Behind Her Smile

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Pathos14489

Pathos14489 #1 · Aug 6th, 2016 · · · Her Secret ·

Hm. It was rather short, that's one complaint. Though I like the idea behind it, and the grammar is not too shabby if I do say so myself, I feel like it would benefit from a longer chapter. And the Intro chapter seems a tad unnecessary to me, perhaps merely adding it into this one with a break in between it would suffice, or taking it out entirely. But that's not to say I don't see potential for you. If you could try and write longer chapters, you'd probably write something pretty good in my book, but this is just a little too short to be amazing to me.

But none-the-less, good job.

Malice In Wonderland

Malice In Wonderland #2 · Aug 6th, 2016 · · · Her Secret ·

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It was just something I whipped up because I felt like it. If enough people like it by the end of the week I'll probably rewrite it, making it longer and adding a bunch of detail and maybe a few more chapters.

Thanks though.

Pathos14489

Pathos14489 #3 · Aug 6th, 2016 · · · Her Secret ·

7457206 Okkie dokie. ^w^

Malice In Wonderland

Malice In Wonderland #4 · Aug 6th, 2016 · · · Her Secret ·

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I've written quite a few other stories, though a lot of them are short and I just whipped them up for no reason like this one. But you can check them out if you want. I'd like to hear your opinion on them if you're interested.

Pathos14489

Pathos14489 #5 · Aug 6th, 2016 · · · Her Secret ·

7457216 Sure! I'll check them out in a bit, I'm nervously watching my own recently posted fic at the moment. XD Lemme grab an iced coffee and I'll check it out.

Malice In Wonderland