• Published 31st Oct 2016
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A Sunset to Remember~ - Neon_Spirit



Rainbow Dash is going through depression, whilst a certain stallion is focused on asking his mare friend a question which will change both of their lives.

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First and Last chapter

Rainbow Dash flew.

At this moment in time; that was the only thing she felt good at,

so she flew.

All day she had let every pony down,

so she flew.

She even let down her friends,

so she flew.

Including the Wonderbolts,

so she flew.

Including Soarin-

She halted.

That is what she was most sad about. She ruined her special some pony's day. She had never felt more disappointment in herself than she did right now, at this moment. 'If Only' were two words she was particularly fond of. Two words that could have changed everything, including this, sad feeling lurking within her.

It was Soarins birthday today. Everything was going well; ponies were dancing, singing and generally just having fun.

Except for one pony. Who would have believed it? It was Soarin.

Rainbow Dash would turn up to practically any party that any pony sent her an invitation to, but not Soarins.

Why?

Not because she forgot, not because she had injured one of her wings again, not that she was ill.....

She just didn't show up.

Rainbow Dash finally got to a soft, secure cloud to sit on. She thought about earlier that day. She remembered the reason why she didn't show up.....

"Hey.."

Rainbows head snapped around upon hearing another ponies voice.

It was slick and soothing, it warmed her heart yet- it was the one pony she didn't want to see at this point.

The sky was pink; fading into a dark; ocean blue. Dash chose to say nothing and turned her head away from the stallion, whom was flying just above the cloud that she was still perched on.

Much to her dismay, he landed softly on the cloud next to her, gazing at her with a warm, gentle smile.

Rainbow Dash simply closed her eyes so that she would not meet his gaze.

Sighing in defeat, Soarin turned his head to look at the now purple sky, with princess Luna's moon now rising and glowing like a pearl in amidst the dark sapphire shield separating Equastria from planets and moons beyond its surface. The stars glowed different shades of silver, and the sky had turned into a painting.

Yet, a certain mares eyes were still looking down despite the stunning scenery.

"Its beautiful out tonight,'' Soarin stated. "and just to think that the princesses have given me this beautiful setting on my birthday..''

Soarin turned back to the mare who still had her eyes firmly closed, which he did not notice, which he could not notice because she was still not facing him. "Funny isn't it?'' Soarin carried on with a light chuckle.

"That any pony would think tonight, that this sky that the princesses have set, is the most beautiful thing, when it isn't, however the stunning picture that stands before that; is the mares face who ceases to even meet my gaze.''

At this moment the cyan coated mare's mouth opened slightly, formed from a small gasp, as her head slowly turned around meeting his emerald pools with a shade of pink blooming on her cheeks.

"I ruined it; your birthday.'' Dash spoke softly to him maintaining her tears that were full of self disappointment.

"Why didn't you come?'' Soarin asked as he shifted closer to her.

Rainbow Dash let out a sigh. "I-I'm so sorry..'' Rainbows hooves shifted over her face whilst she gently sobbed into them.

Soarin felt his heart sink. He draped a wing around her. "Don't worry; I know why. I asked too soon."

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Earlier that day....

Before Soarins party, Dash was trotting happily around Ponyville, until she bumped into Soarin.

"Happy birthday my special somepony'' Rainbow stated as she nuzzled him. He returned the nuzzle. "Dash; I have something to ask you..'' Rainbow looked at him with concern as he started to sweat with worry. "Go ahead.''

"Not here..'' Soarin took Dashes hoof and lead her behind some trees where there was a lake softly flowing and the sun beaming down on the setting.

"We've been dating for about five months now..'' Soarin stated as Rainbow let out a chuckle.

"How did I survive??'' she asked rhetorically as she turned to him with a playful grin.

Soarin let out a sigh. He breathed in. "Rainbow Dash; I love you, more then any mare..''

"But..'' Rainbow asked as tears formed her eyes as disappointment spread across her face.

"But what?'' Soarin asked confused.

"I get it; you want to break up with me? DONT YOU!! PATHETIC! ASKING TO BREAK UP WITH YOU ON YOUR BIRTHDAY !!!!!!!!!

Rainbow yelled as tears rolled down her cheeks as Soarin stood still, speechless. "What are you talking about Dashie??'' ''DONT DASHIE ME!!!!!" Rainbow shouted as she flew off.
Soarin was left confused, surprised and mostly heart broken. He had to fix this; whether it was at his party, or later that evening.
He didn't go after her as he figured she needed some space; and time alone.

-----------------------------------------------------------Back to the present....

"Don't you get it?'' Soarin asked. "I wasn't wanting to break up with you..''

"Then what was it??'' Dash asked, her eyes red from her sobbing.

"I was going to ask you to marry me.''

Rainbow Dashes heart thumped in her chest. She couldn't think of what to say,
so she just asked the first thing that came to her mind. "Why?''

"What do you mean 'why' Dashie?''

"I'm pathetic, I didn't trust you, I ruined your birthday-''

"But that doesn't stop me from loving you.'' Soarin stated with their muzzles inches apart.

"So Rainbow Danger Dash, will you marry me?''

Rainbow was caught off guard. The pony she admired and loved most asked her a question that would change her life forever.

"Yes.''

Author's Note:

I might make a sequel in the future..
But for now, enjoy some Soarin dash!:raritywink:

Comments ( 32 )

7683524 thank you so much;
hehe, glad you liked it:twilightsheepish:
If I have time I'll make a sequel some time in the future ^^

:heart: This was so cute :pinkiesad2: Sequel please!

7683726 I'm glad you think so:twilightsheepish::twilightblush:
And I'll consider it:raritywink:

Oh Mighty Celestia herself!!!!!! You made me die brah. xd Also make a sequel!!!!!! Ill proofread it myself if it'll help! You earned my respect

7683890 Thank you so much:twilightblush::yay:

7684415 Thank you so much!:rainbowkiss:
I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

7684711 thank you!!!:rainbowkiss::heart:
I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile::pinkiehappy:

7684400 Of course Neon!!!!! But seriously I'm watching for that sequel :3

7685469 hehe; no pressure then:twilightsheepish:

7685524 Hey if you write it ill edit it ^_^

7687466 I'll keep that offer in mind:twilightsmile:
Thank you!

7687894 Not a problem Neon ^_^

Wow.....My heart just went......BOOM!!!! loved it :rainbowlaugh::pinkiesad2:

7695387 Hehe; glad you did:twilightsmile::twilightsheepish:

7695716 :pinkiehappy: hey umm...is it to much to ask for a sequal?:pinkiesmile:

7697561 I might make a sequel some time in the future; however I'm far behind with request art on DA:twilightblush:

7697724 Oh.....ok:pinkiesad2: I understand

7697777 I'll probably still make a sequel; its just that I'll probably write it at a later date^^

Huh... I'm honestly really confused...

7736024 Basically its Soarins birthday and Soarin was going to ask Dash to marry him however she thought that he was going to dump her so before he could say anything she flew off and then soarin met up with her and explained everything and asked her to marry him and Rainbow said yes.

7736293

But why did she blow up like that? It's way out of character for her.

7737096 Because it shows that she is used to rejection (in this story) so as well as adding a reason as to why she didn't turn up; It also makes some readers feel sorry for Rainbow Dash and that Soarin is the only one who would truly stay by her side and never leave her.

7737795


I guess that makes sense. Don't take this the wrong way, but that sounds a bot like lazy writing. If you had a prequel were she had been rejected a lot then this would make more sense, but write now it's just confusing. That aside this is fairly well written and the consept is great so I give you a B+.

7737836 I'm knew to writing stories; so I'm thrilled to get a B+:twilightsmile:Thanks!:twilightsheepish:

7738452

We've all been their at some point.

7738475 heh yeah; I can imagine:twilightsmile::twilightsheepish:

OMG!!!!!THIS IS AWESOME!PLEASE MAKE A SEQUEL,AND PLEASE SAY YES!!!!

Absolutely beautiful. There deserves to be a sequel.

pretty cute. i would have liked it to be longer but its still adorabul:pinkiehappy:

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