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The Contract of Pressure

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Lobster #1 · Dec 21st, 2016 · 2 · · Prologue ·

The story's premise is pretty good, but you mix present and past tense in every sentence, and this makes it very hard to read. Your grammar and sentence structure is very strange and I had a hard time understanding the meaning of lots of what was written.

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Rye Snoot #8 · Dec 24th, 2016 · · · CH 4 Scream in Pain ·

You know what I think i'm going to make 2 more just like this.

Rye Snoot #9 · Apr 5th, 2017 · · · Prologue ·

7809329 I will be fixing some stuff... Don't threat it will take about few weeks.

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