7917898 I don't really mind honestly. Most of the anti rape porn comments I've gotten only expressed issues with the subject matter, and a few even tossed a complement my way despite their disgust with the rape. I have yet to receive any kind of personal attack for this, which is better than I expected.
How are the kidnappers going to react when they find out what kidnapping the CMC really means. Let's go down the list from least to the "You're so screwed that they haven't invented how screwed you are yet." : 1)Rainbow Dash- not much resources but she makes up for it with hoof to hoof fighting skills. 2)Pinkie Pie- Just on word; Cupcakes. No one will ever find the bodies after Pinkamena get's done and on a side note Sugar Cube Corner is having a 2 for 1 cupcake sale. 3)Fluttershy- She might be timed, but then again she lives next to one of the most dangerous forrests around and all it would take is one mouse, bird, or even a bug to tell her what happened and she can lead a freaking army of animals from the Everfree to get the girls back. 4)Rarity- Let's just say having friends in the right circles can also mean having friends whose money comes from less than legal means i.e. who do you think sells nice suits to mob bosses in Canterlot and Manehatten? 5)Apple Jack- Given the size of the Apple Family Clan and the Orange's and Pineapple's off branches of their family they count as mafia family \ army on their own with contection and resources all across Equestria and beyond. 6)Princess Twilight Sparkle- Sure, she doesn't use her royal status much, but she has tons of magical power, knowledge, and can call on other very powerful and knowledgeable magic users like Starlight Glimmer and Sunset Shimmer. 7)Shining Armor and Princess Cadence- If the Apple Family counts as an army then these two can call on 2 armies, The Royal Gaurds and the Crystal Gaurds as well as every law enforcement member in Equestria and the Crystal Empire. 8)Princess Luna- You can run and you can try to hide, but sooner or later you have to sleep. 9)Spike- Sure he's a baby dragon, but he's a baby dragon that the Dragon Lord Ember owes a favor to since she wouldn't be the Dragon Lord without his help. 10)Princess Celestia- The rest might be able to call on bits and piece of Equestria for help, but she can call upon all of Equestria and it's allies to search for them. I'm also pretty sure she can call upon any inmate in Tartarus who would like shave some time off the sentences in service to the crown. 11)Discord- We hello there, I'm Discord, lord of Chaos. With a simple snap of my fingers the kidnappers will wish one of the others got to them first and look I brought friends. This is Thorax, King of the Changelings and his whole army. Then we have the Great and Powerful Trixie wear a darling little piece called the Alicorn Amulet. Finally we have my old college room mates the Smooze and his hippy girlfriend Treehugger and Dr. Whooves and the ever bubblely Derpy. So feel free to piss yourself before trying to run away, I wouldn't want our fun to be interupted by something silly like a bathroom break.
I really liked the way you punish scootaloo and I really liked how the chapter went and I can't wait for the next chapter to be really and I can't wait to see what kind of a distraction that you have in mind.
7919718 I'm glad you enjoyed the new chapter. Hopefully the next one won't take so long to finish. Can I ask what you mean by distraction though? Do you mean what the CMC will use to try and get free?
7920478 Chapter 2 and 3, mostly because the scenes were longer, but also I think Scootaloo's lost virginity was a surprise that messed with the whole setup for her rape.
Yes I was wondering what the cmc was going to use to try to get free and I think that you should have sweetie belle to be allow to be able to see past the basement and the bathroom as well.
7920660 Well, half of the next chapter was written before I even finished this one. So, I can already tell you that one of those things will happen soon
Well, the story's pretty well written, but it would be nice if you managed to squeeze in some more description. Write in very fine detail everything they're feeling, from how the CMCs insides felt, to the texture of the captor's cocks. Also, the actual orgasms need more oomph. Like how they arched their backs, to how they lose themselves in pleasure, all that good-bad-stuff.
Also, don't mind the dislikes. They're from people who don't like the idea of rape and all. It's just that rape isn't exactly a very... accepted fetish, even with ponies.
7928235 Thanks for the feedback. I definitely do need to get better about fleshing out the details of the rape, and I will try to improve on that for future chapters. As for the dislikes, I went into this story expecting to get far more of them than I have. Rape is niche enough fetish on its own, but then add in that it's happening to young fillies and is as dark as it is. It didn't surprise me that so many people disliked it out of principle. What did surprise me was the positive criticism I've received. This fic has had a much better reception than I ever could have hoped.
Wow, this is one of the few good rape stories I've read, and it is a good one. Actual story between raping? Character development? Smart, well thought out plans? Amazing!
As usual, the comments are almost better than the story. Where are you bleeding hearts when someone posts a vore or farting fetish fic?
7917898
I don't really mind honestly. Most of the anti rape porn comments I've gotten only expressed issues with the subject matter, and a few even tossed a complement my way despite their disgust with the rape. I have yet to receive any kind of personal attack for this, which is better than I expected.
7917937 this story is... something alright
7918276
I'm interested in knowing what you mean by that
How are the kidnappers going to react when they find out what kidnapping the CMC really means. Let's go down the list from least to the "You're so screwed that they haven't invented how screwed you are yet." :
1)Rainbow Dash- not much resources but she makes up for it with hoof to hoof fighting skills.
2)Pinkie Pie- Just on word; Cupcakes. No one will ever find the bodies after Pinkamena get's done and on a side note Sugar Cube Corner is having a 2 for 1 cupcake sale.
3)Fluttershy- She might be timed, but then again she lives next to one of the most dangerous forrests around and all it would take is one mouse, bird, or even a bug to tell her what happened and she can lead a freaking army of animals from the Everfree to get the girls back.
4)Rarity- Let's just say having friends in the right circles can also mean having friends whose money comes from less than legal means i.e. who do you think sells nice suits to mob bosses in Canterlot and Manehatten?
5)Apple Jack- Given the size of the Apple Family Clan and the Orange's and Pineapple's off branches of their family they count as mafia family \ army on their own with contection and resources all across Equestria and beyond.
6)Princess Twilight Sparkle- Sure, she doesn't use her royal status much, but she has tons of magical power, knowledge, and can call on other very powerful and knowledgeable magic users like Starlight Glimmer and Sunset Shimmer.
7)Shining Armor and Princess Cadence- If the Apple Family counts as an army then these two can call on 2 armies, The Royal Gaurds and the Crystal Gaurds as well as every law enforcement member in Equestria and the Crystal Empire.
8)Princess Luna- You can run and you can try to hide, but sooner or later you have to sleep.
9)Spike- Sure he's a baby dragon, but he's a baby dragon that the Dragon Lord Ember owes a favor to since she wouldn't be the Dragon Lord without his help.
10)Princess Celestia- The rest might be able to call on bits and piece of Equestria for help, but she can call upon all of Equestria and it's allies to search for them. I'm also pretty sure she can call upon any inmate in Tartarus who would like shave some time off the sentences in service to the crown.
11)Discord- We hello there, I'm Discord, lord of Chaos. With a simple snap of my fingers the kidnappers will wish one of the others got to them first and look I brought friends. This is Thorax, King of the Changelings and his whole army. Then we have the Great and Powerful Trixie wear a darling little piece called the Alicorn Amulet. Finally we have my old college room mates the Smooze and his hippy girlfriend Treehugger and Dr. Whooves and the ever bubblely Derpy. So feel free to piss yourself before trying to run away, I wouldn't want our fun to be interupted by something silly like a bathroom break.
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This comment almost makes me want to do a spinoff series about all the many gruesome ways the main characters could get their revenge
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Succeed or fail, I can't imagine the CMC not at least attempting to get out on their own.
I really liked the way you punish scootaloo and I really liked how the chapter went and I can't wait for the next chapter to be really and I can't wait to see what kind of a distraction that you have in mind.
7919718
I'm glad you enjoyed the new chapter. Hopefully the next one won't take so long to finish. Can I ask what you mean by distraction though? Do you mean what the CMC will use to try and get free?
The clop bits were a bit short as usual, but the chapter was otherwise good.
7920352
Thank you
If I may ask, in what chapter do you think I did the best clop? So, I can use it as a frame of reference.
7920478
Chapter 2 and 3, mostly because the scenes were longer, but also I think Scootaloo's lost virginity was a surprise that messed with the whole setup for her rape.
7920506
Ok, thank you.
Yes I was wondering what the cmc was going to use to try to get free and I think that you should have sweetie belle to be allow to be able to see past the basement and the bathroom as well.
7920660
Well, half of the next chapter was written before I even finished this one. So, I can already tell you that one of those things will happen soon
I like to see the the kidnapper's reaction when a VERY angry Mane 6 and family members and friends find them
Well, the story's pretty well written, but it would be nice if you managed to squeeze in some more description. Write in very fine detail everything they're feeling, from how the CMCs insides felt, to the texture of the captor's cocks. Also, the actual orgasms need more oomph. Like how they arched their backs, to how they lose themselves in pleasure, all that good-bad-stuff.
Also, don't mind the dislikes. They're from people who don't like the idea of rape and all. It's just that rape isn't exactly a very... accepted fetish, even with ponies.
7928235
Thanks for the feedback. I definitely do need to get better about fleshing out the details of the rape, and I will try to improve on that for future chapters. As for the dislikes, I went into this story expecting to get far more of them than I have. Rape is niche enough fetish on its own, but then add in that it's happening to young fillies and is as dark as it is. It didn't surprise me that so many people disliked it out of principle. What did surprise me was the positive criticism I've received. This fic has had a much better reception than I ever could have hoped.
7930743
Thanks!
Please say there's going to be a chapter 6! I am hooked to this story and want to know what happens next!
7939706
Oh yeah, there's going to be a few more chapters. Glad you're enjoying the story!
Wow, this is one of the few good rape stories I've read, and it is a good one. Actual story between raping? Character development? Smart, well thought out plans? Amazing!
7942611
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it.
7918413 fuck yeah! Do it!
Not bad.
There's no indication where scenes change but I adapt quickly.
You know, the idea of a Unicorn mare with a magic restrictor band permanently attached to her horn is hot.
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I absolutely agree, but I love it when rape and sex slavery is demeaning, so I'm bias.
Do you mean "or"