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So long, Space Cowponies.

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You might want to edit her nethers slightly, her vagina is slightly exposed in the cover art.

So, FIMFiction has become a pornographic site? That is very much nudity. You best cut the image's bottom two inches before a monitor sees this. To be honest, I have no clue how this was approved with that cover.

8003888 here's how it was approved, if you have enough stories you'll be given
Permission to use auto upload, which basically means you approve it yourself and it only takes about 10 minutes to publish, and the mods don't check for inappropriate cover arts and the like.

Eldorado
Moderator

Please review our NSFW policy before choosing a different image to use as cover art. This was pretty blatant.

To All: I wish to apologize for that error in the picture. I had incorrectly cropped it before uploading, and did not catch it before hitting submit as I was in a hurry to leave for work. I didn't get a chance to check until a few minutes ago, and have taken the story down a bit for editing and getting a new image.

EDIT: By the time any of you will have read this, I have changed the Cover Art to be in lines with the NSFW policy of Fimfiction.

Comment posted by Xzrea deleted Mar 31st, 2017

Hey, where'd the story go? I had it in my favorites folder and everything, but now it's hidden behind a password. :rainbowhuh:

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It's back up now. I had to fix a couple of things. Now it is up for everybrony's viewing pleasure.

Some minor spelling errors, but overall great!:twilightsmile:

8003953 Okay, didn't know about that feature. Thank you, the more you know! :pinkiehappy:

8004082 As I said in our pm, you really didn't do any harm. Any minor using this site that has his or her mature filter off could have used a good awakening. Who knows, you may have helped some parent out there with the birds and the bees story. :rainbowlaugh:

8014872 I am, by trade, an Auditor. Precision and double-checking are prime parts of my life, and my job. It takes a rather OCD and anal person to do my work, and thus, I find such a blatant foul-up rather... embarrassing. Imagine if you forgot to open a door before walking through the doorway, and everyone saw you do it? But, that's just me. I long ago gave up trying to find ALL spelling errors though. Too many sleepless nights.

8015138 Ah, I understand that mentality. Still, the past is the past, the new cover-art looks great, so let the water under the bridge flow away into the sea. :scootangel:

Oh, this is the "what came first" question again. If asked, I'd say that Dark did not exist before Light did. Cause the former is defined as absence of the latter, and if there is no latter, you cannot define the former. Another point is if we "broaden" the Light definition a bit, saying that all photons belong to it, not only small specter visible by humans - then there is pretty much no place where there's no "light" - there's heat radiation, there's radiation from atomic reactions, there's much more different things. So Dark is more like Emptiness, and then - it is easy to understand that even while Emptiness existed before Matter, people love Matter more. After all, they're made of matter))

Also, demons being creatures of order? That's pretty specific demons you're telling about here, I believe like Baatezu from DnD, but even they are not exactly that. I guess you make it this way for them to oppose Eris. Still, very strange.

8063656 I read a great webcomic once called Dominic Deegan: Oracle for Hire. In it, a great point is made.

Order represents stability, reason, and logic. However, it also serves as a platform for oppression, stagnation, and decay.
Chaos represents confusion and instability. Conversely, it can project innovation, freedom, and change.

Each of them has an upside and a downside, depending on how you use it.

Some small typos (I skimmed later chapters):
Chapter #1

A metropolis the capitol of Equestria never truly slept in this day and age.

capital (The Capitol = building)
Chapter #2

The, for one thousand years, we slumbered and plotted revenge in our sleep.

Then

This was... alot more than he was expecting.

(from chapter #4) From there, it was only alot of grunting, gasping, and groaning between the three parties.

a lot
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She sighed as she looked at a picture of her young colt, eagerly holding his brand-new Nightwatcher-3000 Telescope with ManaMoter Alighnment.

Alignment

Facing eachother, Dusk could hardly believe he was doing this.

(Chapter #3)It was as simple as two ponies who needed eachother, even if just for a night.

each other

"My God, it's Full of Stars" is a famous quote from 2001: A Space Oddessy movie, where those are the last words spoken by the protagonist.

The Mandela Effect - there's no such line in the movie, it's in the book only. :twilightoops:

Well, finally finished all three stories. Enjoyed them all but this chapter left me confused a little. Why did Luna need to do this? I’ll admit I only skimmed it since is not really my thing. Was it something to do with the whole debt thing or a power fetish of hers?

Dusk rolled his eyes. "Yes Spike. You are my Number One Assistant. I don't suppose your eagerness to have Discord, Big Mac, and Rumble over for Ogres and Oubliettes has anything to do with it?"

Um you mean Eris actually shouldn't this be Barb? I'm not sure how this verse works?

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