratulate you on you very very very very very veeeerrry descriptive writing skills and also pinkamena siding with blueblood would be interesting until of course she betrays him and does what questionable object suggested... Good job...
925318 Yes, magic can't grow plants but Unicorns can do them the old fashion way. And seeing as to how ALL docters and scientists are UNICORNS we would probably find a way somehow (Like with the technology you and the rest of your living trash race are holding back.) As for the weather, again,either magic or science. And if all else fails, I suppose the master race could enslave you all, rape your mares and force you to do all the meanial labor we are too good for. Also Unicorn mares are considered citezens. Just the ones of the lesser races are used as sex slaves, maids and cooks. As for pegusi... scince they are better than dirt ponies they wouldn't be eradecated, just treated as second class citezens. If you want to continue this argument go to the Unicorn Supremecy Movement's group on fimfiction, my comrades would LOVE to put you swine in your place.
924885 Technecly, it's not related, we veiw Alicorns as muddled disgrace (They have earth pony, pegusi, and unicorn blood) and that makes them a disgrace to our pure, unicorn race.
930719 I have never seen any unicorn other than maybe Twilight ever do hard menial work. I highly doubt that any unicorn could ever get down and dirty and be as any good as an earth pony at farm work.
As for technology.... Flim and Flam were bein' kinda pushy on the matter. Coulda shown a bit of tact with the Cider machine... Like not threatening someone's business.
All doctors? Redheart ring any bells? I'm pretty sure she's a earth pony.
As intelligent as conquering the "lesser" races and getting them to do all the work or just killing them may be I'd like to point out several obstacles in that plan. Most prominent obstacle: You're a minority group in the smallest tribe and the only reason the other tribes didn't wipe you out back in the days of the windigoes was 'cause you made the sun and moon go 'round. Closely following that is the fact you have a pair of living goddesses sitting on the throne. Last I checked Alicorns don't like being overthrown. Then there's the factor of some non-ponies inferring that if you lot hate other ponies then it'd only be a matter of time before you began to pick on them and would give us "lesser" ponies a hand. That or see the inner turmoil as an opportunity to attack. Then the least obvious but possibly the most dangerous. Remember Discord? Big Draconaquus with mismatched limbs? Feeds off chaos and disharmony? Yeah I think a pony v pony war would be an all you can eat buffet for him. Especially if any of the Elements of Harmony were killed... Or damaged. We all know they're a pretty fragile bunch in the head. And then there's the Windigoes. Dunno if they were killed or banished but if they were just sent off with a smack on the wrist they'd be back in a heartbeat if a holocaust went up.
Now there's a whole group of you? Goodie, I'm enjoying this! I'll go give the USM a little visit ay?
Also I hardly see Twilight fitting into your picture of the supreme unicorns seeing as she's kind of a race traitor and is Celestia's #1 student.
934180 Yes, Flim and Flam were being pushy, TO AN EARTH PONY! The Apple family deserves to have their farm taken away and givin to the pure, master race. As for Hearth's warming eve? That is the version that Celestia told and after a few milennia the truth mixed with legend(Much like christianity) and now everyone believes it for they are too stupid to think for themselves. As for the nusre, SHE IS A NURES! NOT A REAL DOCTER. A nurse is just a fancy way of saying the docter's bitch. It's good to see the lesser masses finally finding their place like her. BEING THE MASTER RACES BITCH! and finally Twiligt is a pure blooded unicorn and even if she refuses at first, ever hear of stockholm syndrom? if we capture her and rape/tourture her fpr a few years she would eventually see the light.
MOAR! Could you do next? Or maybe ? Just, please continue! Us creeps enjoy this! Ooh...maybe you could save Fluttershy for last and she survives, maybe even marries him! (As one of his many wives, of course.) I mean, c'mon. Little withdrawn Fluttershy + bedroom scene =
914854 While I saw you won't apologise for that remark, please, keep it to yourself. I know that many people think that, and people think the way about men, I hate it when people voice stuff like that, and I know others do too.
Can't say I get off to this kind of thing (well...usually, lol), but wow...you are one heck of a writer! I'll admit to a morbid fascination with ero-guro; however, I tend to be very critical when it comes to mixing this with MLP, if only because it spawns godawful Cupcakes spin-offs and other shit with no literary merit.
But THIS...I loved every last bit of it. Words cannot describe my joy, hats off.
The thing you did in the second chapter with Galileo!Twi was awesome, and Blueblood's narration is consistently clever, debonair and oh-so deliciously sadistic. I'd like to see how Celestia and Luna play into this sick crazy world--that is, if they're even aware of Blueblood's little...foibles. (Going with the Salò theme, the idea of Equestria's rulers attending a dinner party to eat feces is just...horrible and hilarious at the same time.)
Anyway, I'm definitely adding you to my watch list, brony. I eagerly await the next installment.
Thank you, for allowing me to hate blueblood even more. Also, this sounds like a terrible thing to say, but I'm glad shining armor committed suicide. It shows how he, despite what he showed outwardly, still felt like shit for doing that. It shows he had somewhat of a heart.
This fic is excellent, but I noticed this chapter had less sex and more violence and stuff. If I may say so I like the clopfic side more than the violence/torture side. Once again, I dont know whether to hate or love this fic, but since I dont often dislike fics that I read, I'll love it XD
985104 This second chapter definitely had more violence, it's true. The next chapter I'm working on will be grounded more in clop. Gorn or ultraviolence never really did anything for me.
985191 2 questions. Who's the next chapter about (or is that a secret :P) and is there any gore or is it all clop? I mean I'm gonna read it either way haha.
985278 Let's just say Blueblood has to deal with a gypsy accused of being a witch. In spite of what you might think, there won't be a lot of elaborate tortures. Blueblood will instead use his reliable interrogation tool to forcibly extract a confession.
Let me know what you think of this. While I love how the first two chapters are written, first person is so limiting. I'm think of explaining it as the first two chapters happened in the past, and Blueblood is reading the accounts from his journal. The rest of the story from chapter three will play out in the present told from a third person perspective. That would actually fit the source material, because in Salo the people would tell each other tales of their past debaucheries.
This story is rated 18+ for allusions to necrophilia and graphic descriptions of rape, forced incest, torture and pedofoalila.
I'm sorry but that part right there would probably repel a lot of people.
Yeah, what Neiro said. Not really sure how Blueblood managed to brainwash the entire kingdom somehow.
Another decent chapter. Reading this and semi-enjoying it makes my brain go "WTF", but my boner go "me gusta". Always did have a little thing for rape/torture. Onward to the next pony!
896515
Thanks for the feedback! Rarity seemed like a natural first choice when dealing with Blueblood. Once it was over, though, I wondered what he would do when confronted with other members of the mane six.
As for the setting, I was going for a Canterlot that was set in a atmosphere similar to France right before the French Revolution. The commoners had yet to unite against their ruthless oppressors.
Having burned a heretic, Blueblood's next challenge will be to rid the kingdom of a gypsy witch.
"How do you know she is a witch?"
"She Looks like one!"
What the chainsaw-juggling Christ did I just fucking read? No. Just... Dang it, Bobbeh.
Still not as bad as the school area in DS2. And fuck Blueblood with a power drill, then cut off his hooves, slice open his stomach and take a shit in it before sewing it back up and forcing him the chew on rocks.
And all was right with the world.
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You have delivered me another beutiful orgasm with this second chapter, plaese, keep up the good work and continue this masterpeice.
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Since you seem to be the target audience for these types of stories, I must ask you a question.
Are there any subjects that turn you off? This second chapter had more gore in it, but generally speaking, extended descriptions of wanton violence doesn't do it for me. This story will not reach Cupcake-levels of gore, for example. Blueblood isn't going to remove anypony's internal organs while they're still alive, or anything.
But what specifically in the first two chapters either enticed or repulsed you? I've worked out the basic ideas for future chapters with the rest of the mane six, but are there any ideas you would like to see implemented? I'm very interested in your feedback.
906767 Well, for me the only thing I don't like is how there isn't enough mental/emotional abuse, other than that overall its pretty good, The only things I didn't like were how in the first chapter The father wasn't involved in the main event, He couldv'e been, say, forced to watch, or partake in it, Alsointhe second one Ithink you couldv'e added Spike and Twilight's parents,but otherwise I thik it's perfect the way is. BTW I really like the whole 17th century France theme.
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911000 if you don't lioke it then go away, no one is forcing you to read this you filthy dirt pony.
914549 why would he be punished for doing the right thing, after all, the ponies he tourturedwere mares, it's not like women have souls or anyhing.
914854
While this series may be one of the most twisted and depraved things on this site, there are still lines you don't cross.
I will not love and tolerate any sexism in this comments section!
Apologize at once, my dear brony!
BTW: Blueblood will be punished in the end. The real trick is, can I make him suffer enough, without resorting to drastic levels of gore?
915082 1) I refuse to appologize for my beliefs. Mares, as well as Pegusi and Dirt ponies are vastkly inferior to the pure unicorn race.
2) If you need ways of tourtureing stallions without gore try this
1) Hook testies up to car batteries
2) use those anal pears in the twilight chapter.
3)force him to listen to justin beiber for 36 strait hours.
Good evening Mister Bronystories what have you made for us here?
Fascinating.
It appears you're making a definite effort to disturb and disgust and as far as I can see you're succeeding.
This fact earns you a thumbs up.
How could I do this?
Well the fact that I'd rather run a wad of sand-paper through my special place than attempt to masturbate to this shit aside I think its pretty well written.... For something of this nature that is.
I can actually see someone such as Blueblood doing these things in that position of power. Mainly 'cause it most likely happened in the past.
Mainly however its because I got a reaction from it.
In other words it made me feel.
Something ponies are annoyingly good at.
Frankly this disgusts me.
I spent the entire time fantasizing Bluebloods horrid demise.
My favorite so far is slow removal of the phallus via a timed clamp and cheesewire shrinking in diameter around the member by something like 4 millimetres a minute. No anesthetjc of course.
Then of course some form of buggery seeing as he appears to dislike colt-cuddlers, something along the lines of that there anal pear thingamajig.
Then the removal of the testes by first removing the scrotum with carefully applied caustic liquids. Drop. By. Drop.
Of course he'd pass out so wait for him to wake up every time he does and make sure he doesn't die.
Once the scrotum is completely removed mix salt and vinegar then lather the exposed testes in the solution.
Once this is done spend a few hours sanding down the organs and applying more vinegar and salt on the wounds.
If at any point his cursing and screams become tiresome pluck out all his teeth with burning iron tongs, melt his tongue with caustic powder and stitch his mouth shut with steel wool and a red hot needle (wear gloves).
Feel free to rub a lemon half on the stitching.
Once the testes and associated organs are nothing but pink paste move on to his limbs.
Get a boning knife and get filleting with those stompers but be sure to hook him up to plenty of ivs and transfusion thingies to keep him alive. And have lots of adrenaline handy.
Once all the meat's off of his royall legs grab a hammer and chisel and carve the name of all of his victims into the bone.
If you run out of room don't worry there'll be more.
Pull the bones from the sockets and set them aside. Cauterise the stumps.
At any point go ahead a rip his mane and tail out. Be careful with the tail, you don't want to damage the spine.
Now its time to go full on CUPCAKES. If you have any sense you've already removed his horn. If not, do it now. Just don't damage the brain.
At your own liesure open the ribcage and remove all nonessential organs. I.E. Everything other than the heart and lungs. Feel free to get punny.
Once this is done pump him full of everything it takes to keep him alive.
If there are any victims whose names you couldn't fit on his legs skin his skull and chisel them there.
If you run out of room.... Then well fuck.
Finally after a long day sprinkle his chest cavity with salt then feed him to his own dogs.
Remember to give the dogs everything that you removed.
Sleep soundly knowing you done good.
That is all.
Have a pleasant evening dear author.
Oh as a side note I read the other comments and....
Whats that movie?
Also despite being disgusted I did enjoy reading this if only because its been such a long time since I've had that emotional response towards a piece of literature....
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Also maybe because I was partially aroused by some bits and I like conflicting emotions...
Inner turmoil is a wonderful form of release.
920787
Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad that the story is registering with you on an emotional level.
As for the movie, check out the 120 Days of Sodom film review by Brad Jones
http://thecinemasnob.com/2009/08/16/salo-or-the-120-days-of-sodom.aspx
The movie is a modernized version of the 1785 novel, written by Donatien Alphonse François, Marquis de Sade. If you want to talk about influential authors, the words 'sadism' and 'sadist' are references to de Sade.
After reading your proposed torture for Blueblood, remind me to never get on your bad side.
920787 How DARE YOU PLAN to tourture a pure blooded unicorn such as blue blood! You infeior earth ponies have no right exsisting in equestria and even less a right to plan such horrendouse acts to your betters! Now, please GTFO and leave thew master race in peace!
921397
Neat!
I'll have a squizz at that, gotta be hell of a person to have that named after you.....
Still.... I take it since its 120 days in Sodom its based off of what went on in the long dead city of the Sodomites?
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Also... Um... I have no idea how I came up with that... I didn't think I had it in me... I guess... I guess Blueblood just brings out the worst in ponies...
Excuse me while I sit in the corner...
922028
Oh boy here we go.
Hearths Warming 101:
Earth Ponies are essential for the provision of food.
Pegasi provide weather control that make the Earth Ponies' lives easier.
Unicorns control the sun and- Oh wait... No they don't!
The Alicorns control the sun and the moon!
Earth Ponies= Essential to survival.
Pegasi= Beneficial to survival.
Unicorns= Obsolete via Alicorn.
You may place your shapely and obsolete lips upon my essential dirt pony posterier and kiss it repeatedly.
I'm just saying that someone better be getting relised from there stone prison,and some pony better be getting stuck in a little devise named "The Changeling's Womb". A form of torcher in which said price over a coarse of 3 weeks has his sol magically ripped apart. (like Hellraiser).
922984
Main carachter of MLP A UNICORN!
Growing food isn't unique to dirt ponies, anyone can do it and magic can do it more efficently
Weather can be controlled with magic
Unicorns origonally controlled the sun and moon, and then your Whore queen celestia barges in, takes it over and start spread her pompus bullshit about peace, equallity, and love.
now go roll in some mud like the living filth you are dirt pony and leave the master race alone.
924846
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Also, is it worth pointing out that in this story the two unicorn were the first to die?
924846
Actually unicorn magic can't grow plants.
Unicorns can control the weather but only pegasi can manufacture it.
Main character is a unicorn mare (I recall you lumping in all mares with us hornless pony folk) whose friends are non-unicorns bar one (two if Shining counts among her other friends).
All unicorn males who have had any lengthy duration on screen have shown themselves to be air-headed, pompous, inferior and decidedly annoying.
However Flim & Flam get points for being sexy.
And Fancypants gets a bit of a bumper cause I only half watched Sweet & Elite.
Also stuff Celestia.
I vote Discord.
Once again I am impressed and with good reason... I again congratulate you on you very very very very very veeeerrry descriptive writing skills and also pinkamena siding with blueblood would be interesting until of course she betrays him and does what questionable object suggested... Good job...
925318 Yes, magic can't grow plants but Unicorns can do them the old fashion way. And seeing as to how ALL docters and scientists are UNICORNS we would probably find a way somehow (Like with the technology you and the rest of your living trash race are holding back.) As for the weather, again,either magic or science. And if all else fails, I suppose the master race could enslave you all, rape your mares and force you to do all the meanial labor we are too good for. Also Unicorn mares are considered citezens. Just the ones of the lesser races are used as sex slaves, maids and cooks. As for pegusi... scince they are better than dirt ponies they wouldn't be eradecated, just treated as second class citezens. If you want to continue this argument go to the Unicorn Supremecy Movement's group on fimfiction, my comrades would LOVE to put you swine in your place.
924885 Technecly, it's not related, we veiw Alicorns as muddled disgrace (They have earth pony, pegusi, and unicorn blood) and that makes them a disgrace to our pure, unicorn race.
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I have never seen any unicorn other than maybe Twilight ever do hard menial work.
I highly doubt that any unicorn could ever get down and dirty and be as any good as an earth pony at farm work.
As for technology.... Flim and Flam were bein' kinda pushy on the matter. Coulda shown a bit of tact with the Cider machine... Like not threatening someone's business.
All doctors? Redheart ring any bells? I'm pretty sure she's a earth pony.
As intelligent as conquering the "lesser" races and getting them to do all the work or just killing them may be I'd like to point out several obstacles in that plan. Most prominent obstacle: You're a minority group in the smallest tribe and the only reason the other tribes didn't wipe you out back in the days of the windigoes was 'cause you made the sun and moon go 'round.
Closely following that is the fact you have a pair of living goddesses sitting on the throne. Last I checked Alicorns don't like being overthrown.
Then there's the factor of some non-ponies inferring that if you lot hate other ponies then it'd only be a matter of time before you began to pick on them and would give us "lesser" ponies a hand. That or see the inner turmoil as an opportunity to attack.
Then the least obvious but possibly the most dangerous.
Remember Discord? Big Draconaquus with mismatched limbs? Feeds off chaos and disharmony?
Yeah I think a pony v pony war would be an all you can eat buffet for him. Especially if any of the Elements of Harmony were killed... Or damaged. We all know they're a pretty fragile bunch in the head.
And then there's the Windigoes. Dunno if they were killed or banished but if they were just sent off with a smack on the wrist they'd be back in a heartbeat if a holocaust went up.
Now there's a whole group of you? Goodie, I'm enjoying this! I'll go give the USM a little visit ay?
Also I hardly see Twilight fitting into your picture of the supreme unicorns seeing as she's kind of a race traitor and is Celestia's #1 student.
934180 Yes, Flim and Flam were being pushy, TO AN EARTH PONY! The Apple family deserves to have their farm taken away and givin to the pure, master race. As for Hearth's warming eve? That is the version that Celestia told and after a few milennia the truth mixed with legend(Much like christianity) and now everyone believes it for they are too stupid to think for themselves. As for the nusre, SHE IS A NURES! NOT A REAL DOCTER. A nurse is just a fancy way of saying the docter's bitch. It's good to see the lesser masses finally finding their place like her. BEING THE MASTER RACES BITCH! and finally Twiligt is a pure blooded unicorn and even if she refuses at first, ever hear of stockholm syndrom? if we capture her and rape/tourture her fpr a few years she would eventually see the light.
YOU SAID IT WAS COMPLETE!!! THEN YOU WRITE MORE!!!
i cant read more of this blasphemy, but i cant control my brain (and other parts too).
so, i MUST READ!
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well done, mister.
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*Curtsies in a gore stained chef's uniform*
Why thank you.
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You need to quit being a sexist asshole!
942176 And you as a pegusis need to submit to the Master Unicorn race and accept your place as a sex slave/laboror.
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Oh don't mind him. Blueblood keeps brutalassmaster locked in the dungeon in order to torture the other prisoners with his comments.
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So you're saying it's a pile of s#!%, but it's a quality pile of s#!%?
MOAR!
Could you do next? Or maybe ?
Just, please continue! Us creeps enjoy this!
Ooh...maybe you could save Fluttershy for last and she survives, maybe even marries him! (As one of his many wives, of course.) I mean, c'mon. Little withdrawn Fluttershy + bedroom scene =
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While I saw you won't apologise for that remark, please, keep it to yourself. I know that many people think that, and people think the way about men, I hate it when people voice stuff like that, and I know others do too.
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"...save Fluttershy for last and she survives, maybe even marries him!" -FlutterShay
Have you been reading my private notes?
Seriously though, thanks for the feedback!
I promise each of the main six will get a turn in the spotlight.
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It was what, one AM when I wrote that?
I dunno. Whenever I look at Blueblood, I always imagine him as one who had many wives.
Ponies + Salò? Oh my God, I think I'm in love.
Can't say I get off to this kind of thing (well...usually, lol), but wow...you are one heck of a writer! I'll admit to a morbid fascination with ero-guro; however, I tend to be very critical when it comes to mixing this with MLP, if only because it spawns godawful Cupcakes spin-offs and other shit with no literary merit.
But THIS...I loved every last bit of it. Words cannot describe my joy, hats off.
The thing you did in the second chapter with Galileo!Twi was awesome, and Blueblood's narration is consistently clever, debonair and oh-so deliciously sadistic. I'd like to see how Celestia and Luna play into this sick crazy world--that is, if they're even aware of Blueblood's little...foibles. (Going with the Salò theme, the idea of Equestria's rulers attending a dinner party to eat feces is just...horrible and hilarious at the same time.)
Anyway, I'm definitely adding you to my watch list, brony. I eagerly await the next installment.
Carefully reads reviews...
Well I feel compelled to read this for reasons I cannot fully understand or justify.
Oh god why...
Beautifully written I shall give you that, but, you now, wat.
My God, this is sick; YOU'RE SICK... otherwise, good read
Thank you, for allowing me to hate blueblood even more. Also, this sounds like a terrible thing to say, but I'm glad shining armor committed suicide. It shows how he, despite what he showed outwardly, still felt like shit for doing that. It shows he had somewhat of a heart.
This fic is excellent, but I noticed this chapter had less sex and more violence and stuff. If I may say so I like the clopfic side more than the violence/torture side. Once again, I dont know whether to hate or love this fic, but since I dont often dislike fics that I read, I'll love it XD
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This second chapter definitely had more violence, it's true. The next chapter I'm working on will be grounded more in clop. Gorn or ultraviolence never really did anything for me.
Thanks for the feedback!
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2 questions. Who's the next chapter about (or is that a secret :P) and is there any gore or is it all clop?
I mean I'm gonna read it either way haha.
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Let's just say Blueblood has to deal with a gypsy accused of being a witch.
In spite of what you might think, there won't be a lot of elaborate tortures. Blueblood will instead use his reliable interrogation tool to forcibly extract a confession.
Let me know what you think of this. While I love how the first two chapters are written, first person is so limiting. I'm think of explaining it as the first two chapters happened in the past, and Blueblood is reading the accounts from his journal. The rest of the story from chapter three will play out in the present told from a third person perspective. That would actually fit the source material, because in Salo the people would tell each other tales of their past debaucheries.