Nice to See that they make each other Hope. Given that Rainbow Dash is the Element of Loyalty, it makes Sense that she dosen't give up, Hope dies Last After all. Lightning streak is a Idiot indeed and a disgrace to the Wonderbolts.
Sigh, for little... It's a surprise they manage to get out that easy, I mean, surely there are spells to search, or dogs... Even Luna could visit their dreams.
8157973 At least we get some semblance of catharsis in this chapter: dumbass got his ass kicked!
A small part of me just wants to see that scenw play out: if only for a short chapter, I wanna see that bastard get the beating of his life from my favorite pony! Followed by a brutal interrogation!
theponycaptorproject, here's hoping you can make it happen. If not, I understand.
To her bewilderment, the stallion had taken a picture of her. He was looking at the printed photo and was grinning.
Seriously? I've no experience working in a slavery and/or kidnapping business but I know if I did I'd probably not be alright with people taking pictures. I wouldn't be surprised if he got the camera smashed and photo shredded before he left the building.
I think I’ll sneak this picture into Rainbow Dash’s locker when nopony’s looking, let the bitch see how much you’ve grown up.
On the one hand... this could lead to a search for Scoots. On the other hand...Is he that stupid?
The building was in an uproar when Scootaloo woke up the next morning.
Oh god. It happened.
Broken nose, three shattered ribs, a concussion, and a dislocated shoulder from what I hear.
I hope we see more of Scootaloo in the future. Since she's been trapped with this Brothel group for a year I'd be curious what other aspects of this life has been for her. did she only interact with foals younger than herself? Did she try to make friends with anyone older? What about the mares? were they kidnapped as well or were they brought in by other means? Did Scootaloo ever attempt to escape from this place at any point? questions like that.
it feels like there's a lot that could be explored with her.
Wow! Just wow! I can't believe Scootaloo doesn't want to be saved. That's so sad.
Also, how did those ponies know about Lightning Streak taking the photo of Scootaloo, and that he was being interrogated? And how come the Brothel wasn't being raided by Royal Guards and Rainbow Dash without warning? They must have help from corrupted members of the authorities secretly conspiring with them or something. How else would they have knowledge of all this before it would happen?
8161212 You're right about them having corrupt authorities on their side. They had early warning that they needed to pack up and move camp. It's not that Scootaloo doesn't want to be saved, she would love to go home if she could. However, she doesn't think she will, and she doesn't want Rainbow Dash to know what she's going through. She doesn't want to break Rainbow Dash's heart over what's happening to her if it won't help her.
8161775 I see. I would be surprised if the princesses and the main 6 don't suspect that there are traitors among the authorities. But my educated guess is sooner or later, the princesses and the main 6 will put 2 and 2 together, and get every single member of the authorities mind read by a mind-reading spell form the princesses or Discord to find them.
BTW I have a story, (and a story series sooner or later) that involves corrupt authorities putting innocent ponies in a prison for false crimes for their fortunes, and higher pay-checks, if your interested. It's called "A Pop Star, a Princess, and a Prisoner". Also, I'm writing a clop-fic right now that has rape, but for some reason, it got so many dislikes right after I posted the first chapter. I don't understand why though. I feel that it might be because of it not having any clop to start with off the bat. They probably looked at it, and after seeing no clop to jerk-off to, they disliked it heavily. If you're interested, the story is called "Buffalo Wings Tonight". Because I don't know what I'm doing wrong.
This and the last chapter seemed to focus more on the psychological aspect, and the physical aspect of the clop felt very neglected. Good as a sort of slice of life epilogue, but not exactly good as clop when compared to the main story.
8164705 I'm sorry to hear about your aunt's friend. I really hope he/she isn't hurt. For what it's worth, I find real rape disgusting and monstrous. It's a fetish for me only in the realm of fantasy. I'm glad you can still enjoy what I write, even if it isn't your thing anymore. Despite writing this primarily as porn, (well, less so with this recent chapter, ) I sincerely try to treat the subject matter seriously and with respect. Nothing in your reply rubbed me the wrong way.
i haven't read the two latest chapters, but overall i enjoyed the story, though i feel as if you missed two more alt ending possibilities, one with scootaloo killing her self, and the cmc actually killing their captors, but great story
8164927 I'm going to be avoiding death in this series. It's not really something I like in my cloppier stories. I still have a few follow up stories I want to do.
8164961 oh i totally get you, i had assumed with that chapter that the story was over, if it's not over then it's all good, have you read the silver spoon series?
You know, for a second there I thought you were going to make her pitifully pathetic again, or worse yet, save her. But this is beautiful—and I only allow myself to enjoy that because it's all fiction—broken, in her misery, with just enough hope to let her cling to it. The report about Lighting was immensely satisfying as well.
He's a character created by Alcatraz, basically a rapist who is very good at what he does. He's appeared in a number of stories, my favorite being this one.
8273087 in this story? i can see how gabby could be a possibility but the current dragon lord? I was thinking maybe the CMC seeing some other victims. and then the kidnappers showing how big the operation is. could add more chapters/ a whole spin-off :P diamond dog pup. changeling nymph dragon kid griffon kids maybe even buffalo and zebra kids? :P also if you want to talk rape about those two i have a few ideas~
8298039 A few reasons. The first is that I simply prefer ponies to the others. Plus, I wanted it to make sense that they could get away with it. If a minotaur were to walk into Ponyville, he'd draw a lot of attention. A trio of stallions might be noticed, but the odds of anypony (aside from Pinkie) taking enough note of them to be able to remember what they looked like is lower if they are ponies. Lastly...I have plans for some of the other species already.
You know what the saddest part of this chapter is. Rainbow Dash doesn't think things through, especially if she's mad. The reason why that's sad is because she could have interrogated him with a bad cop style and learned where they were faster than the guards could have. She could have rain boomed her way there before word reached them on what was happening.
So sadly her irrational mind is at fault for her being unable to catch them. It kind of makes it sad thinking that even after all this time their sisters haven't given up hope and are still searching, yet still basically being at a dead end.
What's worse is that before the sisters only knew their sisters were missing. It was completely unknown to them what kind of treatment the three were getting. But now with a picture of Scootaloo getting banged, which I'm sure Rainbow will tell Rarity and Applejack about, they now know exactly what's been happening to their sisters and it's sad because they still don't have any leads.
This story is well written, but very depressing, I honestly can't wait until you start continuing the good path for something a little less depressing.
Also if you mind me asking, but how many chapters do you plan on writing for this story? Is the Scootaloo, Apple bloom, Sweetie Belle's new lives the ending to the bad route or are you still going to be moving it on further?
8395310 There's ony one more chapter to the bad route, Sweetie Belle's. I'm probably going to post the good route as it's own thing, given that it will be very differant in theme, tone (since it won't be as miserable,) and because of the comparative lack of clop it'll feature
Nice to See that they make each other Hope. Given that Rainbow Dash is the Element of Loyalty, it makes Sense that she dosen't give up, Hope dies Last After all. Lightning streak is a Idiot indeed and a disgrace to the Wonderbolts.
Sigh, for little... It's a surprise they manage to get out that easy, I mean, surely there are spells to search, or dogs... Even Luna could visit their dreams.
8157973
At least we get some semblance of catharsis in this chapter: dumbass got his ass kicked!
A small part of me just wants to see that scenw play out: if only for a short chapter, I wanna see that bastard get the beating of his life from my favorite pony! Followed by a brutal interrogation!
theponycaptorproject, here's hoping you can make it happen. If not, I understand.
8158062 I agree with that, they shall pay!
What an idiot taking that picture lol well I guess he got what he deserved and now they gotta move their operation eleswhere
Well, there goes that part of the operation. For now, at least. Wonder of they'll have their own time getting back at Lightning.
Damn.
The feels, bro.
Seriously? I've no experience working in a slavery and/or kidnapping business but I know if I did I'd probably not be alright with people taking pictures. I wouldn't be surprised if he got the camera smashed and photo shredded before he left the building.
On the one hand... this could lead to a search for Scoots. On the other hand...Is he that stupid?
Oh god. It happened.
Oh that was so... so satisfying.
i really hope that they get rescued
I hope we see more of Scootaloo in the future. Since she's been trapped with this Brothel group for a year I'd be curious what other aspects of this life has been for her. did she only interact with foals younger than herself? Did she try to make friends with anyone older? What about the mares? were they kidnapped as well or were they brought in by other means? Did Scootaloo ever attempt to escape from this place at any point? questions like that.
it feels like there's a lot that could be explored with her.
Wow! Just wow! I can't believe Scootaloo doesn't want to be saved. That's so sad.
Also, how did those ponies know about Lightning Streak taking the photo of Scootaloo, and that he was being interrogated? And how come the Brothel wasn't being raided by Royal Guards and Rainbow Dash without warning? They must have help from corrupted members of the authorities secretly conspiring with them or something. How else would they have knowledge of all this before it would happen?
8161212
You're right about them having corrupt authorities on their side. They had early warning that they needed to pack up and move camp.
It's not that Scootaloo doesn't want to be saved, she would love to go home if she could. However, she doesn't think she will, and she doesn't want Rainbow Dash to know what she's going through. She doesn't want to break Rainbow Dash's heart over what's happening to her if it won't help her.
Interesting where this is going...
8161775
I see. I would be surprised if the princesses and the main 6 don't suspect that there are traitors among the authorities. But my educated guess is sooner or later, the princesses and the main 6 will put 2 and 2 together, and get every single member of the authorities mind read by a mind-reading spell form the princesses or Discord to find them.
BTW I have a story, (and a story series sooner or later) that involves corrupt authorities putting innocent ponies in a prison for false crimes for their fortunes, and higher pay-checks, if your interested. It's called "A Pop Star, a Princess, and a Prisoner".
Also, I'm writing a clop-fic right now that has rape, but for some reason, it got so many dislikes right after I posted the first chapter. I don't understand why though. I feel that it might be because of it not having any clop to start with off the bat. They probably looked at it, and after seeing no clop to jerk-off to, they disliked it heavily. If you're interested, the story is called "Buffalo Wings Tonight". Because I don't know what I'm doing wrong.
This and the last chapter seemed to focus more on the psychological aspect, and the physical aspect of the clop felt very neglected. Good as a sort of slice of life epilogue, but not exactly good as clop when compared to the main story.
8163897
Lol, works for me. Hell, if you want to use these characters, you can.
i actually wonder how all this will end.
8164705
I'm sorry to hear about your aunt's friend. I really hope he/she isn't hurt. For what it's worth, I find real rape disgusting and monstrous. It's a fetish for me only in the realm of fantasy. I'm glad you can still enjoy what I write, even if it isn't your thing anymore. Despite writing this primarily as porn, (well, less so with this recent chapter, ) I sincerely try to treat the subject matter seriously and with respect. Nothing in your reply rubbed me the wrong way.
i haven't read the two latest chapters, but overall i enjoyed the story, though i feel as if you missed two more alt ending possibilities, one with scootaloo killing her self, and the cmc actually killing their captors, but great story
good, i had thought the alt ending was the end, but it was just a different chain of events, good to know
8164927
I'm going to be avoiding death in this series. It's not really something I like in my cloppier stories. I still have a few follow up stories I want to do.
8164961 oh i totally get you, i had assumed with that chapter that the story was over, if it's not over then it's all good, have you read the silver spoon series?
*slow clap*
You know, for a second there I thought you were going to make her pitifully pathetic again, or worse yet, save her. But this is beautiful—and I only allow myself to enjoy that because it's all fiction—broken, in her misery, with just enough hope to let her cling to it. The report about Lighting was immensely satisfying as well.
Bravo.
8265135
Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed it a
8265215
Any plans to work with Crimson Skies?
8265241
Crimson Skies?
He's a character created by Alcatraz, basically a rapist who is very good at what he does. He's appeared in a number of stories, my favorite being this one.
8266961
Oh! I actually do know him. I probably won't be using him though, I will stick to eith cannon or my own characters most if the time.
i think my biggest issue with this is that its only ponies so far.
needs some none pony action going on. >:3
8272983
What, you mean like gryphons and dragons and stuff? I'd be down for writing some Gabby and Ember rape.
8273087
in this story?
i can see how gabby could be a possibility but the current dragon lord?
I was thinking maybe the CMC seeing some other victims. and then the kidnappers showing how big the operation is. could add more chapters/ a whole spin-off :P
diamond dog pup.
changeling nymph
dragon kid
griffon kids
maybe even buffalo and zebra kids? :P
also if you want to talk rape about those two i have a few ideas~
8273141
I wasn't thinking for this fic, no. However, I would love to hear your ideas.
8273145
sent and here's hoping to see those ideas I mentioned before added to this story~ hehe
8273145
When is the next chapter?
8275499
Probably another week or two off unfortunately. I have finals this week, and I have some other stories I want to work on.
8275624
What will the next chapter be about?
8297951
Out of pure curiosity, why are the abusers ponies?
Wouldn't it be interesting to add other races to the mix?
Diamond Dogs are canines, meaning that their penis will knot while still inside.
Minotaurs are bovines, meaning that their penis is proportionate to their size (which would make it much bigger than a ponies)
Gryphons are bird like creatures, it would be plausible that their penis has micro fibres that provoke a lot of pain to the female.
There are many different races in Equestria and beyond, why not take advantage of this racial diversity and spice things up a bit, per se.
8298039
A few reasons. The first is that I simply prefer ponies to the others. Plus, I wanted it to make sense that they could get away with it. If a minotaur were to walk into Ponyville, he'd draw a lot of attention. A trio of stallions might be noticed, but the odds of anypony (aside from Pinkie) taking enough note of them to be able to remember what they looked like is lower if they are ponies. Lastly...I have plans for some of the other species already.
So are you planning on writing the next chapter soon?
You know what the saddest part of this chapter is. Rainbow Dash doesn't think things through, especially if she's mad. The reason why that's sad is because she could have interrogated him with a bad cop style and learned where they were faster than the guards could have. She could have rain boomed her way there before word reached them on what was happening.
So sadly her irrational mind is at fault for her being unable to catch them. It kind of makes it sad thinking that even after all this time their sisters haven't given up hope and are still searching, yet still basically being at a dead end.
What's worse is that before the sisters only knew their sisters were missing. It was completely unknown to them what kind of treatment the three were getting. But now with a picture of Scootaloo getting banged, which I'm sure Rainbow will tell Rarity and Applejack about, they now know exactly what's been happening to their sisters and it's sad because they still don't have any leads.
This story is well written, but very depressing, I honestly can't wait until you start continuing the good path for something a little less depressing.
Also if you mind me asking, but how many chapters do you plan on writing for this story? Is the Scootaloo, Apple bloom, Sweetie Belle's new lives the ending to the bad route or are you still going to be moving it on further?
8395310
There's ony one more chapter to the bad route, Sweetie Belle's. I'm probably going to post the good route as it's own thing, given that it will be very differant in theme, tone (since it won't be as miserable,) and because of the comparative lack of clop it'll feature
Poor star ; n;/)... I want to rape her so hard right now..
8649232
Hehe, me too