A very nice chapter indeed!

Hooray! This story is back!

Welcome back

As usual, your writing abilities and your way with describing things is top-knotch. Though this chapter surprisingly dealt with Luna less than the prior chapters and while I liked the idea of him having to climb his way out of the shoe, it took up a massive portion of the dream's challenge over all and the ending that actually involved Luna had so very little. I kinda wish that during his climbing challenge that Luna would have been sitting there before him and teasing him just as she was towards the end; actively messing with his attempts and perhaps after having failed the challenge he would be forced to a more involved challenge with her hoof.

Nonetheless, I still like this chapter but I wish it had Luna being involved more in the challenge like she was in the prior challenges.

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That is some valid criticism. My only defense is that the overarching theme of the story is Spike's evolution. From hating himself and seeing Luna as his enemy, to embracing himself and seeing Luna as an ally. This is about the half-way point in the story where Spike is on the cusps of making the shift, so I backed Luna off to enhance the impression that Spike is really just fighting himself.

However, you are totally right. I should have at least kept Luna in the background as a looming threat. Maybe I'll go back some day and add in something like the distant thunder of her jogging as she cooled down, just to smooth out the consistency between chapters. Thank you for your thoughts. I don't get enough comments that really help me improve my work.

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When is Luna going to stop this, this is proving I don't want her anywhere near my dreams even more than usual.

I'm glad this is finally back. I've been waiting for it.

Great chapter; love the hoof teasing. I loved it a little too much to be honest

my prayers have been anwsered

When are the next chapters going to be posted? I have to know what Happens!

I hope you will continue! And I hope he will get a challenge where he has to climb into her ear from deep inside her dirty sweaty mane. :)

#ReviveStory please.

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Probably never. I just don't care about this story anymore. I think I'm going to officially cancel it and move on.

Ah sad, I wanted more of this.