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A young maid named Clementine works her way up from the scullery. Set in Equestria's pre-industrial past, she experiences mystery, mayhem and magic, and a touch of romance.
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Incomplete Published: Oct 1st, 2018 Download
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Asolem2
Asolem2 #1 · Oct 2nd, 2018 · · · Part 1, Chapter 1: The Maid of the Library ·
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"Yes, my lady. My lady? Why do you keep doing that?"

"With the quill? In due time, oh impertinent questioner of her betters. Now, I lay in wait in the library, behind the ricepaper screen, for several nights. I kept myself entertained by reading, of course. I used a nightvision spell so no light would show. And I listened. And one night, I heard something, and went to look who it was. At that moment I suddenly had the urge to write a letter to my nephew asking him to visit. It's the strangest thing. I don't even like my nephew. But there am I, scribbling away, all thoughts of catching the mystery pony vanished."

She poked herself again as Clementine's mouth dropped open. "Yes, very curious. I'm usually quite focused. So I resolved to try again, and one night, I heard a noise. I peeked over my screen and I saw... I can't remember. I have a very good memory too, and at first I clearly recall having remembered, and making a plan for the morning. But I can't even remember what that plan was. At this point, I realized I was dealing with something quite unusual."

Ohhh, she's pooking herself to remember/focus on Clementine :moustache:

She touched her foreleg where the lock of hair was knotted and thought of Clementine. She glanced down at it and was surprised to see that the hair was thick, luxurious and luminously golden. How interesting!

Isn't it though :pinkiecrazy:


I like it, its interesting :twilightsmile:

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #2 · Oct 2nd, 2018 · · · Part 1, Chapter 1: The Maid of the Library ·
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9205888
Thanks. I'm listening to a lecture course on creative writing and I hope I'm getting better at making people want to keep reading. The characters are pretty vivid in my mind at the moment, including the characters in the story-in-the-story.

fimfictionfan
fimfictionfan #3 · Oct 3rd, 2018 · · · Part 1, Chapter 1: The Maid of the Library ·
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This is wonderful, intriguing start to a story; can't wait for another chapter:pinkiehappy:

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #4 · Oct 3rd, 2018 · · · Part 1, Chapter 1: The Maid of the Library ·
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9207504
Thanks! I'm trying to work on better plotting. I hope starting off with her reading an action novel isn't too cheap of a hook, but there may be just a bit of foreshadowing there as well.

Kek lel
Kek lel #8 · Oct 9th, 2018 · · · Chapter 2 ·
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9218581
Tenkyou for making this

Asolem2
Asolem2 #9 · Jan 23rd, 2019 · · · Chapter 3 ·
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Now i just (not the only thing, just the most immediate) want to know if it is to late to save Pansy or not :pinkiesad2:

Starlight Nova
Starlight Nova #11 · Apr 17th, 2019 · · · Chapter 4 ·
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I hope you're not planning on continuing this trend of updating only twice a year.

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #12 · Apr 17th, 2019 · · · Chapter 4 ·
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9570576
Maybe I should finish it first then publish the whole thing, but sometimes I feel the need for feedback. That being said i’ll try to do another chapter this week. I feel the flow again and I want to keep it going.

Asolem2
Asolem2 #13 · Apr 24th, 2019 · · · Chapter 5 ·
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Lady Rubymane cast about, looking for the intruder. "I know you must be in here! You keep bringing me food, to tempt me! Well, it's not going to work, I tell you!" The scent of the hot vegetable bullion wafted from the tray, causing her to nearly drool on herself as she looked at it through slitted eyes. There were salted crackers, as well, and a cup of soothing camomile tea. "Weak... I'm so weak."

This is more hilarious than it has any right to be :pinkiecrazy:

She stared at him. "I... I don't know. I suppose it must have been one of the staff, but I don't remember."

"As far as I know, I am the only member of the staff who can read, and it was not me."

"Gold. A shade of blonde I did not know was possible outside of story books. And wavy, not kinked and wiry." He took a few steps closer and the metallic effect vanished, her hair returned to its expected level of drab and unmanageable. "About five yards, I should say. That's the range of the alteration spell." His gravelly voice sounded like it was coming from every direction in the small room, as she walked shakily back to her seat, her eyes wide with shock.

This mystery gets more and more interesting :pinkiecrazy:

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #14 · Apr 24th, 2019 · · · Chapter 5 ·
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9585706
Next update should be soon. I was going over on chapter 5 so I split it in two. Chapter 6 is almost finished. You might also see another tag on the story then. :moustache:

Asolem2
Asolem2 #15 · Apr 24th, 2019 · · · Chapter 5 ·
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9585934
I'll be very sad if the tag says "Tragedy"

Night Of The Roses
Night Of The Roses #17 · Apr 25th, 2019 · · · Chapter 6 ·
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I am...
very interested!
I must say it's a bit of a shame that this story has so few views, it's a fun read and I'm immersed in the mystery of Clementine's real identity.

Asolem2
Asolem2 #19 · Apr 25th, 2019 · · · Chapter 6 ·
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Her vision cleared and she saw a tall, elegant figure with a long neck, snow white coat, wearing a gold pectoral, crown and shoes, all with sapphire stones, her horn long and exquisitely spiraled, mane and tail blowing in a non-existent breeze, translucent and glowing in colors of the northern lights. Princess Celestia!

This will be interesting :pinkiecrazy:

Asolem2
Asolem2 #20 · May 5th, 2019 · · · Chapter 7 ·
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The library door, which had been cleared of its barricade, burst open, and Giacolto walked in, looking like the last survivor of a desperate battle. "Your highness, we have a problem."

That's an understatement :moustache:


And this is just getting more and more interesting :twilightsmile:

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #21 · May 5th, 2019 · · · Chapter 7 ·
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9605812
I'm putting a lot of thought into the next part of the story. I think I'll call it, "Part 2: The Maid of Everfree." Then go back and call the first part "Part 1: The Maid." If I called it The Maid of the Library, it would give away too much. Edit: Then again she gets made MoL in the first chapter so maybe it's not giving up all that much, and the story is already called The Maid.

How's the pacing? Is it moving to slow, too fast, too jerky?

Asolem2
Asolem2 #22 · May 5th, 2019 · · · Chapter 7 ·
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9605818
I haven't noticed any real problems so far.

Asolem2
Asolem2 #24 · May 9th, 2019 · · · Part 2, Chapter 8: The Maid of Everfree ·
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Oh sister, what are you up to now?

I feel like I have missed some clues here :trixieshiftright:

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #25 · May 9th, 2019 · · · Part 2, Chapter 8: The Maid of Everfree ·
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9613500
Maybe I need to add some foreshadowing to an earlier chapter then.

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #26 · May 9th, 2019 · · · Part 2, Chapter 8: The Maid of Everfree ·
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9613500
I went back and changed the setting of her first bookspell in chapter 4 to a moonlight scene. I’ll do the same with chapter 7. Thanks!

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #27 · May 10th, 2019 · · · Part 2, Chapter 8: The Maid of Everfree ·
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Chapters 4 and 7 have been edited to give foreshadowing for the reveal at the end of chapter 8.

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #28 · May 19th, 2019 · · · Part 1, Chapter 1: The Maid of the Library ·
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Edited to show literary excerpts in a quotebox. Thanks, Goldenwing!

Asolem2
Asolem2 #29 · Sep 15th, 2019 · · · Chapter 9 ·
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Things keep getting more and more interesting :twilightsmile:

Dinkledash
Dinkledash #30 · Sep 16th, 2019 · · · Chapter 9 ·
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9833505
Gooseberry surprised me tbh.

Griffonheart2012
Griffonheart2012 #31 · Oct 21st, 2019 · · · Chapter 9 ·
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Pretty damn good so far. What I thought was a simple story about a down on her luck filly turned into an adventure involving Age Spells, foreign powers and Nightmare Moon. Damn good story, can't wait for an update.

Asolem2
Asolem2 #32 · Jan 19th, 2021 · · · Chapter 11 ·
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The Count accuse him of taking the bribe. He was arrested, and they pull out all his pinfeather until he make the confession.

All I can think about when reading this line is "Torture someone enough, and they'll confess to anything" :trixieshiftleft:

Asolem2
Asolem2 #33 · Jan 19th, 2021 · · · Chapter 11 ·
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The Captain's eyes could have been chiseled from flint. "That would be speculation, Mistress Fraîche. Now, hurry and catch your ship before she vanishes, and my compliments to Captain du Gaspony."

The answer is: "Whoever could get Equestria on their side" :trixieshiftleft:

AmlpfanREADER
AmlpfanREADER #34 · Sep 5th, 2022 · · · Chapter 11 ·
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Clementine? sounds like a game character

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