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Riendeer


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When the three tribes, and their leaders, left to find a new land, some poor souls were left behind. Some were too stubborn to leave the only home they’d ever known, others were prisoners of many different crimes left to rot, others still were just too poor to afford a cart or ship. But just as the three leaders had to unite, so did those who were left behind.
Instead of unicorns, pegasi, and earth ponies, over time they became reindeer/caribou, elk, and moose.

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Not bad, a bit short on description though.

7849876 I will try to work on that. I try to keep descriptions short as to not be tedious, but find difficulty trying to create a balance in descriptions.

7853490 At the moment, it's really short. I have almost no real picture of the scene.

7853492 I'll go back and re-edit it, I'll let you know when it's done.

Honest question, would you like some constructive criticism on this story? I might be able to help a little if you're looking for it.

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