7864229 Well, thank you for reading. I always like to hear what people think of what I write, even if they don't like it. I'm afraid I don't have an answer to your question though.
7865328 I'm glad you left this comment, and I have two things I want to say in response. I apologize for how long this comment is going to be, but I have a lot to say. The first is an explanation for why I can enjoy rape fiction, and even full blown rape clop. Rape is terrible, and I would never want to be raped. War is terrible, and I would never want to be in the middle of one. Yet I play war video games, and one of my favorite movies is Saving Private Ryan. We can act out ideas in fiction that we would otherwise find disgusting, because we know that we are not actually hurting anyone. You ask why people like me are interested in rape. Another person could ask why someone might like horror movies about serial killers, which is arguably even more disturbing. We can enjoy these things because these aren't people being hurt, its the ideas of people that are being raped. The second thing I want to say relates to the story itself, and what my intention is with this story. While I'm not completely satisfied with how I've handled it so far, my ultimate goal here is to provide something that's fairly rare in rape fics. Rape victims that aren't defined by what's happening to them. Sweetie Belle for example, I want there to be more to her in my story than just a girl who gets raped. She's kind and trusting to a fault. She's not the fighter her friends are, and because of that turns to other survival tactics besides resistance or escape, (although she does try that somewhat.) She's not scared of becoming pregnant because she doesn't want to have a kid yet, she's not scared of her rapists because she thinks they'll hurt her. Sweetie Belle is scared that her life is no longer in her control, and that she may never see her family again. Sweetie Belle isn't just a victim, I want her to be a character. So, while I can understand why you are upset, I just want you to know that even though I am writing rape clop, I am doing my best to treat the concept with respect. Edit: Well at least as much respect as I can considering I am still writing porn
I suppose they're uninterested in anal? The two seem to be very vanilla in their rape choices. This chapter was alright, but it felt a little too similar to the Sweetie chapter I think.
7865957 Its funny you bring up anal, because I am actually working on the fic's first anal scene right now. As for the similarities to Sweetie's chapter, that is something I've really been trying to avoid while writing Scootaloo's chapter. You'll have to let me know if you think I succeeded. Also, I'm happy to see you are still reading this. You've provided me with a lot of useful feedback, and I appreciate that.
“It really doesn’t matter, it’s not like she can go anywhere while we’re watching anyway. Before we start though, I’m going to take her gag out. The unicorn Umber and I fucked earlier had some delicious screams, but I could barely hear them through her gag.” Tinker shrugged. They had to be talking about Sweetie Belle. What had they done to her that had made her scream? The color drained from her face, ‘What are they going to do to me?’
...Bloom wondering what they did to make Belle scream, is kinda redundant considering Onyx just said they fucked her, not a second beforehand.
I have but one question for you. Why? Not when, not where, not who, and not what. Just why.
Otherwise the story was, unfortunately, well written and chactors are consistent.
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Well, thank you for reading. I always like to hear what people think of what I write, even if they don't like it. I'm afraid I don't have an answer to your question though.
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I'm glad you left this comment, and I have two things I want to say in response. I apologize for how long this comment is going to be, but I have a lot to say.
The first is an explanation for why I can enjoy rape fiction, and even full blown rape clop. Rape is terrible, and I would never want to be raped. War is terrible, and I would never want to be in the middle of one. Yet I play war video games, and one of my favorite movies is Saving Private Ryan. We can act out ideas in fiction that we would otherwise find disgusting, because we know that we are not actually hurting anyone. You ask why people like me are interested in rape. Another person could ask why someone might like horror movies about serial killers, which is arguably even more disturbing. We can enjoy these things because these aren't people being hurt, its the ideas of people that are being raped.
The second thing I want to say relates to the story itself, and what my intention is with this story. While I'm not completely satisfied with how I've handled it so far, my ultimate goal here is to provide something that's fairly rare in rape fics. Rape victims that aren't defined by what's happening to them.
Sweetie Belle for example, I want there to be more to her in my story than just a girl who gets raped. She's kind and trusting to a fault. She's not the fighter her friends are, and because of that turns to other survival tactics besides resistance or escape, (although she does try that somewhat.) She's not scared of becoming pregnant because she doesn't want to have a kid yet, she's not scared of her rapists because she thinks they'll hurt her. Sweetie Belle is scared that her life is no longer in her control, and that she may never see her family again. Sweetie Belle isn't just a victim, I want her to be a character.
So, while I can understand why you are upset, I just want you to know that even though I am writing rape clop, I am doing my best to treat the concept with respect.
Edit: Well at least as much respect as I can considering I am still writing porn
I suppose they're uninterested in anal? The two seem to be very vanilla in their rape choices.
This chapter was alright, but it felt a little too similar to the Sweetie chapter I think.
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Its funny you bring up anal, because I am actually working on the fic's first anal scene right now. As for the similarities to Sweetie's chapter, that is something I've really been trying to avoid while writing Scootaloo's chapter. You'll have to let me know if you think I succeeded. Also, I'm happy to see you are still reading this. You've provided me with a lot of useful feedback, and I appreciate that.
Looks interesting, looking foward to reading more of it.
funny enough my main OC for RPs named Gizmo the Tinker, Although I don't use him for this kind of thing, I have an OC with a trap just for that.
i wonder if the stallions will get some sort of punishment >:3
Not to be mean or anything, but...
...Bloom wondering what they did to make Belle scream, is kinda redundant considering Onyx just said they fucked her, not a second beforehand.
Still a good story so far.
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I don't imagine that she'd know the word fuck. At least that's the thought process I had
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Even if she did understand the word fuck. I imagine she might have interpreted it to mean "screwed over" instead of "had sex with"
Unf~ I love it when Applebloom hopelessly screams the names of her siblings
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Such a hot idea, I love using it.