You’re lack of moral restraint is a true inspiration to libertines everywhere.
I want to say this is a typo, but if anyone can be said to be the lack of moral restraint, it is this Blueblood.
You have created a masterpiece of depravity and debaucery. I have regretted reading every word. Why do I feel I should be thanking you?
In any case, I'm glad it's over, both the story and the reign of the libertines. Whatever regime that follows them will not be perfect, but at least it won't subject innocents to such horrors and indignities.
2705889 Blueblood still has his thoughts. 1,000+ years without masturbation would lead to some pretty severe wet dreams. We may learn learn more about what Blueblood's plans for Fluttershy would've been had things ended differently.
2706252 Sorta both, really. Some mares are disgusted by the idea of debasing themselves for a chance at becoming royalty. Those mares who refuse to participate are the ones who get raped.
Other mares, who are lowly in station, or destitute, are more than willing to fornicate if it means they may be elevated to royalty.
Some of the participants of the orgy are willing, while others aren't.
As far as the music goes, it's not meant to be a catch all. It just dulls the senses and makes the hearer more open to suggestion.
Strange I don't even hate it or see it the way as everyone claimed it to be, for a grimdark fic at least. I actually kinda like it, and surprisingly want to see more like this in the near future. If you don't mind that is.
Hmmm. I don't know, Trixie is pretty sharp, and the way she can work a crowd and head a revolution suggests she knows how read people. I think she could have deduced Fluttershy was truly surprised and innocent. And seriously, screw it being their "dying" breath, why would she takes the royals at their word?
2706385 I'd go with mob mentality. If the crowd sees Blueblood acting romantic towards Fluttershy and tasks her with continuing the work, then the crowd would have cause to think she was in on it.
This ending went through a couple different rewrites. In one version, Trixie always suspected Fluttershy was in league with the libertines.
In another version, she thought the groundskeeper was innocent, but she was unable to sway the crowd, who demanded blood. In that version, the crowd stoned Fluttershy to death.
In the version I went with, Trixie was convinced by the circumstantial evidence. Besides, the crowd was calling for blood and Trixie strives to be a crowd pleaser.
2706401 Here's my policy to any deconstruction of my complaints/critiques/bitching:
Take what you've said and put it in the story. In this case, if it was the pressure of the crowd that tipped the scales, demonstrate Trixie being shallow and placing herself above the individual, and mentally shrugging her shoulders. Or if this is a compromise of a strong moral code, give Trixie second thoughts and have her live with the guilt or doubt.
Doing this would only be for satisfying my issue though, along with anyone else's if it hasn't been spoken. When an author chooses not to adjust his story, it's because the critic did not present a strong case and the change seems unnecessary, or the critic is too little a minority to put the effort forth.
Thank you for posting it at the day of my birthday! I always waited for the end of this story, and now it's here, in my BIRTHDAY!!! I am happy for you and your creative writing skills.
A few questions: 1.) Why do you hide the names of ponies? Is it just because to confuse us or is it something else? 2.) Is this the final ending to this extreme story? 3.) Who is this "Night Shade" son of a bitch? 4.) It seemed there was a heavy revolution in this chapter. After the fall of the libertine kingdom, will it lead to the rise of the socialist government in Equestria (Just like what happened in Russia since 1917)? 5.) After the fall of the princesses, who would be given the power to wield the Elements of Harmony? Now that the Elements are no longer connected to Celestia and Luna, and Discord was released, what will everypony do? 6.) There will also be changeling threat in Canterlot just like in the main series, and in some time, the Crystal Empire along with King Sombra will return. What will the "Ponies' Republic of Equestria", or whatever fuck that is, do if Chrysalis and Sombra appeared, now that royalty is crushed?
I will begin making "El Equesterismo" based on the alternate scenarios in 120 Days of Blueblood. Look forward to it! (Like the predecessor story, it contains clop and orgy rape. My story will have an OC character and feature Spike.)
I'm too confused to decide if it was a happy ending or not, either way, I think I set a personal best for orgasms. good ending, apart from the y'know.... Death. Good!
2706762 "Get a life" phrase: 1.Something douchy faggots say because they lack the cognitive faculties to form a proper retort. 2. Something people with no life say.
Some faggot on the internet told me to "get a life" because he's a complete tool.
First of all, I was impressed that you found a way to work together Lyra and Bon Bon's fate as well as what I expect was your plan (the infatuation) for the alternate Dressmaker chapter into this one. Personally, I would have loved to have seen a more gradual, conflicted development in Fluttershy's understanding of the Prince than the abrupt about-face he and the Princesses induce through their wanton barbarity. It doesn't feel rushed per se, but some elements of self-victim-blame or Stockholm syndrome would have been interesting to see before all pretense was dropped in her torture. It left an aspect of psychological wounding unexplored, which was a bit of a shame, I suppose.
I enjoy that Blueblood can paradoxically be seen as the purest character in the story: he alone recognizes his values as the highest good, while all others compromise, disgracing and fettering themselves. (The other libertines, to decency; the populace and his victims, to debauchery.) Blueblood, rejecting any compromises, embodies the only true "perfection" throughout, the only paragon willing to die for his ideals rather than forfeit them. "[T]he fear of death is the only true death," indeed. And Blueblood's ultimate punishment was as a fitting as I think it could be, since by his own belief only his fear could ever destroy him.
If history will judge me a monster, then so be it. I will not live my life cowering in fear of a future generation's scorn.
That this fear was inspired by the very thing he had been chasing underscores his just deserts with wicked irony. This a fate more brilliant than any grisly killing or torture, and an utterly perfect defeat of the perfect sadist.
Additionally, I can offer a few tips, if you'd like them: 1. Usage: "Passed" is used at one point instead of "Past" in The Wedding. ("The large ring was then inserted passed her lips.") The latter is what you want here, since it creates an adverbial phrase. 2. Archaic English: "Hath" is simply equivalent to "Has"; "Have" would still be used where we use it in Modern. (Technically, the -(e)th ending had been obsoleted by Early Modern English, which is what the Princesses speak, but the archaism is fun and does add a little something, in my opinion.) 3. Vocative constructions: there are a few places where you have long vocatives that are not distinguished, “Spare me your theatrics you conniving cunt,” for example. Since English lacks any better way of distinguishing vocatives, they are best placed in commas, rather like exclamations.
Once more, this is tremendous work. The boldest, strangest, and unquestionably most depraved take on fanfiction to which I have ever borne witness. A resounding triumph: a masterpiece.
2720708 why am I a horrible person? Because I am tired of the self insert alicorn or human stories that run rampant on this site and praised this author for his story telling? You have to admit it is well written...and even though there were multiple times i had to skim because i couldnt handle the content....i can appreciate it for the fiction it is....now if this happened on the news....I would be outraged....but it's fucking pony fan fiction... And apparently u bypassed the warnings and read it too...so we will both burn in the fires of hell lol
Nice, your one amazing wrighter I'll give you that.I've always liked a story with a Brod vocabulary. It's a shame that only about 10 percent of the people who started finished reading the story, but, you know, there los. Oh, and by the way, where do you get those philosophy quotes. I really really love those! I sometimes don't understand or disagree with a few of them, but they're always interesting
I want to say this is a typo, but if anyone can be said to be the lack of moral restraint, it is this Blueblood.
You have created a masterpiece of depravity and debaucery. I have regretted reading every word. Why do I feel I should be thanking you?
In any case, I'm glad it's over, both the story and the reign of the libertines. Whatever regime that follows them will not be perfect, but at least it won't subject innocents to such horrors and indignities.
2705761
Twas a typo. Thanks for the catch!
EDIT: Fixed!
Whelp that was unexpected
This was still the greatest story In fimfiction nay pony fanfiction history
huh, I was kind of looking forward to to him "molding" fluttershy. I don't suppose you would consider writing an alternate ending or "lost chapter"?
*shifty eyes* Is it strange to say that I know where you got that ring exchange from?
2705889
Blueblood still has his thoughts. 1,000+ years without masturbation would lead to some pretty severe wet dreams. We may learn learn more about what Blueblood's plans for Fluttershy would've been had things ended differently.
I'm not ruling anything out at this point.
.... Well I guess it can't have a BAD ending...
2705783 Whoopsie, my bad.
2705902
In that case, you'll know what anime I was referring to when I started this thread.
It's sad how a hentai that once captured my imagination now pales in comparison to the average clopfic.
2705932
Its knot you're fawlt.
Wee awl maek miztakes.
2705943 Don't you even start, mister.
Well, at least we got a sort-of happy ending...
2706252
Sorta both, really. Some mares are disgusted by the idea of debasing themselves for a chance at becoming royalty. Those mares who refuse to participate are the ones who get raped.
Other mares, who are lowly in station, or destitute, are more than willing to fornicate if it means they may be elevated to royalty.
Some of the participants of the orgy are willing, while others aren't.
As far as the music goes, it's not meant to be a catch all. It just dulls the senses and makes the hearer more open to suggestion.
A fitting end for such a torturing fanfic.
Strange I don't even hate it or see it the way as everyone claimed it to be, for a grimdark fic at least. I actually kinda like it, and surprisingly want to see more like this in the near future. If you don't mind that is.
Hmmm. I don't know, Trixie is pretty sharp, and the way she can work a crowd and head a revolution suggests she knows how read people. I think she could have deduced Fluttershy was truly surprised and innocent. And seriously, screw it being their "dying" breath, why would she takes the royals at their word?
2706385
I'd go with mob mentality. If the crowd sees Blueblood acting romantic towards Fluttershy and tasks her with continuing the work, then the crowd would have cause to think she was in on it.
This ending went through a couple different rewrites. In one version, Trixie always suspected Fluttershy was in league with the libertines.
In another version, she thought the groundskeeper was innocent, but she was unable to sway the crowd, who demanded blood. In that version, the crowd stoned Fluttershy to death.
In the version I went with, Trixie was convinced by the circumstantial evidence. Besides, the crowd was calling for blood and Trixie strives to be a crowd pleaser.
Meh.
The ending was bit redundant.
I think a round of violent castration before the 'stoning', haha, would have been the way to go.
2706401
Here's my policy to any deconstruction of my complaints/critiques/bitching:
Take what you've said and put it in the story. In this case, if it was the pressure of the crowd that tipped the scales, demonstrate Trixie being shallow and placing herself above the individual, and mentally shrugging her shoulders. Or if this is a compromise of a strong moral code, give Trixie second thoughts and have her live with the guilt or doubt.
Doing this would only be for satisfying my issue though, along with anyone else's if it hasn't been spoken. When an author chooses not to adjust his story, it's because the critic did not present a strong case and the change seems unnecessary, or the critic is too little a minority to put the effort forth.
Thank you for posting it at the day of my birthday!
I always waited for the end of this story, and now it's here, in my BIRTHDAY!!! I am happy for you and your creative writing skills.
A few questions:
1.) Why do you hide the names of ponies? Is it just because to confuse us or is it something else?
2.) Is this the final ending to this extreme story?
3.) Who is this "Night Shade" son of a bitch?
4.) It seemed there was a heavy revolution in this chapter. After the fall of the libertine kingdom, will it lead to the rise of the socialist government in Equestria (Just like what happened in Russia since 1917)?
5.) After the fall of the princesses, who would be given the power to wield the Elements of Harmony? Now that the Elements are no longer connected to Celestia and Luna, and Discord was released, what will everypony do?
6.) There will also be changeling threat in Canterlot just like in the main series, and in some time, the Crystal Empire along with King Sombra will return. What will the "Ponies' Republic of Equestria", or whatever fuck that is, do if Chrysalis and Sombra appeared, now that royalty is crushed?
I will begin making "El Equesterismo" based on the alternate scenarios in 120 Days of Blueblood. Look forward to it! (Like the predecessor story, it contains clop and orgy rape. My story will have an OC character and feature Spike.)
2704300
It will be based on ALTERNATE scenarios, not real happenings. Get a life.
Goddamn.
I'm too confused to decide if it was a happy ending or not, either way, I think I set a personal best for orgasms. good ending, apart from the y'know.... Death. Good!
2706762
"Get a life" phrase: 1.Something douchy faggots say because they lack the cognitive faculties to form a proper retort. 2. Something people with no life say.
Some faggot on the internet told me to "get a life" because he's a complete tool.
3 NEW CHAPTERS?! Oh Shit! call the police! This story has already violated about
two dozen laws! We don't need more of it!
what a ending
Bronystories, you have outdone yourself again.
First of all, I was impressed that you found a way to work together Lyra and Bon Bon's fate as well as what I expect was your plan (the infatuation) for the alternate Dressmaker chapter into this one. Personally, I would have loved to have seen a more gradual, conflicted development in Fluttershy's understanding of the Prince than the abrupt about-face he and the Princesses induce through their wanton barbarity. It doesn't feel rushed per se, but some elements of self-victim-blame or Stockholm syndrome would have been interesting to see before all pretense was dropped in her torture. It left an aspect of psychological wounding unexplored, which was a bit of a shame, I suppose.
I enjoy that Blueblood can paradoxically be seen as the purest character in the story: he alone recognizes his values as the highest good, while all others compromise, disgracing and fettering themselves. (The other libertines, to decency; the populace and his victims, to debauchery.) Blueblood, rejecting any compromises, embodies the only true "perfection" throughout, the only paragon willing to die for his ideals rather than forfeit them. "[T]he fear of death is the only true death," indeed. And Blueblood's ultimate punishment was as a fitting as I think it could be, since by his own belief only his fear could ever destroy him.
That this fear was inspired by the very thing he had been chasing underscores his just deserts with wicked irony. This a fate more brilliant than any grisly killing or torture, and an utterly perfect defeat of the perfect sadist.
Additionally, I can offer a few tips, if you'd like them:
1. Usage: "Passed" is used at one point instead of "Past" in The Wedding. ("The large ring was then inserted passed her lips.") The latter is what you want here, since it creates an adverbial phrase.
2. Archaic English: "Hath" is simply equivalent to "Has"; "Have" would still be used where we use it in Modern. (Technically, the -(e)th ending had been obsoleted by Early Modern English, which is what the Princesses speak, but the archaism is fun and does add a little something, in my opinion.)
3. Vocative constructions: there are a few places where you have long vocatives that are not distinguished, “Spare me your theatrics you conniving cunt,” for example. Since English lacks any better way of distinguishing vocatives, they are best placed in commas, rather like exclamations.
Once more, this is tremendous work. The boldest, strangest, and unquestionably most depraved take on fanfiction to which I have ever borne witness. A resounding triumph: a masterpiece.
2706713 There is no way in hell that I will riff that.
how does graphic description of jaywalking contribute to the mature rating?
2708749 You'll be happy then. ^^
2706762 Depends. Are they on sale right now?
I demand you re-write and make fluttershy be able to live ( not turned to stone )
2719431
Considering what happened to the other mane six, I'd say old Fluttershy got off pretty easy.
What's really tragic is the circumstances in which Fluttershy was killed. Her death was relatively painless.
Thanks for the feedback!
2720708 why am I a horrible person? Because I am tired of the self insert alicorn or human stories that run rampant on this site and praised this author for his story telling? You have to admit it is well written...and even though there were multiple times i had to skim because i couldnt handle the content....i can appreciate it for the fiction it is....now if this happened on the news....I would be outraged....but it's fucking pony fan fiction... And apparently u bypassed the warnings and read it too...so we will both burn in the fires of hell lol
2720708 2720693
Don't be such a parasprite.
Oh, i feel like an awful person now. I gotta go watch some innocent kitten video now before i can go to sleep.
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Peace.
Nice, your one amazing wrighter I'll give you that.I've always liked a story with a Brod vocabulary. It's a shame that only about 10 percent of the people who started finished reading the story, but, you know, there los. Oh, and by the way, where do you get those philosophy quotes. I really really love those! I sometimes don't understand or disagree with a few of them, but they're always interesting
2726567 Learn to grammar.
2730694 Hmm, is that a real website? I couldn't finde it.
2730863 ...What.
2731806
Thanks for the feedback. Also, your name is very appropriate for chapter eight.
Yeeeeeesssss..... Moreee....
2731302 "learn to grammar".
2733500 Oh. No, that wasn't a site. I was just making fun of your sub-par grammatical capabilities.
2733663yeah, grammar isn't my thing. I specialize in phycology and computer science. I'm not good outside of my element. Are you troling me?
2734453 ...Yeah. I'm definitely trolling you.
2734877 well what are you even doing on a brony site anyway ? shouldn't you be off trolling 4chan or something? bronies watch ponies you know.
2736446 ...
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Look, I don't know how old you are, but no one over fifteen could possibly be this stupid.